shadow

Franticly shadow looked for a place to hide as shadow jumped behind the abandoned fruit stand just narrowly escaping shires icy cold talons. Shadow is a tall sleek figure with pitch black eyes and deathly black fur shadow is a aerial rabbit but is very strong for his age and very fit also . Shire is a red dragon with the power of ice he has been after shadows family since shadow was small. Ever since shadows parents have diapered mysteriously shire has been after shadow now shadow must fight for his life and find the mystery of his parents disappearance shadow is 18 years old and now is an assassin fighting through anything and everything that gets in his way. Well back to the fight shadow threw his last two shuriken at shires tail then a blood curdling screech then a deathly silence. Shire had disappeared . As shadow had walked away from the battle claiming his trophy… years later in mi shadow had been offered a job to assassinate the mayor of mi when he stopped by the weapons shop in mi he had bought several shuriken then left as he was leaving he heard a bystander speaking of a red dragon in Toyang and forgot about the job he had in mi and left for the trip toyang on the way he had seen a icy cold city being evacuated as fast as possible and the only thing that flowed through his mind was shire . As he ran through the city gates narrowly dodging speeding people he saw him shire pinning a child down against the roof. As shire lifted his icy cold talon a fast moving projectile narrowly missing shires face by inches whizzes past and gets shire square in the blood dripping paw as shires other paw reaches up to pull the shuriken out of his other paw the kid zipped away at a high speed. Then shadow zooming past shire a horrible ripping sound as shire caught shadow by the back of his shirt and dragged him up so they were just the same size and raised his paw every talon shaking with anxiety about to drag his claw across shadows black fur cutting him into small pieces “I’ve been waiting for this for a long time “ shire growled thinking quick shadow slipped out of the bloody talons that wreaked of rotting blood and death then shadow muttered “this isn’t the last time you will see me” then shadow was gone. This aerial rabbit was the best or should I say sneakiest Aerial rabbit there was. As shadow was walking down the dusty path filled with street venders and conmen the dirt road was packed full of people and would be the perfect place if you were a psycho dragon planning on murdering all humans and turning the world into a dragons paradise full of dragons. But that’s just what shadow planed on stopping then shadow heard an explosion and a ball of solid ice was hurdling toward him at high speed more than any charted speed shadow dodged it with a swift move and then went after the one that threw it. It was shire looking for shadow growling as loud as he can “were is shadow” “over here” shadow hollered shuriken ready at hand shadow and shire lunged at each other on cue ready to strike and then the crowed scattered like millions of tiny flies away from a fly swatter then everything was silent… when shadow awoke a few hours later there was a roar from a crowd as shadow opened his eye to see several oddly looking people staring at him with wide eyes and opened mouths shadow got up and looked around he had never seen this place before. He asked a bystander what city he was in he said “we also do not know where we are we were carried here by a giant red dragon and then he left us here “were is the door” shadow asked the man pointed and said “over there” as shadow walked to the door of the icy layer he threw 3 shuriken in different areas then the door cracked and they were free but one more question were was shire. As the group walked through the door into the icy cold layer they saw a flicker of light and told the group “wait here” as he went to find the source of the light he saw shire and got his shuriken ready at hand then as he rounded the corner he came to find out that there were two small baby dragons feasting on a hunk of meat ripping it to shreds in there massive jaws with there sharp teeth tearing into every bit shadow put his shuriken away and left to get the group but when he returned they were gone. They had left him there for shire and didn’t know he was supporting a family instead of just murdering for other purposes …then minutes after looking for the exit he was confronted by shire and he knew he was in trouble but what he didn’t know was shires children were waiting for the right moment to strike . Then shadow felt there presence but didn’t have time to dodge there attack . While shadow was on the ground with the two red dragons trying to rip into his back shadow had no other choice but to kill them he held the shuriken tightly in his hand ready to strike then came the final blows but not by him by the group that left him the children hit the ground with a smack and then shire was outraged but nothing would stop shadow from discovering his parents mystery he had to take out shire right there right then as shadow lunged at shire tear in his eye delivering the final blow to the neck and then he was gone …. One year later in mi he heard someone screaming “THERE IS A NEW DRAGON CAN ANYBODY HELP US PLEASE” and with that shadow was off to find the next dragon and get a step closer to his parents mystery 1

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i came up with the name shadow and wrote this down when i was bored

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  • Violette silver member
    June 20

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    Okay from a critical point of view, you need to work on sentence structure, paragraph seperation and general grammar rules. Everything else was fine. What can i say? Dragon tales just seem to pull at my heart strings. Well done.


  • Marisalyn13
    June 14
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    good job. good luck. and thanks for entering

  • This is nice, but I think you should put it into paragraphs it gets kind of confusion. Other than that this was good

  • I recommend you break this down into paragraphs instead of one giant one. It will be easier to read.

    I like the description you use in this. Really nice. You also found my weak point. DRAGONS. I love my dragons and enjoy reading others. lol

    Thanks for entering this into my contest.