Even as the great eagle spread its wings for flight, Zuri could only feel envy. That freedom, so whole and unhampered by the rules of the earth, didn't seem to apply to animals as it applied to her. Be it insects, like the bee, wings technically too small to fly, to the great, majestic eagle that stood in front of her. As she watched, her eyes glinted with the evil of the green beast. Why was it that animals, brain deficient to that of the human, could do so much more? Without technology, without help from others. The animal standing on the looming cliff, seemed to answer her question. It leapt from its rock and began to rise into the air, immediately being yanked back. From its perch, a string was attached, clinging to the eagle’s foot. It tried again, letting out a cry. Zuri looked to it, and then stepped forward. The bird coward from her, but she took out her knife and sliced through the string. The eagle flew into the air before she had even brought her tool back to her side, and then she knew. Just as the bird flies, the human watches. They can not fly like the eagle, swim like the fish, nor run like the deer, but they can help those creatures that surrounded them. As she watched the bird go to the top of the canyon, where it reached a nest, she knew that nothing was deficient, be it in minds or bodies, there were just varieties. The only thing that makes one being inferior to the next is he appreciation and the use of the gift they have been given. Zuri looked up and smiled. Who knew, maybe one day the sky would be open to humans as well.
Author notes
I just felt like, typing, and this came out. Then, when I was done, I thought to this contest, adn thought, "what the heck!" 
I hope you like it and that it follows all the rules, however I couldn't decide f it fit in any of the genres. Please, tell me if I broke any rules and I'lltry to fix it. Ha ha, it took a while to eit out some of thewords to get only 300. I starte with 328, then got down to 302. That was hard.
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Comments
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Beautiful read
Good luck in the contest! great writer to manage one paragraph and be soo descriptive.
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Powerful imagery - and it is like you've used the bird and then its assisted escape from it bounds as an analogy for the human condition, while at the same time reflecting on how we humans see other forms of creation as inferior - and yet are jealous of some gifts that are unattainable.
Thank you for your entry in Just one paragraph...
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i luvd this, absolutely beautiful. this wud so b good 4 a holiday lyk independence day.
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This is well written, but I found one sentence awkward " The bird (coward) from her, but she took out her knife and sliced through the string." >smiles<
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Wow. That is strong, it brings every aspect of our purpose into one vivid paragraph
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Thanks, I'm happy you liekd it.
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Nice job! you really have a talent at writing! So this is a 'free write' for a contest?
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Thanks. It was kind of a free-write thing for a contest. I felt like typing, so I started typing a random sentence, and it built into this. Then, I thought I'd enter it.
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This made me think of Kana for some reason.
I like the imagery and metaphore in this, a very powerful paragraph but a little long and rambly. You refure to the eagle as a hawk at some point, aren't eagles and hawks different animals all together? I don't know my birds well but still. Otherwise this was really good. Is Zuri one of the upcoming characters in one of your books or just some random creation? Knowing you either way you know a lot about Zur by now. Love the name though.
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ooops, I will have to fix the hawk thing. I knwo they aren't the same. I started with a hawk, but decided eagles were cooler. Must of forgotten to change one. lol, I know it was a little rambally. i just decided to type soemthing that wasn't my book, and this popped up. No previous planning at all. I had no idea where I was going. I t hink it turned out decnetly, though. Thank you for the comment.
No, Zuri is the name of that farie thing in that novel idea I'm never going to do by myself. I just thought of the first name that came to mind, and that was it. However, I may use this passage as a pole to jump with when it comes to characters imn the Root, I don't know.
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Lovely short paragraph with a message
Eagles are so useful as a metaphor.
they look so noble and powerful, but they can also be so vulnerable. I like the message that we all have to use what we have and that we can all help each other to achieve our individual possibilities.
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Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it.
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