Matthew

I'll test you. I'll mess with your evil brain that is coming up with horrible things. Your heart is colder then the deepest point in the coldest place on Earth. I'll attack you and yell, harassing you with my words. And yet, you never care. Just a clueless bird flying into a tree...
You hate me with all of your might. I hate you back. A tottaly diffrent soul, floating above the rest. The heartthrob you are, dating just to break those hearts that feel for you. But no, mine is not there, Matthew. A jerk is the right word for your frozen heart.
But I love that frozen heart when it is heated with the power of golden kindness. Matthew, you're my best friend. But just remember, you're a jerk! 1

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For a contest! I really hope the host of it loves it. Technically in our friendship, this is how he acts. But he's a guy, and he doesn't take ANYTHING seriously. I can call him a 'jerk', and he wouldn't react like my other friends would. He rocks!

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  • Marisalyn13
    2 days ago
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    okay

    I'm laughing when you said a clueless bird flying into a tree. LOL sorry I was looking at this page and I was wondering how this story you wrote a year ago reflect on you now, hmmmmm lol


  • NarniaKid
    August 17
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    I like it! It reflects your friendship with Matthew very well! Great Job! Keep Writing!

    -Crystal


  • MusicOfTheNight9
    August 9
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    interesting! good job! thanks for entering and good luck!

    Kudos,
    CreaterSk8er


  • Cerise Dragon
    July 24
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    aw i like this! great job


  • Raining.Fire
    July 5
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    This was great! Good job!


  • sberendt gold member
    July 3

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    This all I noticed that you need to fix..

    --A tottaly (totally) diffrent (different) soul,

    Well, this was nice and all, but not quite a short story...

    Overall, this was a nice piece filled with emotion.

    ~sberendt


  • CallMeWhenUrRich gold member
    June 23

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    Ahh, I still remember this clearly from my last contest. But I'm going to give a little more descriptive comment...well, for my standards at least.

    But first, I just have to say I LOVE the line "I love that frozen heart."

    For some reason it's just so appealing to me. But the thing is, I loved basically the whole thing. You do have a way with words.

    I adore your style of writing. It sorta reached out, you know.

    Best of luck.


  • ForThePlague
    June 20

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    Hm...I can definitely see how the song fits in but...very good write. I like it a lot. The part where you tell him you hate him and then tell him he's your best friend really brings out the different-ness of this story. Thanks for entering


  • CallMeWhenUrRich gold member
    June 19
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    Haha, I liked this.


    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      June 19
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      Yeah, so did I until he kicked a soccer ball in my face and HURT MY NOSE WITH MY GLASSES!!!!!


  • Maggie Kay
    June 15
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    haha nice work

    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      June 19
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      Matthew kicked a soccer ball in my face- my glasses slid down my nose and fell off- I have a HUGE bruise from the glasses!!!!


  • Violette silver member
    May 25
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    Not a story, but still good. That said, you cannot possibly win.


    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      May 25
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      It's not a story?

      I thought it could be a poem OR a story! I usually write 'poem' next to my poems! Oh well, my mistake!


  • flowerbee1234
    May 24
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    Ah, guys! What pigs? Not exactly what I was looking for, but fine. Good luck in the contest!

    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      May 24
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      Thanks!!! Gosh, guys can give you some . Matthew rocks, though! I was just over his house yesterday. We swam at 77*! It was cold! I went in for like two seconds. Sometimes, he can be a jerk, but he's usually just a piece of . That's Matthew for you!


  • Shadow-Kissed
    May 22

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    Neat. And very true. My friends and I argue like that and I love them all the more for accepting it.
    Nicely done

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      May 24
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      That's so cool you and your friends argue and you love them for that! I do that with my BFF, too! I love Matthew... like a brother. He's my best friend! Thanks for the comment!


  • Hinata-is-me silver member
    May 22
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    Hmmmmmmm this was interesting. good job


  • Unice the geek
    May 22

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    He's my friend too. . . but he is a jerk. . . i have a jerk friend. . . does that make me a jerk?. . .


  • truefriendslast
    May 22
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    I don't think that it's weird. I have a friend that's just like Mathew, I can call him anything and he dosn't mind. Mind you he calls me some mean names too but we're friends.
    I hope you and Mathew are still friends when he sees this. But it was a great poem.

    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      May 22
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      Oh, he won't mind if he sees this. He doesn't care if I call him anything, and he doesn't like writing stories, so I doubt he's going on here any time soon. Thanks for the comment!


  • Unice the geek
    May 22
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    I thought you liked Mathew? Don't you? What if Mathew saw this? I think he'd be a little freaked.

    • Dual.Of.Fireflies
      May 22
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      Yeah, I kinda do. But he's my best friend, and I'm SO happy I'm not gaga over him. I would NEVER ask him out, though. He's too wired. He's such a loser! (And people that don't get this friend/hate relationship, I can call him ANYTHING and he wouldn' care.)


  • Marisalyn13
    May 18
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    Wow ...

    Really strange and weird ... I was laughing though because I 'know' him. Good job, keep writing!

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