As the sun beams its rays on our lives, like spring birds that sweep down on the flowers of our hearts, like fish that jump for joy over the excitement of our day, just like tickles of laughter that bounce on our day, like a rabbit that nibbles on the grass, when the pain of the past comes to our mist, we have to keep strong and forget about the painful picture that will never really last, instead lets smile today and show others the happiness that always lasts
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Very Sweet
I must say, this is soooo much better than Halmark. It's so cheerful and very beautifully written.
"when the pain of the past comes to our mist" Was my favourite part. I loved it.
Well Done,
-Chantale
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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better than halmark
Thank you for coming bye and dropping a encouraging remark, its most appreciated !
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Thank you
Aden ! Thank you so much for commenting on my poem ! I moved a year ago to a place with no internet, yet when I had internet, we chatted constantly, remember ? Its so good to see you ! -
OMG that's really sweet. I liked this a lot.
Bookmarked.
--Aden
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