I See You...

It was six o 'clock in the evening, and the sun was setting slowly out of the sky leaving the town in a premature darkness. I had logged on to a chat site to cure my boredom while my mom was downstairs curing her depression by drinking. I was looking through the list of people who were online when a pop up appeared on my screen.1

Derek26: Hey2

XxEmoHeartxX: Hey3

Derek26: A/S/L?4

XxEmoHeartxX: 16/f/usa5

I didn't even think twice about giving some random person my information.6

Derek26: Wow! Really? I'm 16/m/usa, what state do you live in?7

I was a little hesitant at first but then typed my response.8

XxEmoHeartxX: Minnesota9

Derek26: I live in MN too!10

XxEmoHeartxX: Really? What town?11

Derek26: I'm not telling you ... you could be a stalker!12

I laughed at this. Me, a stalker!13

XxEmoHeartxX: I'm not a stalker! I just wanted to know if I actually knew you before now.14

Derek26: Well what's your name?15

XxEmoHeartxX: Mandi16

Derek26: I don't think I know a Mandi17

XxEmoHeartxX: I can only assume that your name is Derek, and I don't know a Derek.18

Derek26: You do now!19

His comment made me laugh but I wasn't sure what to say.20

Derek26: So can I ask you a question?21

XxEmoHeartxX: You can ask me anything you want. However, I can't promise I'll answer.22

Derek26: Are you pretty?23

XxEmoHeartxX: That's a trick question24

Derek26: What do you mean?25

XxEmoHeartxX: If I say yes I'm conceited and if I say no I have no self esteem.26

Derek26: You're very smart! Can you describe to me what you look like then?27

XxEmoHeartxX: I'm about 5' 5", and 115 pounds. I have long thick straight black hair, and hazel eyes.28

Derek26: I hope you don't mind me saying this but you sound very pretty!29

XxEmoHeartxX: Thanks ... so what do you look like?30

Derek26: Well I'm 6' 3", and weigh about 210 pounds. All my weight comes from my football playing muscle. I have shaggy brown hair, and deep blue eyes.31

Ugh! I hate football playing jocks!32

XxEmoHeartxX: You play football?33

Derek26: Hell yes!34

XxEmoHeartxX: So you're a jock...35

Derek26: Well, I suppose that would make me a jock, yes.36

XxEmoHeartxX: Sorry, I don't talk to football playing, arm wrestling, think they know it all, jocks! Plus I'm emo and in the words of a few jocks who have stepped off their pedestal to talk to me, "our kind hates your kind" ... so good bye talk to you never!'37

I knew that what I had said was way judgmental but I didn't care. In my eyes all jocks were the same. Just as I was about to log off he typed something else.38

Derek26: WAIT!39

Wait? Now he thinks he can tell me what to do ... typical jock! He expects me to do what he tells me to do? I don't even do what the police tell me to do! Before I could stop myself I had responded.40

XxEmoHeartxX: What?41

Derek26: I'm not like the other jocks! The only reason I play football is because it's the only way to get out of the house for a few more hours! Please don't stop talking to me! The only reason I said that stupid thing about the football playing muscles is because girls usually like that sort of thing! I just wanted to impress you because you sound really pretty and you're really nice! Please don't hate me...42

XxEmoHeartxX: How do I know you're not lying?43

Derek26: Well ... you're just going to have to trust me!44

XxEmoHeartxX: We met like 20 minutes ago and you want me to trust you?45

Derek26: Please Mandi46

XxEmoHeartxX: Well ... I guess I could talk to you for a little while longer...47

Derek26: Hip hip hurray!48

I laughed a little.49

XxEmoHeartxX: So what do you do for fun?50

The next morning I had to wake up early for school. I was so tired because I had stayed up till midnight talking to Derek. He had asked me to be his girlfriend and I accepted, even though I had just met him. I gave him my email address so that we could stay in touch. He understood that I didn't feel comfortable giving him my phone number just yet. I told him what town I lived in, after he told me what town he lived in. I don't know why I did it though, because I had always been taught not to trust people off of the net. There was something about him though, something so innocent, and attractive that I was almost willing to do anything for him. I had told him about how my mom was an alcoholic whore and how my dad had died. I told him about how I was failing some classes. I had told him some of my deepest secrets, even the fact that I was still a virgin.51

I got dressed in tight black jeans, and a tight, black, long sleeve shirt with a neon blue fairy on it. Then, after brushing and straightening my hair, I parted it the way I always did, with it covering half of my face. I finished getting ready, grabbed my black skull shoulder bag and headed out the front door.52

I was glad I was able to avoid my mom. She was always a bitch in the mornings because she always had a hangover. My friends were already outside waiting for me, thankfully.53

School dragged on slowly, and afterwards my friends gave me a ride home telling me to meet them at the only pizza joint in town in an hour.54

I turned to the driveway after watching my friend's drive away and noticed that there was a new car in the driveway. 'Great ... mom has a new boyfriend!' I thought sarcastically. I slowly walked in the house and called out, "I'm home!" As I was closing the door I whispered, "If you care..."55

The only response was the sound of my mother's annoying laugh that she only used when she was drunk. I walked past the living room where my mother was sitting on the couch next to a man that was leaning over and whispering something into her hear.56

I rolled my eyes and walked up to my bedroom. After setting my skull bag down on my bed I sat down at the computer and decided to check my emails.57

As I logged on I noticed I had received some strange email. I opened it and it read:58

Hey honey, this is Derek. I miss you a lot! I know it seems weird since we have only talked for a short amount of time but I think I'm really falling for you! I wish you were here with me right now. Can you send me a picture of yourself? Derek59

I clicked reply and attached the best picture of me that I had on the computer. I quickly typed my reply.60

Hey Derek ... I miss you too! Anyway that's me in the attached picture. My friend's and I are planning on hanging out at the pizza place in town for a little bit later tonight and I better start walking unless I want to be late. Mandi61

I hit send and then shut down my computer. Suddenly my phone started to vibrate in my pocket. I answered it quickly, "Hello?"62

"Hey do you want a ride?" my friend Kevin said on the other end.63

"That would be great!" I exclaimed, now glad that I didn't have to walk.64

"Yea ... OK ... I'll be there in a few minutes!" he said as he hung up.65

I hung up my phone and put it back in my pocket. I ran down to the first floor and walked out of the house, not even bothering to tell my mom where I was going. Ever since my dad died when I was thirteen she didn't really pay much attention to me. She just got drunk and had sex with random men. She wasn't even smart about it. I mean seriously! If you're going to be a whore then at least get paid for it!66

As I got into the passenger seat of the car I said, "Hey, thanks for picking me up Kevin..."67

"No problem..." he said as he put the car into gear and started driving again.68

We pulled into the parking lot of the pizza place a couple of minutes later and got out of the car. My other friend's, Matt and Becca, were sitting in a booth making out. They had been dating for three years and ever since the beginning of their relationship lust was a big part of it.69

Besides them there was only one other customer in the entire place. He was sitting at the bar typing away on his laptop and having a drink. If I had to guess I would say that he was about 6'3, and weighed 200lbs. He had shaggy brown hair and piercing ice blue eyes. He looked to be in his late 20's, and he was staring at me intensely. I tried to ignore it and I sat down next to Kevin, across from Becca and Matt.70

Kevin laughed and said, "God, Matt, let her breathe!"71

Matt and Becca instantly pulled apart. Matt was laughing and Becca was blushing a little.72

An overly cheerful waitress walked up to us and handed us each a menu as she said, "Hello my name is Sandy and I will be your waitress this evening. Can I get you something to drink?"73

Kevin ordered us each a soda.74

"OK I'll be right back!" she said giving us a smile and then walking off to get our pops.75

We stayed at the pizza place for a couple hours. We never ran out of things to talk about.76

Afterwards I told Kevin that I would walk home. It was sprinkling outside and I loved to walk in the rain.77

By the time I was halfway home it was pouring down and I kept wishing that I had taken that ride.78

Ironically enough, a truck pulled up next to me on the side of the road. The driver rolled down his window and said, "Excuse me miss do you need a ride?"79

Without thinking I nodded my head and ran to the passenger side door and got in, happy to be out of the rain. "Thank you so much!" I said laughing a little. I looked over and suddenly realized that it was the strange man from the diner. My body instantly tensed up.80

"No problem ... it's really pouring down tonight huh?" he said as he pulled away from the curb and started driving again. Without waiting for my response he said, "So where are you headed?"81

"Just keep going straight for a while..." I said trying to hide the hint of fear in my voice.82

He tried to start small talk but it was a little awkward.83

Then out of nowhere he pulled over. He turned to me and asked, "Do you recognize me?"84

"No," I replied with a hint of confusion to my voice.85

"It's me ... Derek!" he replied with a smile on his face.86

"Derek!" I practically screamed. "What are you doing here?"87

"I came to take you back with me," he said with a dark smile on his face. "So we can really be together!"88

"I can't go back with you Derek," I said seriously. "I barely know you, and the fact that you took the time to find me is really creepy! I think I'm going to walk the rest of the way home."89

I was about to get out of the truck, but he gabbed my wrist. "No! I'm taking you back with me! It's for your own good, you'll see!" he said as grabbed a gun out from underneath the driver's seat. "Now just sit still and I won't have to hurt you. Do you understand?" His eyes looked so dark, yet serious. He looked like he really believed what he was doing was going to help me.90

"Derek please let me go home! You haven't thought this through. This is kidnapping and you're going to go to jail for it! Let me go!" I pleaded as I started to pull against his grip on my wrist.91

"Sweetheart you will soon find that I don't care about the law," he said as he put the gun to my head. "I do what I want, when I want, and right now I want to bring you back with me! Now stay still."92

I started to cry and my whole body began to shake. I closed my eyes tightly, not wanting to see what he was going to do.93

I felt a needle being stuck into my arm and my eyes shot open. I hated needles. I had a phobia of needles. I truly wished that needles had never been invented.94

As he pulled the needle out of my arm my body began to feel weak. He leaned over and kissed my forehead and then whispered, "Go to sleep sweetheart. We have a very long drive ahead of us. When you wake up we will be in my RV and you will be restrained. Don't worry though sweetheart, it's only to stop you from doing something that might get you hurt. Sweet dreams."95

As he was speaking I could feel myself drifting into the land of sleep.96

I woke up lying on what I assumed was the small bed inside his RV. My hands were tied to the headboard and my legs were spread apart, individually tied to the end bedposts. There was tape over my mouth and a blindfold over my eyes. I felt that the vehicle was moving and I assumed that Derek was up front driving us to wherever he was taking me.97

At first I tried to escape my restraints, but after a while I gave up. It was no use. The restraints were too tight and too strong for me to really do anything.98

I'm not sure how many hours I was awake before I finally felt the RV stop. I heard Derek's footsteps coming closer and closer to where I was restrained. My heart started to beat faster with every passing second. Then his footsteps stopped.99

"Are you awake, darling?" Derek asked.100

Hesitantly I nodded my head. Maybe if he knew I was awake he would let me out of the restraints.101

"I'm going to let you come out to get some breakfast. If you try anything stupid I'm going to put you right back where you are now. Do you understand?" he asked as he started to walk closer. His voice was stern but calm.102

I nodded my head again, showing him that I understood.103

He untied my ankles first. Then he gently took the tape off of my mouth. Next he took off my blindfold and then untied my hands, making sure to keep a good hold on my wrists. He gently pulled me to my feet and stood behind me, still holding onto my wrists. He led me out of the small bedroom area and into the main part of the RV.104

After he let go of my wrists he motioned for me to sit down at the small table, and I quietly obeyed. I could see the gun tucked into his pants and that alone made me want to be obedient. I didn't want to take the chance of pissing him off. I was too young to die.105

"What would you like for breakfast sweetie?" he asked as he leaned against the counter and looked at me.106

I shrugged my shoulders as I stared out of the window. "It doesn't matter," I said quietly as I tried to figure out where we were. There were no signs around, and all I could see was a field and a bunch of trees.107

He sighed as he turned around to face the refrigerator. "Do you want scrambled eggs and bacon or pancakes?" he asked in what sounded like a disappointed tone.108

"Scrambled eggs and bacon I suppose," I answered as I stared at the blue sky. Scrambled eggs and bacon was much easier to poke a fork at. I wasn't really hungry, but I was willing to do anything to stay out of those restraints.109

He silently started to cook my breakfast, and I continued to stare out the window. I tried to think of something I could do to escape.110

Minutes later he sat down at the small table across from me and set a plate filled with scrambled eggs and bacon down in front of me. Quietly he handed me a fork and then began to eat his own plate of food.111

As he ate I poked at my eggs and took a few small bites of the bacon.112

When he was done he looked at me and asked, "What's wrong? Don't you like my cooking?"113

"It's fine ... I'm just not hungry," I answered quietly with my head down. His gun was sitting on the table now, pointing towards me. It was reminding me not to piss him off.114

"Are you sick?" he asked in a worried tone as he reached over and placed the back of his hand on my forehead. I instinctively turned my head away.115

"Come on, let's get you back in bed so I can start driving again. We still have a long ways to go," he said coldly as he stood up. He took the dishes and put them in the sink. He turned to face me and held out his hand for me to take.116

"I have to use the restroom," I said quickly. I knew that there would probably be a window in there that I could sneak out through.117

"Fine. Come on," he said as he took my hand gently and pulled me to my feet. He led me to the small bathroom and opened the door for me. "You have one minute before I open the door so make it quick."118

I nodded my head and then walked inside. He closed the door for me. Quietly I walked over to the window and slid it open. I managed to slide through the window without making a sound but when I hit the ground I whimpered a little. I stood up and took off running as fast as I could towards the woods. I knew it would be harder for him to find me in there.119

I heard the RV door open and close and him calling my name, yelling for me to stop. I heard a gun shot go off and I stumbled over my own feet. I fell to the ground and started crying knowing that he would catch me now. I heard his footsteps coming towards me. Then I heard something amazing. My ring tone started to go off in my pocket. I pulled my phone out of my pocket and answered it. Before I could say anything Derek snatched it away from me. I looked up at him in fear. The gun was pointed towards my chest and he had a cold look in his eyes. He turned off the phone and threw it as far away from us as possible.120

"Stand up," he ordered in that cold tone. I slowly got to my feet. He grabbed me by my upper arm and dragged me back to the RV. After he pushed me inside, he made me walk back to the bedroom area.121

When I realized that he was going to bind me again I turned around to face him. "Derek, I'm sorry," I said quickly. He still looked cold. "Please don't make me go back in the restraints. I won't try to escape again. I promise!"122

He backhanded me across the face so hard that I fell to the ground and hit my forehead against the small nightstand. He took in a slow deep breath and picked me up off the floor. Quietly he laid me down on the bed, and tied my hands and feet up again. He leaned down and kissed me softly on the lips. I whimpered a little bit but was too weak to pull away. He put the blindfold back over my eyes and the tape back over my mouth. Seconds later I felt another needle being poked through my skin. Slowly I fell asleep.123

I woke up to a man that I didn't recognize carrying me bridal style into a small, white, two-story house. He was tall and muscular, just like Derek, but unlike Derek he had blonde spiked hair and green eyes. I stayed still as he carried me like that into the house because I was still a little weak from whatever drug Derek had given me. As soon as we got into the house the man that was carrying me dropped me onto the couch and walked into the kitchen. Immediately three Doberman Pinchers ran over to the couch and started to bark and growl at me. I pressed my back further into the couch knowing that if I tried to do anything the dogs would attack. It took all my energy to hold back my tears.124

A girl that looked to be about eighteen walked down the stairs and stopped in her tracks when she saw me. She ran back up the stairs, passing Derek as he was coming down. He smiled when he saw me on the couch and told the dogs to go lay down. Immediately the dogs stopped barking and disappeared into the kitchen. Derek walked over to me and took me lightly by the hand. Instinctively I tried to pull away from him but he just tightened his grip. He pulled me to my feet and immediately kissed me lightly on the lips. I was stunned. He tugged lightly on my hand and took me upstairs. My heart started to beat faster when I realized he was taking me to a bedroom. I wanted to run but I knew that with all the dogs I would never be able to get away. When we passed by one of the bedroom's I noticed two other girls sitting on a bed talking, one of them was the one that saw me sitting on the couch. We passed by the bathroom and since there was no door I could see a man showering. I looked away instantly, but from the little I saw of him he looked very muscular.125

"This is your bedroom from now on baby girl," he said. "You share it with me. I think Danny and Justin bought you some clothes. They should be in the dresser. Why don't you find something to change into, we're eating lunch soon." He stood behind me and rubbed his hands up and down my upper arms. I heard a small growl coming from inside his throat. "Mmm, and afterwards..." Instead of finishing his sentence he started to kiss and gently bite my shoulders. Chills ran down my spine.126

I moved a few steps away from him and turned around to face him. "Can I get changed now?" I asked almost whispering it.127

He chuckled and sat down on the bed. "Go right ahead..."128

"Can I have some privacy?" I asked in a shaky tone.129

"Mmm, I'll give you one minute," he said as he again stood up from the bed. He must have seen the fear in my eyes. He chuckled and gave me a soft kiss. "If you try anything stupid you will regret it!" he whispered into my ear. "Come out when you're done." He left the room and started to close the door but left it open a crack.130

After wiping my hand softly across my lips, trying to get the feel of him off of me, I walked to the window and looked out. It was way too far to jump. I decided to try to find another way to escape. I quickly walked to the dresser and grabbed a pair of tight black jeans and a simple white tank top. I also grabbed a white lace bra and a white thong, since it was basically my only choice. I got dressed and ran a brush through my hair as fast as I could while I tried to hold back my tears. I knew what was going to happen to me later that night. I was so tempted to quickly push the door close and lock it, but I realized that he probably had a key to get back in. I figured that it would only piss him off, so why bother?131

I walked over and slowly opened the door. Derek was waiting for me in the hallway. He smiled and took my hand.132

"You look so hot!" he said as he gently pushed me against a wall and started to kiss me.133

Without thinking, I pushed him away from me as hard as I could. He stumbled backwards and tripped over his own two feet, falling to the floor and hitting his head against the wall.134

"What the fuck do you think you're doing?" I heard a man yell from down the hall. I turned my head and saw the man that had carried me into the house walking towards me angrily. The other two girls were standing next to each other near the top of the staircase looking at us with fear in their eyes. I backed up quickly into a corner. The man grabbed me by my hair and pushed me harshly to the floor. He kicked my stomach as hard as he could, and I cried out in pain. Derek got up and stopped him. I was lying on the floor crying and holding my tummy. The man grabbed my hair again and pulled me to my feet. I whimpered in pain and closed my eyes tightly as I continued to cry. The man pulled my hands behind my back and held them there with one hand while he held my hair tightly with the other hand. I opened my eyes and through my tears I could see Derek standing in front of me. He was staring angrily straight into my eyes.135

After a couple of seconds he slapped me across the face, hard. The man that was holding me stopped me from falling to the floor but that didn't make it hurt any less. Derek pulled me away from this man and pushed me back into the bedroom I was now forced to call mine.136

"Eat without us!" Derek said while he picked me up and threw me over his shoulder. I whimpered in fear, but was too afraid to struggle. Derek closed the bedroom door and locked it. He threw me onto the bed and got on top of me. "Never push me away!" He aggressively took off my shirt and pulled my jeans off. I begged him to stop but he just slapped me again. I closed my eyes tightly trying to block out the pain. Soon I was naked and so was he. He forced my legs open, which caused almost instant bruises. Then held me down with one hand while he forced himself inside of me.137

When he was done, he collapsed on top of me and lay there breathing deeply for a few minutes while I lay underneath him crying.138

He got off me and pulled the blankets over me, telling me to get some rest. He walked out of the room and I heard him start the shower.139

I got out of the bed and got dressed as quickly as I could. My whole body was in pain but I didn't care. I walked over to the bedroom door. It was locked. I walked over to the window and opened it. At this point I wasn't thinking clearly, I just knew I had to get out of there. I stuck my head out of the window and looked down. I knew that it was too far to jump without being hurt, but again I wasn't thinking straight. I heard the bedroom door open and another man say, "Get the hell away from that window!" I quickly crawled out onto the ledge and jumped to the ground.140

I hit the ground with a thud and cried out in pain. My body hurt immensely but I didn't let that stop me. I got up and started to run, ignoring my pain. I ran into the nearby forest, dodging trees as I ran by them. I could hear the dogs barking as they were let loose to run after me. I tried to run faster, but I could feel them closing in.141

Within a few minutes one of the dogs bit the bottom of my jeans causing me to trip and fall to the ground. As I fell I hit my head against a tree and passed out.142

When I woke up I was handcuffed to the bed in my new bedroom. My head was in a lot of pain but I tried to ignore it. I turned my head and saw Derek standing next to the window looking at me with hatred in his eyes. I winced in fear and looked the other way.143

"What the hell were you thinking?" he asked angrily. "Do you really think you can run away from me? You can't! You're mine now, and I'll never let you leave!" He was yelling now and I could sense that he was getting closer to me.144

"I'm sorry!" I cried out in fear as I looked back at him. He immediately slapped me across my face. I whimpered in pain and started to cry. "Please don't hurt me," I whispered through my tears.145

"Shut up you stupid whore!" he yelled as he straddled me and hit me again. He hit me multiple times before I had a chance to talk again.146

"Please stop! I promise I'll be good. I won't try to escape anymore!" I said through my tears.147

I saw his eyes soften slightly. "If you ever disobey me again, I'll kill you! Do you understand?" he asked in a stern tone.148

"Yes, I understand. I promise I won't try to escape anymore. Just please stop hurting me!" I begged.149

After that night I was never allowed to be alone. I always had one of the three men making sure I wasn't trying to escape. Instead of hanging around with the other two girls I usually just stayed in my room and thought about home. Although, I did learn that the blonde girl was named Kat. She was from Germany and she had come to America as a foreign exchange student. The guy that had kidnapped her was Danny. He was the man who had carried me into the house that first day. The red headed girl was named Kasey. She was Justin's to play with. Justin was tall, but not as muscular as Danny or Derek. He had brown hair like Derek, but his was spiked up like Danny's. His eyes were a bluish grey color. They always looked so cold. Out of the three men he was the meanest. He never let Kasey get away with anything and it seemed like every morning she had a new bruise.150

At night Derek would attempt to get me to have sex with him willingly but in the end I would always refuse. That didn't matter to him though. No matter how hard I struggled or begged, Derek wouldn't stop fucking me until he had cum.151

For months it was like this, until one night Justin got tired of Kasey.152

I remember being in my bedroom with Derek. I was lying on the bed day dreaming about one of the parties I went to when I was back at my home. Derek was sitting at the coffee table in the corner of the room on his laptop. I remember hearing Kasey screaming for help and then hearing a gun shot go off.153

Derek quickly got up and grabbed my wrist. He pulled me off the bed. I managed to quickly find my balance and run behind him out of the room.154

He led me to Justin and Kasey's room and stopped dead in his tracks. I realized why when I saw Kasey lying on the floor in a pool of blood.155

A couple of seconds later Danny and Kat ran into the room and stopped cold when they saw what happened. Justin was standing over the body holding a pistol. Kat started crying and I just stood there in shock.156

"Come on guys ... help me move the body. We have to get this thing to the river. The water will wash away all the evidence!" Justin said as he put the pistol back in its case and locked it.157

Derek quietly walked over and the two of them picked up Kasey's body. They carried her outside and disappeared into the night.158

Danny stayed behind to keep an eye on Kat and I. Kat walked over and buried her head in my chest as she sobbed. I wrapped my arms around her and tried to comfort her. I had never been good at comforting others but I tried my best. Danny started to clean up the blood on the floor while Kat and I stood in the corner quietly crying. I knew that we had to get out of the house before the other two men came back. I took Kat's hand and led her towards the door.159

"Danny," I said quietly. "Can I take Kat downstairs to get her something to drink?"160

Danny hesitated a little bit and then nodded his head. "Come back up when you're done!" he said as we walked out of the room.161

We walked silently down the stairs and then I led her out the front door. She knew as well as I that we needed to leave. We ran into the forest and dodged the trees as we ran by them. I didn't even know where we were going but I had a feeling that we were going the right way.162

Soon we reached a road. We slowed to a walk and marched silently forward. We didn't know where we were going but we knew that it was better then being with Derek, Danny, and Justin.163

After a while we heard a car stop behind us. We turned around quickly, scared that it was one of them. We saw a man get out of the truck but it wasn't Danny, Derek, or Justin.164

He started to walk towards us. "You girls need a ride?" he asked. He sounded nice and trustworthy, but I wasn't about to take a chance.165

"No, we don't, but do you have a cell phone we can use?" I asked as Kat hid behind me. I knew at that moment that Kat would never be able to trust men again. I have to admit that I was a little scared looking at him too.166

"I have a car phone," he said kindly. I nodded my head hesitantly and motioned for Kat to stay where she was. I started to walk over to the car, but as soon as I was within reach the man grabbed me by my hair and pulled me closer to him. Kat screamed and took off running down the road in the other direction.167

Danny got out of the back seat of the car and took off running after her. Derek got out after him and started to walk towards me. I started to struggle against the man that was holding me as hard as I could. When Derek reached me he slapped me as hard as he could across my face and I fell to the ground. I whimpered in pain and fear. He took out a gun and I started to cry when I saw it. He cocked the gun and pointed it at me.168

"Please Derek! Please don't! I'll be good! I promise I'll be good! I won't disobey you anymore! I promise!" I begged through my tears.169

He smirked and said, "It's too late! You had your chance! Good bye baby girl!" With that he shot me through the heart. I died instantly, never knowing what happened to Kat.

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  • You should make a sequal about KAt


  • CloakedAssassin
    September 3
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    wow.. Rape isn't a good subject..

  • I was shaking the whole time Mandi was kidnapped by Derek. Great story.

  • This was suspenseful. The whole idea/plot of this story was creepy as well, especially when things like this do happen in reality. I felt the characters were believable. From beginning to end, this was a good story. Good job.

    --Harley


  • bethann93
    June 28
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    it is very suspensful. I didn't expect anything like this when I first opened it. great job!


  • B Chandler Greeters member
    May 16

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    Even though this was a good story, I didn't really care all the much for the rape scene. On the other hand, consider pulling out some of the exclamation points in certain areas

  • suspenseful

    see why you entered that contest

    this was great. Really.

    nice job

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