I was in a hotel in Arizona where I had stayed many times over the previous year so I knew all the staff pretty well. It was summer (Very HOT) so there weren't very many people in the hotel. At night there was only one person on, a cute desk clerk named Chloe. Chloe had just gotten into college and was working the summer full time for some "extra cash". We had had many conversations as she was always at the desk when I would come in at night. 1
It was a Wednesday at about 1:00 am when i got this idea. I knew that Chloe was working and that she was the only one on duty. My 3rd floor room had a slider to a small balcony. The slider had a security bar which hinged on one side and came down when you closed the door preventing it from being opened from the outside. I decided I would lock myself out on the balcony naked. I took off all my clothes and, bringing my cell phone with me, I opened the door, just slightly,so that I could lean the security bar against it. I slipped out on the balcony and as i slid the door shut the bar slid down and locked into its' receiver. That was it! I was truly locked out on the balcony completely naked. I called the hotel. 2
Chloe answered and I said, "Hi Chloe. It's Mr. Thompson". "Hi Mr. Thompson." said Chloe, "I thought you were up in your room already." "Well I am, sorta" I replied in a meek voice, "but I'm in a bit of a bind". "What's the matter?" she asked. "Well", I said, "I was on the phone and I walked out on the balcony and when I closed the door the bar fell down and locked me out". Chloe thought this was hilarious! Between her giggly laugh she said, "Good thing you had your phone! No problem. I'll come up and let you in". "Well actually," I said in my best nervous voice, "You'd better send a dude up because I am not dressed", knowing, of course, that she was the only one in the place. "Oh my GOD!" she said in a squeeky voice, "Are you naked out there?" Well, Yeah", I said, "It's not like anyone can see me out here, especially at night". "Oh my God!" she said with a little giggle, "I guess you really are in a bind!" "Yes. I am." I replied. This was unbelievable! I could hear her wheels turning. "Well..." She drew the word out. "I'm the only one on duty and there won't be any guys here until 7 am". "Oh, shit", I said. "So, unless you want to stay out there all night," she said, "you'll have to let me come up and do it". I was silent for a second. I couldn't believe what I was hearing. "Well," I said nervously, "I guess it's ok. Nothing you havn't seen before i guess. Right?" "Well", she said, "not really but... The only other way would be if I called the manager and she would call one of the guys in but that would probably take over an hour, so - " "I guess it's best that you come up", I said. "I'll just be a minute." she said, and she hung up. 3
The next two minutes waiting were the longest and most excruciatingly wonderful minutes ever. I stood naked and helpless waiting for this pretty girl to come and rescue me. Then the door opened and Chloe walked in. She immediately looked to see me naked on the other side of the glass door. She walked towards me with the cutest embarrassed smile, picked up the security bar and slid open the door. She stood looking for a quick moment and said, "There you go". I slid past her into the room and replied, "Thank you very much Chloe". She surrendered this wonderful little giggle and said, "No problem". All the time she was looking me up and down. "I guess I'll see you tomorrow", she said as she headed toward the door. "Yes", I said. "And, thank you again." She looked back at me from the door and giggled again. "It's OK, really", she said. "I dont mind at all". and she was gone. 4
I was back at that hotel a number of times after that. Chloe and I never discussed the incident again but she always had a little knowing look in her eye. Also, after that night she started to call me "Paul" instead of "Mr. Thompson". I guess she felt she earned the right to be familiar.5
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very funny
You certainly are a naughty boy with nice naughty intentions lol
i love it i can imagine being the hotel clerk on shift it sure would be something i'd remember forever
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very cute! maybe make it a little bit longer, like if something actually had happened between them. otherwise, it wouldve been pointless for him to "get locked out"....
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ohhh nice! very cute^^ you should make it longer, like something happened, builds up on what he did, if not he kinda did it for nothing except for her to see him naked, which is pointless without erotica(:


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Very amusing. I would suggest that you space out the text when you have two people talking to each other instead of bunching it up into one paragraph.
Person A says, " ."
Person B replies, " ."
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very cute


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Oh Goshh!!!
Ahhah I can tell you like to be naked huh? lol Another halarious story
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Haha, this was really quite funny. I enjoyed the suspension you built in describing how he had to wait for her to come up and I think you conveyed the feelings of the two characters really well with the dialogue. The only thing I would suggest is that when a new person starts talking you should start that dialogue on a new line. This is the standard convension and it also makes it much easier to read and work out who is speaking. I dont mean to nit-pick your story because I thought it was most entertaining but that is just a suggestion to make it easier to read.
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this is really funny
you are good at these stotries
they keep me very intertained


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Great!
This is also a wonderfully written story. I do however, think that Erotica shouldn't be one of the categories. If you are reaching for erotic writing, you should try to develop some serious, sexual realtionships between your characters. If you'd like help with anything, please let me know. I would love to help you.

beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 2.
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