When I was 141
I knew someone2
who was getting abused by their dad3
She would have these bruises on her arms and legs4
And I always wondered why5
But I was afraid to ask6
She didn't have any friends7
I think I was the only one that talked to her8
She always seemed to smile and laugh at me9
Well I was kinda silly back then10
anyway11
she always sat alone12
looking sad....13
I bet she was dreading to go back home14
I wanted to help her15
To protect her from her Dad16
I should have told someone 17
The teacher, my mum, someone...18
Maybe she would still be here if I had acted19
Still laughing and smiling at me20
Now she has gone to a place with no more pain 21
No more abuse22
Just peace and happiness23
With people who love her24
You are an inspiration to me25
I will always remember26
Your laugh, your smile27
Your soul can now rest28
R.I.P sweetheart love you very much29
keep on shining30
concrete angel
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what do you think? comments please
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awww that IS sad. i picked up on your flow. it begins to rhyme like every 3 or 4 lines. i gotcha! but all in all it was good.
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Thats so sad. Ive never actually been in that situation that serious but..well it was sad. Your very good!!I think you should write short stories!!
plot: 5.
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Nice. I like it.
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I could have sworn I commented on this. Oh well. I think it's sad but well written.
--Aden
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it is a very touching poem and it is very well writen
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Good poem
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Very good
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thats well written, really sad though,
well done
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This was beautiful Dave. It was full of emotion.
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wow that is soo sad... but very nice good job my lover (L)
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OMG, THATS AMAZINGGGG !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! good job hun
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