Everything Changed Chapter 1

I awoke with a scream as the sweat poured down my head and body. I looked around disorientated and sighed as I saw the bland grey walls of the orpahanage that was my home.My parents were dead, they died in a car crash, and i wasn't there with them.When I sat up I shivered in the cold sheets. I hopped out my bed and walked over to the stone window. The wind blew against it and the rain pelted against the stones on the ground.I shivered and pulled my blacket around my shoulders.1

I sat down on the hard bed and waited for the sun to rise. When it did the woman who looked after me knocked on ''my'' door. I got up slowly and answered it.2

''Ivy you have to come have breakfast now''She spoke. I cringed and nodded. She walked away in her huge high heels and tiny miniskirt. I went back to my room and pulled on my dirty jeans and small tee. I pulled on my shoes and walked to the hall for breakfast. I ate the horrible porridge slowly and then I went back to my room. When the afternoon came I sighed in total boredom.3

I jumped when someone knocked the door. I cleared my throat and spoke quietly4

''Come in''I spoke softly5

''Ivy we have good news, someone wants to adopt you.They are very intrested in you''A man spoke. I assumed he was the one that dealt with adoptions....Great!!!6

I was led to a warm room with cream furniture.I was very nice.I sat down and gasped as I saw a couple entering the room. The woman smiled and waved at me.I couldn't help but smile back. The man smiled tenderly at the woman and smiled up at me. The woman wore a lovely light pink suit with a pair of expensive looking sunglasses.And she held a clutch bag in her smooth looking pale hand, The man wore a expensive suit and a pair of black shoes.7

''Hi dear.I want your permission to adopt you''She whispered 8

''Um.Sure I guess, I don't think I have a choice anyway''I laughed uncomfy with all the attention on me.9

''Oh Dear you have made me so happy, I'm sure my two sons and daughter will be so happy to meet you''She whispered and then she hugged the man10

''Yes typical teens I am afraid.The boys well..boys will be boys and my daughter, now she is really something, adores shopping''The man laughed deeply. I giggled and stood up.The woman walked to me and picked up my bag. She hugged me tenderly and grabbed my hand. I smiled and we began walking out the horrible place that WAS my home.11

When we walked to their car I gasped in wonder. It was sleek and black.A man got out and smiled brightly showing his pearly teeth. He picked up my bag and threw it in the boot of the car. I got in the back with the woman and we started to drive 12

''Well dear you may call me Mum if you wish. My new ''Mum'' whispered13

''And you can call me dad dear''The man whispered. I smiled and nodded. When we stopped I got out the car slowly and gasped yet again. The house was huge. It was white and had pillars of marble in the front, In fact it wasn't a house. It was a mansion. I closed my mouth and smiled as my mum grabbed my hand and we walked into the house. The floor were laminated and sparkling. The staircase was the main thing in the hall but it was fairytale like Marble, 14

A small yet beatiful girl raced down the stairs and smiled brightly at me. I blushed and looked down avoiding her eyes. She giggled and spoke15

''Hi Ivy i'm Amy..Your new sister''She laughed and did a little curtsy. I laughed and waved at her. I jumped as someone else came racing down the stairs. The boy was huge and muscled. I fliched slightly as he laughed a deep booming laugh.16

''Dont worry Ivy; Paul is a big teddy bear really''Amy giggled. I nodded and smiled at him. He waved and his dark hair fell over his eyes.17

''Well we will get you settled in and then have dinner dear.'' My mum spoke. Amy grabbed my hand and pulled me up the huge staircase. She rhymed of all the room as we passed them.18

''My room, Paul's room, Mum and Dad's room, Games room, Cinema room, and Matt's room...He is kinda troubled.Mum and dad adopted him last year after his parents were murdered. I love him as my second big brother though. ''Amy whispered.I nodded and looked up at Paul, He smiled and nodded as we kept walking.19

''And FINALLY your room''Amy giggled. My mouth dropped open as i took in the gigantic space. In the middle was a huge white bed covered with light pink silk sheets. I looked around and spoke20

''WOW''Was my breathless reply. Amy giggled and pulled Paul out the room.I smiled and set my bag down.21

''Oh and we will get you some clothes later today''Amy shouted. I giggled and sat down on the bed22

Wow..I had a feeling i could get used to this..23

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  • RhiannonJade
    July 24
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    thia is an awesome start, good job

  • its a nice story
    i like it


  • Violette silver member
    June 13

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    The beginning was the best but you had a fair few grammatical errors that I picked up on. great use of imagery and description tho and your dialogue was clever, well combined and realistic.
    A very open ending so I hope there is more for me to read.
    A great concept, kids always make the sweetest characters.


  • SimplyNoodle
    June 12

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    Awhs wow. very good hun. I love the desirictive details. Great job keep writting.
    ~ Chelsey
    P.S. I hope ivys life will be better now.

  • This was very good! I think I enjoyed this chapter just as much as the "Cookies" Story. I like how you left the ending of this chapter open so you could write more and continue the story. I could see a type of story like this becoming a novel. Your characters were believable. I think my favorite two would be Amy and Paul; I'm not sure why I chose Paul...maybe because I have a feeling he is going to cause some trouble in future novels. Haha. Good job! I will read the next chapter soon!


  • Satan-chan
    May 14

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    loooovee it!!

    I love this story... I read alot of stories about orphan children.... Can't believe I read another one today. I love it... and oh.... Thumps up for you!

  • that was great. Amazing beginning. It real pulls the reader into the story. I loved how you left the end open, so you could write more. Its a story somebody could relate to. Very well written. If you reread the story you can find any mistakes that need to be fixed. The story flowed very nicely. Please write more soon. Keep working hard and it will some day pay off.

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