Blood Rose

Prologue1

I backed into the dark corner fear filling my heart as I moved my hand down his arm into his hand as I drug him with me. His eyes flamed a smoldering crimson as they burned through me, making it hard to breathe. I gasped as a devious smile spread across his face; his fangs extended glinting in the dim candlelight. He laughed as he roughly pushed me back pinning me in the corner. His sweet cool scent caught my undivided attention drawing me in closer, tempting me. Terrified I pulled my hand from his and looked deeply into his pale face noting his every feature. As I moved a lock of his shagy raven hair a small crescent scar that lined the outside of his right eye was revieled, a symbol of his past. I ran my fingers lightly across the scar,he flinched at the touch and his grip around me tightened as he pushed me hard once again this time until my back was pinned to the dusty wall behind me. I gasped at the impact,and at the way he was looking at me. Tantalizing, he was my own personal Heaven as he was all in the same my own personal Hell as
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“Don’t be afraid,” He breathed, his voice husky as he leaned in closely his lips brushing gently against the hollow of my neck just beyond my ear. I tensed at his words but couldn't help but melt as his soft strong voice rang beautifully in
my ears. He was like a dangerous drug, everything about him was addicting, and I couldn't get enough. “Do you not love me as you love the glow of a tender full moon, or the lightning of a stormy night?” He spoke the truth I did love him more than I had ever loved before. He was my passion and my nightmare. “You know...you know I do.” I managed to whisper as he pressed his perfect lips to my throat. Chills shot through me at his touch and I laced my fingers in his hair,his kiss seared my skin. My heart beat faster and faster, racing and pounding with solid thuds in my chest, my knees became weak I could no longer stand, nor were they willing to support me. Two large strong hands snaked down my sides only to catch me in my downward slope to the floor below. His smile was devious and delicious, his eyes burning with hell’s darkest flame, and I was powerless against him.3

He swept me into his arms. I placed my arms around his icy neck,and closed my eyes afraid of what was to come. He had never been this cold, this rough, this dangerous, this tempting......this....sexy.4

I opened my eyes as he laid me down on the ancient leather couch in the corner,the rest of the room was complete chaos from the chase before,He had my arms pinned to my sides with his knees as he towered over me, and I was too petrified to move. What was to come? Death, pain, was this the end for me? My mind was in panic mode but my heart wanted nothing more than to love him despite all of the pain he had caused me.
“Simply beautiful.” He whispered in a soft tone, just centimeters from my face. Towering over me he brushed a stray strand of hair from my face, his eyes flashed blood as he leaned in and pressed his soft lips to my neck… 5

Author notes

This is the prologue for the novel I've been writing the rest of the files to follow soon!

Scream: Avenged Sevenfold

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  • mememe6
    November 4

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    A good start! I would like to know what creature the boy is, a vampire maybe? I couldn't tell. But other than that, you could have done a bit more describing of what was going on.

    Thank you for entering, and good luck!

    -Anna


    • Simply a Memory
      November 5
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      Thank you! Yes the boy is a vampire, Its still a work in progress this is just the prologue. Thank you for the advice I truly appreciate it.

      ~Stormy-Ann~


  • the class
    October 2

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    This was written really well. Very intense, well done. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck


  • Reaver Greeters member
    September 30

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    Though i really enjoyed this...it was a prologue and the contest called for full stories There were a few grammatical mistakes, but the story holds great promise and i would look forward to reading more of it!

    Keep writing and Good luck!!

    Rian


  • Shadow Pixie
    September 18

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    This is a great idea and a really well-written prologue, but I think you'd benefit from pausing a little. Some of the sentences are a little long, but you could fix that by inserting some commas here and there. I also think you might want to watch your use of the word "as" - you use it a little too much for the text to flow comfortably. Nice entry though, I liked it!
    Thanks for entering!

    ~ Lí-Lí


  • StarOfDreams23
    September 17

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    wow great job! This really took me in! I loved the passion! I loved it! Finally someone writes about something like sex or is sex! ^w^ Thank you for entering and good luck!!!


  • Lady Mannequin
    September 16

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    I love this!
    It makes me want to read more
    Great prologue and I like your favourite song

    Thanks for entering!

    iPanda xx


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 15
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    Wow nicely done. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!


  • May Kingston
    May 14

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    Sweetness! I absolutely love it! The description is so great, it just draws me in... I especially liked the way you described the guy. This was a really great story. Thank you for entering!

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