Tobi-kuns random guesses......

Alec: Hey tobi you know what sucks?1

Tobi:Uggggggzzzzzz. let me guess. ur teacher teacher secretly call u a mental patient.2

Alec: okay..... no not the mental patient one, keep gueseing3

Tobi: So you were walking in the park and suddenly a squirrel attacks you, and beats you up, then leaves then comes back and beats u up. Then leaves, then comes back and steals your wallet and beats you up some more and leaves. Then outta nowhere a racoon comes and and starts fighting with the squirrel, then a giant space saucer lands on them. The allien comes out and starts beating the crap out of the squirrel and the racoon. You get draged into it and now youre fighting for your life when suddenly the space sauucer comes to life and starts destroying everything while yelling you could of had a V8! THE SPACE SAUCER DESTROYS THE RACOON, THE SQUIRREL AND THE ALLIEN and then leaves. You get up and run back to me where I am just waiting watching what happened and you yell at me then I push you into the middle of the street, only to get hit by a car. You get pissed and hijack the car.Then u start chasing me and hit me. Then we come out and laugh. Then we go to hospital and get our injuries fixed.Then u wakw up and ask me the same question over again. KABLOOOOoMananananaan4

Alec:.......... None of that happened.... I was just gonna say i got grounded.5

TobI: Right, you just dont remember any of it, and sorry u got grounded.6

Alec: Tobi none of that happened.7

Tobi: It did you hit ur head. Actually the racoon hit you on the head with a bat so thats why you dont remember it.8

Alec:.................9

Tobi:.... (0)_(0) =) -_-

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my real name is Alec. just so u pplz know.

A contest entry

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  • Kismet Krazy silver member
    2 days ago
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    Ahhhhh Melissa Honeybee has told you I was looking for grammer and I am to an extent. I think this was freaking HILARIOUS. I do agree that this does not follow the prompt and I am more of a rule follower then I am a Grammar Nazi. The spelling doesn't bug me much but I think this story would have been better without some of the chat speak. Its 'you' not 'u'. I know we make that mistake but it can be fixed. I do LOVE the actual content of this story though. So I'm willing to over look the grammar. But it does need a prompt. And I couldn't find one. So I'm sorry to say I can't add you to the finalist list, sorry. But thank you for entering the contest. Awesome random story and cool name. haha.

    by the way SQUIRRELS RULE.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • leolord5235
    November 2
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    I love this story. Oh my goodness, it was hilarious!


  • Melissa HoneyBee
    October 20

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    2 things that would kill me if I let you win..
    NO. 1 I'm not sure what your prompt is.
    NO. 2 Kismet Krazy (my friend whose helping me judge) says she's judging on spelling and grammer (not that spelling bothers me too much, I'm a terrible, terrible speller and I understand how it adds to a piece)
    Give me your prompt and maybe I can over look No.2.
    Cause yours is pretty damn funny and quite high in the random list. I wish I didn't spend half of the time reading it looking for the prompt. If you find a prompt, message me and i will RE-read it.
    I thought it was hilarious! Cuotos.
    Alec is a cool name by the way


  • Vanilla King
    October 13

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    Sorry, I'm gonna DQ this one. Grammar & spelling was awful and I've stated in the contest rules that Iwant em to be good

    Funny story though!


  • CinnaAgent11
    October 5

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    That's funny. You don't remember because you were knocked out and blah-blah-blah. Oh that's hilarious. I'm not good at writing funny stuff but I love to read it. Good job! This was... funny.


  • Cocoly Docolies
    September 15
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    HAHAHA ROFL LOL LMAO i love this story!!! its funny


  • Para Turkey gold member
    September 7
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    haha sweet! good luck


  • LilMsHyper17
    August 25
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    Alec, you kinda gave urself away using ur real name.... but you'll probably win something anyway!
    HyperActiveFreak17


  • Le Masquerade silver member
    August 25
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    Nice job, but what was the made up word???


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    August 8

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    Hmmm

    Although funny, it needs a lot of work as far as spelling, grammar and punctuation. The chatspeak really bugs me most. All of your u's should be spelled out as you. Your i's should be capitalized as I. First word in a sentence should always be capitalized as well.

    It was funny though. Thanks for your entry!


  • EverRose
    August 7

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    wow, haha. This was actually pretty funny! lol
    I love the part where Alec is explaining what he "thought" Tobi was gonna say! xD
    I enjoyed this very much! The only thing I have to say is just a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but that's not a big deal.
    Why does Angelic Dragon suck?

    Great entry and thanks for entering my contest!

    -Rose


  • Mag the Chodja gold member
    August 3

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    Random Lulz

    LOL Wow... That was...special. *pats on the head*
    xD
    Nice. That was a very random story, great job with pulling things out of a hat to compile together.

    I LOVED the V8 reference. xD
    I've used that so much in my social life.
    "Oh, shit, I suck at life..."
    "*facepalms him* Shoulda had a V8. "

    You should work on grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. Break up that random paragraph into at least two paragraphs, too.

    Other than those two suggestions, funny as balls. Thanks a bunch for entering my contest and good luck!


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    August 1
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    lol i dont need to comment cuz i already read it


  • davelolione gold member
    July 31

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    I liked the randomness of this

    Poor raccoon! sorry i can only give you second for this as i have already awardedfirst place.
    Please lok out for competitions as i win and earn points. i like to spread the love around.
    You are welcome to enter again any time.

    Dave

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Raining.Fire
    July 30
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    HILARIOUS!!!!!!!! lol. WONDERFULLY FUNNY!!!! GReat job!!!!


  • Satan-chan
    July 29

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    i think it hilarious!

    ahahahahahahahahahhaha lolx.. i love this.. man! i was crying because my mother told me to pick up my dog's trash... so i hate it! i got all stress up! llolx.. thank to ur story that i am all fine now. lolx.. hahahahaha thank


  • Queenie-Chan
    July 25
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    hahahahahaha this was so funny good job!!!


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    July 21
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    hahahahhaa funny! lolz


  • Lekos Memory
    July 18

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    Lol as this was really entertaining to read, I'm guessing you're not going to try to get this published so Im not going to critize it. Lol and if you are, I'll come back. Lol

    thanks for entering this into my contest and good luck.


  • Haratik
    July 18
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    lolz u got beat up ba leaves n animals XD


  • toolenduso
    July 17

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    Hilarious! I don't know what I'm gonna do about my rubric since it includes points for lack of errors, but the errors actually added to this piece...I think I'll just take it out. Anyway, funny stuff.

    So thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest!

    Style: 8/10
    Flow: 7/10
    Uniqueness: 5/5
    Readability: 4/7
    Effect: 9/10
    Personal Score: 3/5
    Total: 36/47

    This is the same percentage as if you’d gotten 38.25 points under the 50-point system.

  • davidwright
    July 15
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    Very cute story you have a vivid imagination. Good luck in the contest and happy trails.


  • KaitieTheCheeto
    July 12
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    I loved this. It is quite unique xD
    Excellently done
    Good luck in my contest.
    -Kaitie


  • gaexi
    July 5
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    lol i can just see this conversation going on in my head
    kudos


  • Dead Beauty
    June 21

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    Judge's comment

    It's... different. Not quite what I was expecting and I'm not really sure how it fits into my contest. Sorry, but thanks for entering.


  • vamplover22907
    May 21
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    Wow what a way to explain why u got grounded. Hope you are no longer grounded Alec

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • XoXanimenurdXoX
    May 18
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    lol nice alec. love it lol check out my version i did a week or so ago hehe :3

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