Love me, Love me...

Say that you love me.
1

When did she become baby?2

And when did I start being the one who wasn't around?3

When did everything you've ever said start to backfire?4

And when did hypocrisy become your style?5

How about secrets?6

And what about it all?7

When did you stop being... mine?8

When did I get put back on the dim back burner?

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  • Fallen Star
    June 30

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    -sighs- I just found this again.
    Can I hurt him? Please? ): He bothers me. It bothers me when you're upset. And it bothers me a lot when he's the one always upsetting you. Rawr. -hugs- ><


  • Upon Deaths Meeting
    June 14

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    Hmm... this is kind of soft, but the meaning is a deep one. I like how you wrote it, but I wish you would use more emotion, rather than blunt words, that everyone can understand the meaning of. I think you have a good flow to your writing, but--I'm not saying all of your writing is like this--you should continue writing and improving.

    I enjoyed this and look forward to your other stuff in the near future... when I click on them and decide to comment, that is.


    • Noisome.
      June 15
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      Thank you very much. ^_^ I feel like everyone clicks on THIS particular piece as their first look at me, which is a bit misleading. For one, I don't write poetry, like, at all, and this wasn't even meant to BE a poem. It was just frustration. :]
      But thank you nonetheless. =)
      _Sarah.


  • BeckyVilRoolZeVorld
    June 6

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    Merr.......I liked it, Ms. Sarah Bunny. =3
    Luuurved it. You're writing skills are amazing, maii little Bunny. =]

  • IfYouSeeHer
    May 17

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    i love how you really write like you're talking to the person directly. not flowery. just brutally direct. loved it

    • Noisome.
      May 17

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      Thank you so much. =]
      And I'm pretty sure you were commented on by one of my lovely friends and I quite agree with him, your name is lovely and I approve as well.
      Obscure references are wonderful, no matter how 'obscure' they really aren't. x]
      -Sarah.


  • Just Breathe.
    May 17

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    ......This is an emotional poem, I can feel it. And I kinda know what you're going through. :/ This is a beautiful poem, I love it although it's short. (But I'm only used to longer poems. )

    Great job, and keep it up. I'm sure things will get better. ^^

    • Noisome.
      May 17
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      Thanks.
      Like I've been saying,it was really a spur of the moment thing and I just wrote down as it was going on. =/
      Thanks a ton. :]


  • Misguided Mess.
    May 16
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    Can I just kick his ass already?
    Like seriously, now?
    >=(
    Nobody hurts my Sarah. <3


    • Noisome.
      May 16
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      Your Sarah is okay.
      It was a spur of the moment thing, babe.


      • Misguided Mess.
        May 16
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        Still, these spur of the moment things are happening more frequently than usual.
        Hmph. I don't like him.


  • Lachrymose.
    May 15

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    It makes me sad when you're sad, love. I love you. I know I'm not the person who you wrote this for but I wanted to let you know anyways.


  • EmeraldLullaby
    May 15
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    P.S. The Cardigans are fantastic.


  • EmeraldLullaby
    May 15
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    Hmm. This is beautiful. The emotion is raw. I love it. You're pretty brilliant.

    • Noisome.
      May 16
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      Thank you.
      Usually I reply much faster to comments, but thank you very much.
      It was more of a "These thoughts must come out of my head" type of spur of the moment thing, but I suppose it's decent.
      Meant for it to be a journal.><


  • Play Pretend.
    May 15
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    I didn't think we were going to get upset anymore.
    Rawr.
    Not cool.
    Lemme at 'im.

    • Noisome.
      May 15
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      It was in the moment.
      From one specific conversation.
      That led into a better one that made me retract some of this.

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