R.I.P

Dear sister,1

I know you never got to meet me. I never got to meet you either.I bet your a beautiful baby know.Does Jesus take care of you in heaven?I bet It's beautiful. You know we all cried when you left us on this cold lonely world. Please come back... MOLLY! It was mom what are you doing??!!! Get you Butt up! She grabbed me by the arm and punched me in the face.Mommy i'm sorry what did i do??!!! You didn't clean the kitchen!! She pulled my hair and started walking into the hall...then she got my face and swung me over the balcony. She said bye then let me go. I died that day. April 25,1979.2

Long live Molly3

May 18,1968-April 25,1979

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  • Lies4Truth
    May 23

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    Wow a but i was confused because who died the baby or the narrator? or are they the same person either way really good


  • reilly500
    May 5
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    Sad and intense. But at the end i got confused, who died?


  • Kevan gold member
    May 5

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    This is really sad. It's very intense, and one can easily relate to the emotion you conveyed in this piece. Great job, and keep writing.

    Welcome to the website.
    Kevan (Greeter)