Love of years

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It was love at first site........as the two friends known each other for years, yet to shy with each other as friends on how to express their love for each other......love at first site years ago without saying anything to each other turned to years later.2

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They were walking with each other one day after school in the pouring rain giggling and laughing at each others jokes and insain thoughts, when girl "Jane" tripped and fell in a puddle, gripping out of fear she latched on to "Jack" and ended up pulling him down as well.....they gazed in each others eyes as they have done to each other for the past few years, except this time "Jack" did something he should have done years ago that "Jane" wanted to express, he leaned over and kissed "Jane"s soft lips. With both eyes closed "Jane" felt the warmth of their lips connecting and didn't want to let go for as like "Jack" she wanted this for a long time and new they were more than best friends6

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feel the passion of their hearts

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  • Carina.J.LR
    May 15

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    Okay, your story was nice but I think you could have done with more detail, and some parts seemed very awkward. Otherwise keep writing and have fun!

    Thanks for entering and goodluck!

    -Carina