It was a dark night. The moon was only a weak sliver of light, poking through the clouds. 1
A tall sillhouette strode purposefully along the small trail. There were many forks and small paths leading away into the forest, but the mysterious figure knew the way. He had been along this path many times, so was able to navigate through the confusing trail even now, in the pitch blackness of this night.2
There was a small baby resting in his arms, swathed in blankets. It wasn't even a day old, the size of a girl's doll. The baby was sound asleep, the many layers of blankets shielding him from the slight chill in the air.3
The figure turned right at the last fork. The new trail was going deep into the forest, its sides both bordered by trees, their trunks no more than a metre apart. He traveled along the path for a minute more, searching for the entrance. 4
Finally, he found it. A slightly larger gap between a row of trees. The entrance was only noticed by those who had been notified about it.5
The figure slipped through the entrance and sneaked down the small tree-lined walkway.6
He finally reached his goal, a vast stone building. It looked like a terrifying grey monster, its enormous door about to swallow him up.7
The man tiptoed up to the doorstep surreptiliously. He gave the baby a kiss on the forehead and placed it by the door.8
The task had been quick and silent. 9
That was how things were at the Academy of Assasination.
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Comments
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A brisk, well written introduction to your story. It has a good hook at the end but the beginnings a little cliche, it reminded me of a thousand similar stories before it. Your grammar and spelling is really good and it was well constructed though. This seems to have the basis to become a wonderful book. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Great
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Very nice. It makes me want to read more. It's quick and easy to read. Thanks for entering this into my contest.
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I liked it, a very nice image was produced in my mind, and I could see what was happening. The description was magnificent. The ending made me really wonder what the academy was, and if the baby was going to be a student, or be killed.
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This, I have to admit, is better than my own writing. Your description was really good and I got a very clear image in my mind of what was happening as I read it and the ending really brought up what your story is going to be about (I think). Academy of Assassination... sounds good!
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