The Heart of Me

So like the rose
And still sixteen
The flower faded
Already falling away1


At five I sat on daddy's knee
Laughing and crying
He blamed it on sugar2


At ten I sat in uncomfortable chairs
In a shrink's office missing school
We'd already tried Ritalin3


But eleven it was too late
Mommy didn't run away but died
I already knew4


Twelve years old remembers her face
The ugly thing that took the love
Wanted me dead5


Turned thirteen in a strange world
And I became a strange girl there
Knew hate before my own name6


Fifteenth birthday and I was loved
You say man, but I say god and he was
Taken away7


Sixteen wasn't better even though
It really started in November
The year before8


I think it's the writing that does me in
You see
It's at the heart of me9


-Andi

Author notes

I chose a poem and yes, it's all true as well. Poems lie this, I'm alwasy honest in them. The ind of life I've had doesn't require lies to mae in interesting though lies seem to come in anyway.

Oh, lord! I hope we're allowed to use P's in the ANs!

-Andi

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  • Underground Vixen
    May 5

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    interesting

    it's done well, though I think it could use soem help with the flow. And yes, p's in the author's comments are perfectly fine. Lol.


  • hardcorelove
    May 4
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    wow oddly this caught my atentio..i liked it alt...god job


  • His.Golden.Eyes
    May 3
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    Nice. It's cute and I like it.

    • Andiness
      May 3
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      thank you, I wan't allowed to use the letter P in it by the rules of the contest, that was surprisingly easy, lol

      LOL!!! You used the icon! Sweet!!! *warm fuzzies*

      -Andi

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