Time and Time again Part I

Forty-five minutes on the clock in the Torchwood Institute, Captain Jack Harkness watches it tick away. Ianto Jones, Gwen Cooper watch as well as Jack turned around to look at them and said “I’m sorry, so very sorry there’s nothing I can do to stop this.” They turn their attention to Jack with a worried look on their faces. Thinking back Jack remembers what caused this in the first place. It started two days ago they were chasing after some Hystras which are creatures that feed on human flesh of the dead. The Earth shook violently and they stopped chasing the Hystras. The Hystras feeling the shock wave of the attack teleported back to their universe. 1

The world started to slow its spin, Captain Jack typed into the substation computer in the Torchwood vehicle which links up with Torchwood. He accessed the Earth satellites to see what was going on in space; a large mechanical looking space ship was in direct view of the satellite. At first glance it looked like a Dalek warship, but it was different somehow and Jack couldn’t put his finger on it. It seemed to be shooting a beam at the Earth. Jack punched in some more keys on the keyboard and punched up the analysis of the beam. The data appeared on the screen “Analysis complete, beam is a form of tractor beam that is slowing down the planet’s rotation.” Jack got a shocked look on his face and turned to Ianto, and Gwen. Gwen spoke up, “What is it Jack?”2

“If this data is correct then the planet has only about two days before it stops spinning and revolving around the sun.” Jack said grimly. 3

“What does that mean sir?” Ianto asked.4

“That means that if the Earth stops spinning that one side will always be day time and the other side will always have night. Which means time itself will no longer be measured as we know it. Tides on earth will flood inland. This could be very bad and it could cause the Earth from its orbit and kill everything on it.” Jack explained.5

“Couldn’t we call The Doctor for help?” Gwen asked.6

“I could try but it’s iffy if I’d even be able to reach him.” Jack said.7

After they arrived at Torchwood, Jack sent out a message to the Queen warning her of what he had discovered. Without the original Torchwood Institute there would be no way of destroying the ship from stopping the Earth still. Jack then punched into the computer the TARDIS code that he had gotten from Sara Jane. He transmitted his message “This is Captain Jack Harkness calling the Doctor. We need you now. The planet is being attacked by an unknown alien and its stopping the planet’s rotation. Please Doctor If you are out there; we need you.”8

This was the last thing Jack decided to remember from there the world panicked and was in utter chaos. It was unsafe to go out into the streets alone. People were going mad from the constant state of day or night depending on what the case was. 9

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The Doctor opened the TARDIS doors and walked to the console as it started to beep. He pressed a few buttons and Jacks’ message appeared on his screen. Then he immediately sent the TARDIS to travel to Earth to investigate what this ship was doing and what it was up to. The TARDIS then vanished from its position and traveled threw the time vortex. The blue police box reappeared on Earth five days prior to the visit of the ship. The Doctor exited the TARDIS and walked into the Torchwood Institute.11

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This is only the first part of Time and Time again, I'm posting it to get some feed back on it. It will then be joined with part 2 , and the same format of asking for feed back and so forth with part 3 and 4. I hope to have four parts of this. If your looking to make this episode into a youtube fan video please feel free to ask me for permission to use it.

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  • Okay

    You repeate quit a few things in the story. For instance. In the first paragraph there are many things, first starting with the characters name. Usually, the name only needs to be repeated once in a aparagraph.

    'It started two days ago they were chasing after some Hystras which are creatures that feed on human flesh of the dead. The Earth shook violently and they stopped chasing the Hystras. The Hystras feeling the shock wave of the attack teleported back to their universe. 1'

    I think something like 'The Earth shook violently and the group stopped chasing the deadly creature'. I'm not sure, but I think this is a first copy? I think you just need to go back and do a revision.

    Good job and keep writing!

    Summer

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.

  • Awesome

    I like how this starts- it gets you sucked into the story and then lets the readers dangle and wait in suspense for the next part. Awesome!


  • Rosemary silver member
    May 23

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    Good Story

    I think the beginning started with lots of action and intrique and left off with a cliff hanger. I think you might add more to the descriptions of the chaos on the streets to bring the point home a little more.

  • V l
    May 23
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    If this is just part one. Man Fiz I cann't for te next parts. I love your take on Doctor Who.