lives in the rain

lives in the rain1

by dj kingsbury2

in 5 acts3

LYNNE4

Joesph5

Mom6

Friend7

boss8

waitress9

2 audience ppl10

ACT 1-scene 111

EXTERIOR eople walking back and forth. Lynne and Mom window shopping.12

Lynne h mom(pointing at the window) LOOK AT THAT.13

Mom-what do you see NOW!14

Lynne- It's not what i want!! i just would like you to look at it MOTHER!15

Mom looks at it) Oh it does look nice, BUT too EXPENSIVE.16

Lynne: AHHHH mom- IT"S NOT that EXPENSIVE?!17

I just want it to touch my skin(twirls around)18

I want to feel beautiful(checks hair in wiindow)19

I WANT TO FEEL ALIVE!20

(cell phone rings)21

Hello...I don't want to hear it! ....CAN YOU SEE i ahve had ENOUGH.22

Mom walks the other way) Oh it's him again(she turns back around) BUT HE IS A SOCIAL WORKER!23

lynne(puts her hand over the phone) BUT WHY should that mattere MA?24

Mom: maybe it shouldn't- BUT MAYBE IT SHOULD!25

Lynne take her hand off of phone)26

i've just had enough27

Can't you see....28

you've broke my heart....29

to many,30

TO MANY TIMES!31

mom: that's all men do32

it's in thier genes-33

I could never love a women,34

but I"VE THOUGHT ABOUT35

TRYING!36

lynne again puts hand over phone)37

OH MOM- believe me38

I"VE TRIED!39

MMom: Thats something I never knew40

lynne: like i tell ya everything.41

mom:whats gotten into you?42

lynne: NOTHING, he just drives me mad-43

i hate everything he does to me44

he never made me happy-45

he was just-well always there!(removes hand from phone)46

mom;OH!?47

LYNNE h- you heard that(giggles)48

u were just there-oh49

now YOU show some FEELINgs-50

don't tear to me- tear to51

someone else! I have had enough!52

I've given you 5 years of my life!53

5 WASTED YEARS! NO MORE-no more54

I have nothing more to say to u...(hangs up the phone)55

mom:wow56

lynne:lets go get something to eat.57

mom: ya i'm famished.58

scene 2-59

ext:burito shop60

Joseph: Welcome to "Burito haven" home of the 8lb burger- where if you eat 3 within 1 hr your 4th one is half off- and ur fifth one is free! How may we serve you today?61

Customer #1: Oh- I just like a taco salad.62

Joseph: Anything to drink with that today? Or would you like to try our home made cookies?63

Customer #1: No thank you! I am on a DIET!64

Customer #2: Oh don't worry about that dear! Just get some Pink lemondae- Ur fine to me!(she smiles- they embrace, and kiss)65

Joseph:anything else  for you fine people today?66

Customer #2: Ya- I'll have 2 8lbs 1 chicken and the other beef. And a jolt.67

Joseph: SOOR NO JOLT!(in accent from the belushi sketch on SNL)68

C #2: why no jolt? I need my caffine-my sugar- 2 times as much as the regular soda!69

Joseph: SORRY NO JOLT-ONLY PEPSI!70

C #2: Okay I'll have 2 Pepsi's.71

Joseph: (turns around) PEPSI-PEPSI- Taco Salad- Pink lemonade- 2 8lbs- 1 chicken- i beef- (he hit's his friend) PEPSI-PEPSI!!!72

friend: This isn't an SNL sketch! (looks at the customers) Joe is obssessed with SNL-73

C #1: I can see!74

Joe doin the Belushi's Samurai. Brings their food. places it down and takes out a long samuri sword.- makes loud ) KAI(then gently cuts the burito.)75

C #2: SUch service- you really do great with those classic belushi charchters-(walk away with the tray and laughs)76

friend: what with yer obssession with SNL?77

joseph: some day i'll get on that show!78

friend: i've know you for like twenty years! i always love yer SNL stuff!79

joseph grabs a small coat from the back and starts to dance) fat guy in a little coat- fat guy in a little coat!80

Lynne laughing hysterically) I love that- you gotta love Farrelly!81

Joseph: fat guy in a little coat(looks at lynne) i want to PUmp u up!(jacket rips)82

waitress(walking up) it was funny- till my jacket ripped.(she walks off. Lynne and Joseph laugh Hysterically)83

Joseph: Welcome to "Burito haven" home of the 8lb burger- where if you eat 3 within 1 hr your 4th one is half off- and ur fifth one is free! How may we serve you today?84

Lynne: No thank you- i'll just have a meatless taco salad- an whatver my mom wants.85

mom:I loved yer SNL impressions. I dated belsuhi back in the early 70's.86

Joseph: Thank you. Can i get your autograph. The guy is my god.87

Mom: sure- And I'll have a taco salad to- and some H2O!88

Lynne: i'll have some aqua.89

Josph: 2 waters, and two meatless taco salad- i was a vegan once myself. though i couldn't handle the pressure of not eating meat.90

Scene 391

(manager walks up)92

Manager; sorry to interuppt all this fun- But i have to ask you a question or 3?93

Joseph: ok....YeS?94

manager: Did you or did you not break the waitress jacket?95

Joseph: It was an accident- I'll buy her a new one. 96

manager: ya u will buy her a new one- and yer fired!97

Joseph: WHAT? I"M FIRED98

manager:you can leave now-99

Joseph: but i have to get these lovely ladies thier taco salads.100

Lynne: ya he has to bring us our taco salads.101

manager: NO- I will bring yo ur taco salads.102

LYNNE: THEN I DON"T WANT MY FUCKING TACO SALADS!103

manager: ok then by.(lynne and mom storm off)104

Joseph:how you can you fire me over something so stupid- i have worked her for 7 years now?105

Manager: yer still here? i fired you. And yer friend is fired to- i saw what was written about you on the wall- you let someone do that on my walls- i should have you fined- you FIRED!106

friend- ok- we r gone( turns to joseph) let's go get some junk.107

Joseph: that would be good alright-(stops) did you see how beautiful she was/is?!108

friend: who the waitress?109

Joseph: no that girl who orded the taco salad's-i think her name was lynne-110

friend- YA!111

Joseph jumps up on a table-screams) I'd drown in her!112

I'd be alive in her!113

manager- get out of here- your fired- do i have to call the cops- for you tresspassing?!114

friend turns around and flicks off the manager- turns to joseph) you'd drown in anything that moves.115

joseph: naw if i couldn't be with her- i'd be a priest!116

joseph: there was somnething in the way117

she looked at me-118

she was a vision119

something out of the oridnary120

i'd drop to my knees for her121

just to love me-122

i knew something within123

that moment-124

the way she stormed out125

the way she stood up to that ass126

there was something in the way she 127

she looked at me-128

Friend: why?129

she has nothing to you!130

don't even think about it131

you must move on-132

let's just GET HIGH133

lets 4get all of this!134

we just got fired-135

we got some money136

I took like $500 out of137

the cash register-138

she's just a girl139

someone else will COME140

ALONG141

Lets go have some fun!142

WHY?143

she has nothing to u!144

don't even think about it145

YOU MUST MOVE ON!146

joseph: you didn't see  what i saw147

it was just in the way148

she smiled. FRIEND!149

Friend: but it was just a smile! she was just smiling at the way you made her laugh.150

joseph: laughter is the souls medicine- it brought us together- i want to know her- i want to breathe every inch of her thoughts,feelings, soul and BODY!151

friend- lets just FORGET all this nonsense- and get HIGH!152

joseph: maybe ur right- i'll go get what i need- just meet at this street  corner or my apartment- and we'll get high!153

friend: SO HIGH WE'LL see GAWD!154

joseph: but did ya see her eyes- the way she smiled?i'd do anything to see her smile- that is god in the truest sense of form!155

Act 2156

scene 1157

(ext: at some resturant)158

lynne- i can't believe that?! they just fired him for breaking some waitress jacket.159

mom: theres nothing you can do about it.160

lynne: well it does get me- and i will never go back to that place ever again- and i'll tell all my friends.161

mom: i know- i know- it bothered me to!162

lynne: though i did enjoy his impressions.163

mom: ya he would give lorne micheals a run for his money!164

lynne: but did you see his eyes- i really did like/love his eyes- mother?( she crys)165

mom: you can tell so much about someone by just looking in thier eyes.166

Lynne: very true- and he made me laugh! i think i like him.167

Mom: you don't even know him. he's a guy he'll like anything that moves. he could have a disease- or do drugs- or a murder?168

lynne: ya ma- men r animals- but there was something genuine about him.169

mom: you DON'T EVEN KNOW HIS NAME- lynne-170

lynne: oh mother- well his name tag said joseph- it is a nice strong name- JOSEPH(she smiles)171

Scene 2172

ext ut on a corner173

joseph *balled up in himself) i just don't get it174

why does it always175

come to this?176

passerbyer: stop crying- and get up and get a job.177

Joseph flicks off the passerbyer) no one ver stops178

to ask why someone179

is down180

everyone just assumes181

they know182

without ever finding out183

why-184

or if theres something185

maybe they can do186

everyone in a rush to get 187

NOWHERE!188

now i just want to leave here189

i want to rest in peace190

i want to be silent191

I WISH TO BE NO MORE!192

Friend walks up to joseph) I GOT SOMETHING YOU NEED193

I GOT SOMETHING THAT WILL MAKE194

YOU FORGET-195

I GOT SOMETHING THAT'LL EASE YER196

PAIN197

JUST HOLD OUT YER ARM-(freind wraps josephs arm- takes out a spoon and lighter- places some junk out on the spoon- JOSEPH LOOKS ON) 198

joseph: i love the ritual199

Friend- ah so do I(he places the syringe on the spoon- flicks it) u have horrible veins-200

joseph(grabs the syringe) i know- just hand me the syring I"LL DO IT MYSELF- i'll do it myself.( a single light on joseph he shoots himself up- looks up) it's my wife- it's my life.....it'll be the death of me( screams) LYNNE-I DO NOT WANT THIS- BUT I NEED YOU! (lights fades out-)201

scene 3202

(back at resturant)203

lynne: i want some strong arms204

to cover me from this world205

i want to lay with someone206

and drift in some understanding207

i want a love that will last....208

wheather through good and bad-209

mom: but yer to young.210

lynne: shouldn't we be able to decide for ourselfs?!211

mom: oh my love212

i just want to see you213

live yer life214

and be happy!215

but your blind in yer haste216

and u cannot see-217

that even iph you come/came together218

you will abandon eachother219

as you abandon yerselfs!220

don't do this to yourself221

lynne: oh mom- just because something bad happen to you222

doesn't mean it will happen to me-223

I"M NOT YOU! just a fraction- 224

but i am always be-225

mom: BUT IT COULD- oh it- could226

CHILD of MINE!227

Lynne: I just want to learn to love228

love to live-229

love to love-230

live to love231

and be loved!232

i'd give my heart233

4 our arms to be 234

forver!235

i thought about my day236

my day down that ASILE237

i could see me and him238

him and i239

side by SIDE240

the laughter is trumpted in his shine241

i'd give my heart242

my soul-243

we'd be eachothers life! indivually244

seperatley together!245

mom: and it will get ya nowhere!(mom and lynne walk up to the register and pay the pay thier bill- they walkout and notice joseph on the corner)246

mom: say nothing-lets just walk away.247

lynne: oh mom- look at him asllep out on the corner!248

mom: why can't he just go home?249

lynne: don't get yerslf involved- i want to see if theres something i can do....(she pushes joseph) are u okay? why must you place yerself here?250

joseph(doesn't budge or look at her) who are you?251

lynne: my name is lynne....who are YOU?(she smiles)252

joseph:i do not know!253

lynne: why?254

joseph: because!255

audience member #1 stand up) Oh geez- ahhhhh- is this a musical- or a philosphy class?256

audience member #2: maybe it could be both - I don't know- but just sit the heck down- this is getting good.257

a m#1: I abhore all this- i protest- i don't get it- it doesn't make any sense! 258

a m #2: well since ur slow and can't read between the lines or just late to the show....259

a m #3 walking down the asile) ya thanks i just got here myself.260

a m #2: ok then- he worked at a burito shop lynne and mom were there- he made them laugh doin Belushi/Farley  impressions. Then he got fired- she protested and walked off- him and his friend left and got high261

mom; see i told ya he did drugs.262

lynne: mom not know263

a m #2: they felt something from each other.264

lynne: ya265

joseph: (crying) yes i do!266

a m #2: and now they are falling in love.267

a m #3: thank you for the catch up.268

a m #1: who wrote this- he sucks.269

dj kingsbury i walk out to center stage) I DO WHAT I CAN! ( i bite into an apple, then banna) Now back to the show.270

(fade to black)271

Act 3272

(denile and destruction of self)273

*sitting on a street corner*274

joesph: Spare change for a sex change?! i give up on being a man.275

passerbyer: you freak- you moron-YOU WIERDO!276

joesph:277

i'm something you can never understand278

maybe i'm rebelling without279

the understanding280

of why I re-bel281

but i am YOUNG282

i want to make my 283

idealistic mis--ta-kes284

I_DON"T_CARE_IF_YOU285

TAKE ME AS I_AM286

i had no real father287

i never knew my mother288

(gets up and yells in someones face)289

BUT IT NEVER STOPPED ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!290

Lynne(passing by joesph)291

mom look at the skyline-292

mom look at that poor man?!293

why does he look so bare?294

why do tears rush down his face?295

mom we must walk away296

his pain hurts me so297

there's so much he needs298

to let go.......299

mom:300

(joesph closes his eyes)301

learn to love, love to live302

love to love303

love to be loved!(lynne and mom walk off stage)304

joesph:305

(shouting)306

all these ppl307

think they know308

what i need-309

they just pass me by310

(in a quiet tone) care not311

that i eat and live in312

what they throw away313

(looking towards the sky) but just as charles manson314

they threw me 315

(softly) a-w-a-y!316

i sit here as a reminder-317

I_COULD_BE_THEM318

atleast i let myself believe319

i know this isn't what i want320

i'm afraid i want more321

i'm afraid i want more322

all these ppl323

think they know 324

what i need but they have no clue325

they have no clue of me326

i'll eat out of thier trash327

i'll sleep on the cement328

blanketed by the stars329

*everything goes black, a purple light shines*330

friend:331

hey man i've been looking for you332

where have you been-333

u always seem to dissappear now and again-334

joesph:335

sometimes the search for food 336

takes me on and on337

for miles338

then i have to stop by the 339

library340

and the art musem-341

friend with a laugh)342

Yea- we're you still looking for a job343

joesph:344

well i volunteer at the bookstore345

by the one we steal from to get 346

some junk-347

friend palming his arm)348

speaking of junk-i think we should get some-349

we haven't been high in like what?.....350

joesph:351

6 hours(laughs) sure lets go score- i got some352

CD's and i've got some foriegn films-353

i can't watch em anyway(looks to the ground, kicks the ground)354

friend puts arms on joe's shoulder)355

you go get your CD's and Foriegn films356

joesph a whalting screy) 357

oh i hate selling FELLINI for a needle to the vein.358

friend:359

But how fellinisque-how neo realastic360

joesph pushes his friend in the mouth)361

what getting food from the dumpster362

sleeping on the cement-sprawling on some363

dealers floor364

friend:365

you always go back for more!!!!366

joesph(hesitates, falls to his knees)367

i'll see u in an hour!368

*everything goes black*   loud guitars and drums banging369

ACT 4370

(lesson learned)371

friend:372

so here we r again-(laughs) i told ya we'd be here!373

joesph:here are the movies- and all my CD's- can you go score-(falls to the floor)374

friend:sure- you look like you need a rest- kick u in an hour- you worthless piece of shit- u pig fucker. 375

joesph: (quietly)376

ya- i am gonna lay here and just sleep(friend gets up to leave- slams door) ya but377

when u get back I_WON"T_BE _HERE!378

i'll be on my way home - to get myself away from this379

this isn't how i wanted to live380

like some cartoon charchter from a W.S. Burroughs  Novel381

but i will right my own wrong382

be my own person-383

i will love - i will learn 384

i won't be swallowed by my own fears385

i will love me 4 me386

and be complete387

with someone by my side388

when u get back here with that junk389

i won't be here390

i got something new-true ahead391

friend(opens door)392

you waste your time at life-393

the beauty that lays in the needle394

is all i need395

joesph gets up and slaps his friend down)396

for there's more can't you see? 397

i want to see god, have children, 398

and be someones significant other!399

friend:400

you live all that (gets up)401

but i'm taking402

all ur books and Cd's403

u can get ur job- and find a wife404

i'd rather die 405

then be alive!406

joesph(smacks his friend in the face)407

you can take all that stuff408

stuff will lead you nowhere-409

though ur already blind as it is.410

friend:411

your incondstant dreams412

but there r no dreams413

not even dreams themselfs414

everything you've been taught and told415

is a lieanyone can say anything416

and you fell 417

FOR IT!418

(lynne and mom enter. and walk by the apartment-watchting them argue)419

lynne:420

look at him ma ma- he carries on421

and acts like a fool.422

mom:423

maybe he's insane?- just look away424

lynne:425

but there's something about him- i know he's different426

we come from different words427

but my heart draws428

me near-429

joesph:430

my heart draws me near-towards that day431

i will find that one true love432

till that that day it all eats away at me.433

lynne:434

for mom there's a stem growing and it pours out of435

and around me and him436

lay in fertile ground.437

joesph shouts)438

GO ON GET OUT 439

GIVE ME BACK MY 440

STUFF441

FIND UR OWN WAY 442

TO GET YER JUNK443

friend:444

i need to get high445

i live to get high446

never trust a junkie(takes out a knife)447

I WANT TO GET HIGH448

GIVE ME ALL UR STUFF449

joesph:450

i think i should call 911451

friend:452

JUST GIVE ME453

ALL UR STUFF454

AND EVERYTHING 455

WILL BE FIND-456

joesph(pushes friend down)457

just leave my house458

friend:459

not till i get what I (pushes joesph out of window) 460

NEED!461

joesph(looks up at lynne, and they just stare into each others eyes. she laughs-he stands up brushes off the glass)462

can u see what we have foundthats more463

around and outside our selfs464

(she holds out her hand, and laughs)465

the silence trumpets her laughter466

i know my heart is at ease around her467

nothing maybe easy468

nothing maybe hard469

nothing maybe as beautiful as her smile.470

i'm not so quick as others471

to call this love472

but i find myself believing473

as we stare arm in arm474

at the stars above475

oh the stars above!476

but i won't run away477

i can't run away-478

i'll stand up and be a man.479

attempting to make it easy480

on her-481

we've talked- oh we've laughed482

we've said we might get a place together483

i'm just happy in 484

the thought!485

i'm just happy to see 486

her smile-487

the silence trumpets her laughter 488

i know my heart is at ease 489

around her490

nothing maybe easy491

naothing maybe hard492

nothing maybe as beautiful as her 493

smile!494

i'm not so quick, as others495

to call this love496

but i know we'd be happy!497

lynne-498

your words lay golden to me499

but i don't know ur name-500

joesph-501

for my name lays in yer heart and soul502

lynne:503

and my name will become torched in ur mind-(theh embrace)504

joesph:505

for now we embrace as strangers506

lynne:507

beyond these words our love shall lead.508

mom:509

oh lynne, why must you talk to this stranger510

lynne:511

oh mom, it is love that has led me here!512

joesph:513

and lynne my name is joesph,514

and it shall be be love that 515

will guide us.516

(mom goes to pull lynne away)517

lynne:518

mom- you cannot pull me away from what will set me free.519

joesph:520

mom you have done welll- i will let you know521

THAT THHIS GIRL YOU HAVE RAISED522

will be the WOMAN523

I LOVE and ADORE524

and grow with.525

mom:526

this cannot be- for things do not happen this way527

your just a mere kid(looks at joesph) and u r nothing but a poet,528

scroundel, thief.529

lynne(embracing joesph):530

we seek shelter in our love!531

joesph:532

i will get a good job, go finish school- AND DO533

her NO HARM!534

lynne:535

i wouldn't care what you do536

for i know that i know537

i will love you till 538

the end of time.539

mom :540

but she is young and you sleep on the streets.541

joesph:542

i do heroin also, but she has changed me by her smile.543

mom:544

listen  lynne we must go now.545

lynne:546

this is where i want to stay, with whom i want to be WITH.547

*lights dim, a single light on joesph*548

joesph:549

i've got to work this through550

i can't let her ruin het life551

i'll chase her away552

have her hate553

me554

do what i can555

to spare her 556

a life of dissappoint557

and pointless558

aggravation559

she deserves the world560

something i could never give561

her562

i only say love563

but have i felt it myself564

*lights flash on*565

joesph:566

lynne567

lynne:568

yes joesph569

joesph:570

just go AWAy571

NEVER THINK OF THIS DAY AGAIN572

lynne:573

what r u saying574

joesph:575

nothing, it's WHAT i am doin576

i am a liar a cheat577

and a thief578

i sleep outside579

and put needles in my arm580

u deserve more then that581

lynne:582

don't tell me what i deserve:583

joesph:584

i'm just trying to helphe goes to touch her)585

lynne:586

no, no, no no, 587

don't u touch me don't u even look at me588

and mom589

mom:590

yes lynne591

lynne: 592

that goes for you two593

(mom passes out, lynne runs off stage)594

joesph:595

i can't take this no more596

my life it is over597

time to quickly fade598

into that good night599

i have no more to give600

or nothing to ponder601

there will602

be no one ever603

as sweet as this(he pulls out a knife carves in his arm suicide is painless)604

Through early morning fog I see,605

Visions of the things to be,606

The pains that are withheld for me,607

I realize and I can see...608

[REFRAIN]:609

That suicide is painless.610

It brings on many changes.611

And I can take or leave it if I please.612

I try to find a way to make,613

All our little joys relate,614

Without that ever-present hate,615

But now I know that it's too late, and...616

[REFRAIN]617

The game of life is hard to play,618

I'm gonna lose it anyway.619

The losing card I'll someday lay,620

So this is all I have to say.621

[REFRAIN]622

The only way to win is cheat,623

And lay it down before I'm beat,624

And to another give my seat,625

For that's the only painless feat.626

[REFRAIN]627

The sword of time will pierce our skins.628

It doesn't hurt when it begins.629

But as it works its way on in,630

The pain grows stronger...watch it grin, but...631

[REFRAIN]632

A brave man once requested me,633

to answer questions that are key.634

Is it to be or not to be?635

And I replied 'Oh why ask me?'636

[REFRAIN]637

'Cause suicide is painless.638

It brings on many changes.639

And I can take or leave it if I please.640

...And you can do the same thing if you choose.(words by altman) 641

*lights slowly fade* 642

ACT  5643

(acceptance of self and love of some beyond self)644

joesph:645

all i want is to be loved646

all i want is to be needed647

lay with me648

lay with me649

to the end of time650

i can't change 651

much of me652

but i'll mend 653

all of me654

i like655

no i love656

when i am around657

you658

i will not 659

i cannot declare 660

what we are661

but atleast we know662

we friends663

what else could be asked664

you know i am afraid665

but i'll throw all666

my fears away667

if we promise to promise668

just to be669

i know we can be ourselfs670

lay with me671

lay with me672

you know i am afraid673

but when i am around you674

i'll throw all my fears away-675

there's nothing i can promise676

but the wind scathing ur face677

i come and i go678

i leave without a trace-679

lynne:680

i know ur a broken man681

i see it in ur eyes682

from where i stand683

i am a wave684

crashing into 685

ur shore686

you reach to me687

this i adore688

joesph:689

u see not 690

for i am alone691

and nothing more...692

lynne:693

don't away from me694

that is so unclean-695

why did u call me here696

if u only push697

that would be mean!698

joesph:699

i'm not asking u to understand700

that was never part of my paln701

i just wanted to watch the stars with u702

lynne:703

but u said lay with me704

u promised to promise705

just to be706

though why must u 707

be blind to see708

that there could be a u709

and a me710

but u resort to violence in ur heart711

why would u be so hard712

to set us apart?713

joesph:714

i say so many things715

i'm a poet, scoundrel, a thief.716

lynne:717

so what is it you want718

if you don't want love?719

joesph(turns around)720

what is it i want721

if i don't want love722

if i don't want love?723

of course i want love724

i want to be needed 725

i am sick of playing this fool-726

lynne:727

then what will you do728

joesph:729

i want to be loved730

lynne:731

yes732

joesph:733

i want to be needed734

lynne:735

yes736

joesph:737

i want to love738

lynne:739

yes740

joesph:741

i want to live742

lynne:743

yes744

joesph(looks away)745

i want to be her equal746

and i need her to be mine-747

i want her and need her748

to be my equal749

lynne:750

yes!751

joesph:752

i can't be what some one else753

wants me to be754

All I CAn is BE me......755

lynne:756

i'm not asking u757

to change urself758

but lokk at what you say759

u let me in760

u push me out761

ur more confusing762

sometimes 763

then you know764

joesph:765

i am as complex 766

as the ground 767

u walk on768

i know what i know769

i see what i see770

and I"M SICk of EVEryoNE abanDONING ME!771

lynne hugs him)772

even when things get hard773

just know i'll understand774

it may not have been part of ur plan775

but here i am-776

joesph:777

i'm falling778

and i'm gonna fall hard779

i'm falling780

and i just cannot do it again781

i'm falling782

it pains me-783

i'm scared!784

i've become used to my emptiness785

i'm falling786

loneliness is all i know787

loneliness is all i know788

*falls to his knees*789

i'm falling and it scares me790

i'm falling and it hurts791

pick me up792

pull me up793

hold ME close-794

if you let go795

oh if you let go796

I wiLL DiE!797

lynne:798

don't say that799

ur just being melodramatic800

you have so much801

inside of you802

that Flaubert and Einstein 803

couldn't compare-804

this is ur day805

the past u must leave behind806

*hugs joesph*807

just as good will hunting808

which lays so close to me809

it's not ur fault810

i hope you will see811

it's not ur fault.812

joesph(spins her around on her back)813

all i want814

is to be loved815

all i want is to be needed816

lynne places her hand on his heart)817

and i love YoU!818

joesph turns away)819

but these are words820

and all words are a lie.821

lynne stands up and pushes him down)822

then destroy the alphabet823

throw out all the rules824

take your chance825

place ur bets826

but turn ur back on me827

i'll be the one828

WHO will STAND AS UR equaL829

joesph:830

but these are words831

and all words are lies.832

lynne slaps him)833

i am not a lie834

i am right here835

why does that scare you836

why are you afraid837

of what lays in838

front 839

of you-840

i will not leave you841

i will not hurt you842

as you have lied and turn away from 843

me844

i will try not to hurt you845

but as your afarid846

of being hurt847

ur hurting me848

ur hurting me849

so your a hypocrite850

as u wail in your fears851

let it go852

let it all go!853

here i am-here i am854

take that chance855

grab my hand856

nothing will be perfect857

nothing will ever be the same858

at times you will have859

ur loneliness860

at times you can have861

your emptiness862

but you make me happy-863

and i know i make u happy as well.864

but as ur afarid of being hurt865

ur hurting me866

ur hurting me867

i'm not a lie!868

joesph single light-center stage)869

it's hard to come out870

from where i am871

i like to sit872

where you stand873

i like to see874

what you believe875

i want to know876

and comprehend877

ur thoughts actions feelings878

i want to hold ur hand879

i want to give you more880

i will sing you songs881

paint u pictures882

make u films883

write you stories  letters MUSICALS poems884

and philosophy885

i will give you886

all i can-887

all i can!888

lynne:889

you can do that890

i believe u can891

i just want to know892

as coy as it may sound893

i love you ever more894

no white horse can895

bring that to me-896

you could give me897

the sun and the moon and the stars898

and the clouds 899

and all thats above-900

give me ur lemon seeds901

my love-902

we can adopt 903

our CHILDREN904

but you can and could give me everything and nothing905

of what money could and couldn't buy906

but all i love is u907

for all your strengths908

ur weakness909

and how u drive me crazy910

but i love you911

when your around912

and in those momenst913

when ur not sure914

u should call915

but with all ur flaws916

and all ur greatness917

it makes me love u918

more and more and more919

you could give me the stars and the moon and the clouds920

all i want is you921

all i want is you922

i know we r equals923

and we will be equals924

even with each of our flaws925

mistakes, greatnesses926

that is life927

take me as i take u928

thats all i ask!929

joesph:930

just as day-931

as we lay at heart932

we can walk away933

we could part934

lynne:935

we can die tommorow936

we cannot live today937

we could leave eachother938

and live our lives in rain-939

joesph:940

if something that is so wonderful941

causes so much ill and pain942

that makes young/old hearts wail943

mens souls suffer944

and drives women insane945

lynne:946

but that is th game that947

tis love948

it can suffocate949

and drive some over a950

cliff951

it can hurt952

it can give pain953

it can drive the hardest of them all954

insane955

but when ur willing to 956

take that957

leap958

grab my hand959

sometimes with blind faith960

one eye open961

one eye closed...962

but let us dance963

joesph:964

i know maybe we could do it965

i know it wouldn't be perfect966

lynne:967

but it will be perfect for us968

joesph:969

all the time we have is now-970

lynne:971

and we'll live  love and grow972

through beyond tommorow973

together:974

for ourselfs- and in 975

GoDs EyEsSsSSS!976

*fade to black*- curtain closes977

house lights come on978

Author notes

i wrote acts 3-4-5 first. i thought it was a great piece by itself. i sent it out to a few friends my friend kelly said it was wierd(even though it was inspired by her- and she knew it) and sherry wrote me this email:
 Hii DEEJ!

Honestly I think you have the start of something really good.  There are some things that just reading it, either don't make sense, move too quickly, or don't resolve themselves.  I know you said that this is a rough draft (at least in your email subject line) though...

At the beginning Joseph says "spare change for a sex change"....and then nothing else about a sex change, or why he would ask for a sex change is ever explained.  Does he really want to be a woman?  Does he ever tell Lynne about this situation or do they strictly talk about him loving her but not wanting to ruin her life...and if they do just talk of the latter does he think his drug habit is what's going to ruin her life, the fact that he's homeless, both?  And is she clear on why he thinks he's going to ruin her life?

The friend....what happens to him?  Just steals the stolen library items, gets his high and then nothing else?  No further contact?  Or maybe somewhere in there he comes back, sees that his friend is living a better life once he has discovered it's worth living, and tries to clean up himself?

As far as the love story, it felt a little rushed....the point where Lynne and her mom are walking to the point she's just madly in love.....reading that is like when the hell did that thought happen?  Because REALISTICALLY, would a woman look at a bum on the road and just fall in love?  IDEALISTICALLY, maybe.  However, since this IS a rough draft this leaves you plenty of areas to expand, explain, and so on.

In general, this feels like it's written 90% by a poet and 10% by a playwriter.  Now we've seen musicals that are emotionless and definitely 90% playwrite and 10% poet.  I think if you focused a little more on the storyline and a little less on making it so poetic it would even itself out and sound poetic and more realistic.

This is definitely darker than Rent...of course I have no idea how the music sounds, although I can imagine the words that are CAPS are not necessarily sung, but probably more yelled.  From what I know about musicals, you're going to need some kind of huge climatic type event in the middle that leads to the intermission...from this rough draft it's hard to tell where that would be (although either you would have Act 1 really long or Act 3.....1 and 2, intermission, long 3 or long 1, intermission, 2, 3).  I would imagine that Act 1 would be longest, perhaps the climax prior to intermission could be that Lynne discovers she is in love with Joseph.  Maybe Act 2 can involve some of her torn feelings whether or not to leave her seemingly normal life...that way the musical has more dimensions than Joseph and his life.  Keep in mind most musicals start with a huge song, end before intermission with a big song that involves the whole company, and ends on a big song.  But, since this is pretty dark, a huge part of the plot can unfold before intermission, and a dramatic dark conclusion to it all (although the ending seems like it is supposed to be more uplifting, so a company song would probably be in better order).  

I think this is really good though.  Of course all of what I said is just suggestions and comments...take them or leave them but you're definitely on the right track.  After all, it's not like I've ever wrote a musical before!  But I have seen many of them, I couldn't tell you a number if I tried.

Enjoy DC...talked to Tim yesterday and sounds like he's really busy but maybe you two can smooze over coffee sometime.  

Lata gata

Sherry

and i was inspired two days to write the first two acts. i wrote the entire thing off the cuff. and i have perforemed it twice in Dc- i like it alot the way it is- hope you enjoy

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