"Why couldn't they just accept me?" She sobbed to herself repeatedly. "Why... Why..." She reached for the blade and went for her wrist. Dragging it along seemed so easy. Her skin opened and she waited. Then the crimson began to flow. It ran down her arm and she dropped the blade. She sat back watching the blood with ease. Then her eyes filled up and the salty tears ran down her face. She got light headed so she laid down to rest. Unaware of what would happen next, she closed her eyes. 1
She awoke with a jerk, looking around at all the people standing over her. What happened? She thought to herself. She then realised she was in hospital. She looked at her wrist, it was bandaged but the bandage was stained red. And there was her family looking and crying over her. "Why?" They kept asking.2
"That's exactly what i asked." She replied.3
Author notes
3. Paint me as i am.
This came out really easily. Not from experience though, yet.
What did you think? Please comment!
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wow
short but powerfull....maybe i'll write a story now.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 8, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Oh, ow! Extremely short, but full of irony and meaning.
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very good
You want to kill the world don't you. But you don't want to hurt anyone so you hurt yourself. Now thats love,thats love.
try to live on and don't listen to any fools who say pain isn't real. hang in there death will get to all of us just be patient. -
I really, really like this. It's so simply written- and yet portrays so much. Wonderful write.
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i like it....i mean i thought she was gonna die when she closed her eyes...you really can keep your audience into it....i mean its short and its nice....keep up the good work..and i would like 2 keep in touch or w/e bc this is good....well good luck n keep up the good work....bye
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Dang...that was awesome...I loved it...especially the ending, And there was her family looking and crying over her.
"Why?" They kept asking.
"That's exactly what i asked." She replied.
Very good job. Keep up the great work!
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thank you for your comment and the support, im here if you need me
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Wow this is so good. I was expecting something longer, but you caught everything in this short one. It's amazing. Don't think of putting yourself through this. it would be terrible. Keep on writing.
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short but well written. i like this
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Wow. This piece was so emotional!! The feelings were all realy raw and it was all written really well. I suppose all i can say is maybe lengthen it and add more!! Its an amazing write already but with a little more body its could be spectacular!! Please don't let you get yourself this way either. Been there, done that, got through it. It's really not worth it sweetie. Keep up the amazing work and if you ever need to talk im here for you
One love,
Kitty xxxxxxx
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