Chapter One

I know this is long, but it's going to be a full-on novel, not a short or semi-short story like many on AP. Stick with it and: Enjoy!1

Chapter 12

    Dallas Taverra sat anxiously biting his nails on the soccer field after the team’s last pre-season practice. He had never had any type of nervous habit before, nor reason to be nervous. Dallas had been captain of the varsity soccer team since he was a sophomore. The entire team knew that in his senior year, Dallas would reclaim his title as their cap-tain and lead them to victory against Lancaster High School, the rival to New Castle High School. Or at least that is what they believed before Jaytin Swenson showed up.3

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    It was the first day of soccer training in mid-July and all of the players had congre-gated on the field, kicking the ball around, practicing their foot-skills in preparation for the next two weeks’ grueling conditioning. Dallas and the rest of the seniors took the north goal of the varsity field while the underclassman had to take turns shooting at the south goal.  5

“So Taverra,” Bryce Jacobs called out in his confident, saucy tone. “Have you and Natalie done it, yet?”6

    The ball was kicked to Dallas. He effortlessly wrapped his legs around it and flicked it up with his right foot over his head to Bryce who trapped it with his thigh. Ignoring him, Dallas kept his eye steadily on the soccer ball.7

“What does he mean? I thought they did it after prom?” Jared Abrahms asked curiously, as Bryce rolled his right foot over the ball in a fake to him, and then quickly kicked behind with his left, sending it flying to Matt Robinson.8

“Nice, Jacobs,” Matt called.9

Bryce raised his eyebrows with his signature self-assured smile plastered to his face.10

    All questions still unanswered, the guys turned to Dallas expectantly who avoided making eye contact but instead sprinted towards Tim Cramer and stole the ball in an eruption of kicks, turns, and tricks.11

    “Oh c’mon, Taverra! Don’t hold out on us,” Bryce pleaded. “You’ve been dating Natalie for nearly eight months now. You can’t honestly tell me that you didn’t tap that? I mean, if I had her for a mere eight seconds I’d have her hoppin’ on the good foot and doin’ the bad thing, if ya know what I mean!”12

The group of boys laughed.13

“Yeah Taverra, so tell us; did you ride her like a Dallas Cowboy?” Matt added with a guffaw. Again, there was a great deal of chuckling and sniggering amongst the boys.14

    Dallas blushed. “Look guys,” he began, “It’s not like that. Natalie wants to wait and I respect her wish. I know that your sex lives are so enervatingly dull that you have no choice but to wonder about my relationship, but could you all get your minds out of the gutter and focus on the ball?”15

    The guys let it drop and continued on to discuss another topic, but Dallas again remained mute. He felt an enormous relief at avoiding that conversation, which somehow was coupled with a growing apprehension. The subject of sex always left Dallas feeling awkward and confused…and embarrassed. In truth, it wasn’t Natalie’s idea at all to wait. She had tried to unzip Dallas’ pants prom night (and many a night after). That experience still left him feeling mortified; especially remembering his tongue-tied, alcohol-slurred explanation to her on why he didn’t think it was the right time. 16

    No, it was Dallas who was uncomfortable with sex. He didn’t see what all the hype was about. All of the movies showed these men and women rigid with pleasure, moaning in satisfaction; but frankly, he couldn’t even remember the last time he had had a hard-on from Natalie. The girl was beautiful with long, soft, chocolately tresses and even longer legs. Being the school’s champion cross-country runner, Natalie was in excellent shape. Every aspect of her five foot nine inch frame was perfectly symmetrical. She was every guy’s wet dream; every guy, that is, besides the one she happened to be dating.   17

    Dallas just couldn’t understand why he was this way; and the last thing he wanted to do was admit to the guys that he wasn’t ape about the one thing that seemingly controlled his friends’ minds. If he mentioned his reluctance towards Natalie or that it was he who was waiting to have sex, they would probably just call him a ‘fag’. Dallas despised the word.18

    Cheering from the other end of the soccer pitch interrupted Dallas’ thoughts. He glanced over his shoulder to see a large gathering of players forming a semi-circle around a tall boy who was heading a silver ball straight into the air over and over again; his long, straight, raven hair damp with sweat. The color drained from Dallas’ face. He had never seen anyone head the ball so many times in a row before. Then the new guy’s feet started kicking a series of complicated tricks. He was incredible.19

    Dallas jogged over to the assembled boys where Bryce met him. “Dude, Taverra. This kid’s incredible!”20

“I can see that, Bryce. Who is he? I’ve never seen him before.”21

“I dunno, man; but whoever he is, I’m glad he’s on our team!”22

“Well, let’s go introduce ourselves,” Dallas said, as Bryce, Matt, and Jared followed him through the crowd into the open circle.23

“Hey, man. That was some nice head.” Dallas said with a grin, causing a few of the underclassman to chortle. The new boy glanced around warily, smiled, and responded, “Thanks.”24

“No problem. I’m Dallas Taverra,” Dallas said extending his hand. “And this is Bryce Jacobs, also known as B.J.,” he chuckled.25

“Real funny, Cowboy,” said Bryce.26

“And Matt Robinson, and Jared Abrahms,” Dallas added, indicating each of his fellow players. The new boy took Dallas’ hand and shook it. “I’m Jaytin, Jaytin Swenson.”27

He smiled cordially. The two were eye to eye exactly and Dallas saw specks of gold glittering in Jaytin’s hazel irises. 28

“Swenson is it?” asked Bryce. “Sounds Nordic to me.”29

“It is,” Jaytin replied, letting go of Dallas’ hand and turning to Bryce. Dallas felt an odd sensation move through his body and a strange emptiness at letting go of Jaytin’s right palm.30

“Ah, a Viking!” Matt yelled with excitement.31

    For the next month and a half of conditioning, Jaytin was recognized solely as “The Viking”. He proved to excel in all aspects of the game. He was a fast sprinter, beating out Dallas a few times, and he had an excellent shot, always aiming into the top corners where the goalie was hard-pressed to reach. Often, the other varsity players would find themselves standing stationary, gawking in amazement at The Viking’s impressive foot-skills. Dallas recorded this with a sickness in his stomach.32

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    Jaytin had only been living in New Castle for fifteen minutes before he heard his doorbell ring. He had been up in his room covering his walls with tickets to and pictures of all of the concerts he’d seen with his friends of their favorite bands: The Strokes, Red Hot Chili Peppers, Phantom Planet, Fall-Out Boys, Incubus, Bright Eyes, The Bravery, and Blood Brothers, just to name a few. His mother, Opal Swenson, appeared in the doorway wearing a long, white smock with splashes of turquoise, red, lilac, and yellow all over it. Her stick-straight, orange hair was in a knot haphazardly plopped on her head and the thin smear of green paint on her left cheek made her jade green eyes sparkle. “Jaytin, there’s this really cute blonde girl at the door. ‘Says she’s our new neighbor. Come down and say ‘hello’,” she said with a wink in that annoying way that only parents can.34

“Okay, Mom.” Jaytin replied rolling his eyes.35

    With a fresh t-shirt thrown over his head, Jaytin slid down the banister, hopping off onto the hand-woven, leather rug in the foyer right in front of a girl who could have passed for twelve if not for her buxom bosom. She smiled broadly, showing off adorable dimples as she pulled on the roots of her short, shaggy, blonde and pink hair.36

“Hi!” She said rather loudly and exuberantly, as if addressing an audience. “I’m Ruth Lawrence. I live just down the street.”37

Jaytin shoved his hand into the right, back-pocket of his brown corduroys. “I’m Jaytin,” he mumbled, ruffling the black hair on his neck and staring at the almond straps of leather on the floor. The rug was really ugly and kept getting caught in the door, but his mother had spent weeks on it, so it wasn’t going anywhere anytime soon.38

“I saw you dragging a rather jumpy tabby into your house earlier today. I absolutely adore kittens! May I see her?” Ruth asked.39

“It’s actually a he. His name’s Reginald.”40

Ruth giggled. “What kind of name’s Reginald?”41

“What kind of name’s Ruth?” Jaytin responded. To this, Ruth cackled hysterically.42

“If I had a dime for every time someone asked me that!” Ruth exclaimed through her tizzling. “Actually, my parents are very religious. I have a brother named Eli and a sister named Mary.  But what can you do?”43

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    The final day of pre-season practice came to a close. Varsity Coach Willis ordered the team to sit on the green as he gave his usual speech before revealing the team captain. As the coach droned on, Dallas obsessively chewed away at his fingernails. Bryce clapped him on the back and with a winning smile whispered, “Don’t be nervous, you’re practically a shoo-in.”45

“Yeah, practically.”46

Despite Bryce’s reassurance, Dallas gnawed on, ceaselessly.47

Finally, Coach Willis concluded his tedious oration. “So boys, on to who’s going to be captain this year.” 48

Dallas pricked his ears. 49

“So, assistant Coach Gallagher and I watched you all play this summer and you all have improved enormously. We’ve seen you guys do amazing, nearly-professional things out on that field. It was a very hard decision to make,” (here, a few boys snorted in disbelief) “but Coach Gallagher and I have finally decided that this year we are going to try something new.” He paused and looked around at the team significantly. Dallas, felt dizzy and realized he had been holding his breath. Something new? He thought to himself, horrorstruck.50

“We are going to have a co-captaincy between our former captain, Dallas Taverra, and our new, talented Jaytin Swenson, better known as the Viking.” He added the last comment with a laugh. “So congratulations boys! You’re our new captains. I look forward to seeing you team up to help us triumph over Lancaster.”51

    In the locker room, the entire team was chattering and murmuring. Dallas was sulkily pulling a clean t-shirt over his head, trying to ignore the whispered disbelief of his fellow teammates, when he felt a hand on his shoulder that made him internally jolt. He turned around to find Jaytin beaming at him. “Hey Cowboy, congrats on making captain!” “Yeah, you too, Viking,” Dallas responded to Jaytin as he moved to his locker, fumbling through his clothing. As he watched Jaytin search, Dallas noticed his slim, muscular frame, toned shoulders and sinewy arms. He felt his eyes drift up along his legs, his calves…to his thighs…and then... Shit! He thought to himself, shaking his head wildly. Was I just checking him out?52

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  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    October 22, 2005
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    Well, as you may know, Jews follow the Old Testament while Christians follow the Old and New Testament. "Ruth" and "Eli" might be names inherent in the Old, but Christians still read the full Bible. Therefore, there isn't any inconsistency to the naming of the characters. How many Christians do you know named Noah? because Noah is a part of the old testament, so one would think it was a Jewish name, but allas, it is not. Thank you for reading!
    Arielle Giselle

  • Alexandra Saint
    October 21, 2005
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    This is a really good piece. My only comment was that you had Ruth have a brother named Eli and a sister, Mary. I'm curious to know what religion they are, because Ruth and Eli are Jewish names and Mary is a Christian name. I think it'd be interesting if they're both, but I was just wondering. ^^

    Awesome job so far!

    Kudos!

    Bekca.

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    October 20, 2005
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    Thank you! I'm so sorry to say though, that my original draft with my first two chapters is on a laptop that my sister stole from me, so it shall be a while...but I'll alert you when it comes!
    Arielle Giselle

  • Symphony
    October 20, 2005
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    This is absolutely amazing, I ate up the words as I read .. and wow, just simply fantastic - can't wait to see what happens next - obviously Dallas is gay, and I'm thinking Jaytin is too, although maybe not, that would add even more to it ... hurry up with the next installment

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    October 18, 2005
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    Thank you very much Anna. Actually, I'm sorry to say, but Chapter two will be a long one coming. I can't really figure out what to say and my sister stole my laptop woth the original draft. Thank you for your comments!
    Arielle Giselle

  • StoriesOf MyLife
    October 18, 2005
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    creative

    wow...i'm liking this...i'm going to have to read the next chapter when it gets done...very creative...Anna

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    October 16, 2005
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    Thank you. It is still in the process, but i'm glad you liked it.
    Arielle giselle


  • Lady Eclipse
    October 16, 2005
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    oooh I like this idea, I'm glad you entered because if you didnt i would have never read this story. Great job and I cant wait to read more.....~Lady Eclipse

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    August 3, 2005
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    Thank you for your kind words, Aquafina. I do enjoy soccer as well, but its kinda bad that I made it their sport of choice because everyone already thinks that they're gay any way with 'soccer-fairy' and such. Ah welll...
    Arielle Giselle

  • Indrid Cold
    August 3, 2005
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    This was really good. I liked it a lot. I probably wouldn't have liked it as much as I did if it hadn't been soccor because I used to play soccor. Anyway, this was very good, and I'm looking forward to reading the book some time.
    Keep up the good work.
    Dominik

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    August 2, 2005
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    Thank you so much! I was actually pretty worried about the reality of my characters...but thank you again for that!
    Arielle Giselle

  • pozo
    August 2, 2005
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    Great piece This one had some good lines as well as a generally good story Thanks for entering, this was a good start to your story
    Thanks for entering
    All the best,
    Pozo


  • tieed
    August 2, 2005
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    How do i like this? Let me count the ways. One, the narrative is amazing, almost every character is life-like and realistic. I had a very easy time believing that anyone in this story could really exisit, and that's a great quality in a character!
    I also like Dallas But besides that, the story set up it far from cliche and i loved the ending. You're very talented and i deeply encourage you to continue!

  • HeWillAlwaysBeAFool
    July 16, 2005
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    Wow! This is amazing! I can't wait until you write more!
    You definetly kept my attention throughout this ENTIRE chapter!
    ~Sarah

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 11, 2005
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    Thank you WENCH! I'm so glad it held your attention! I would love to see a response that you may come up with. There's more to come! i'm expecting my second chapter out soon! So check it out!
    Arielle Giselle

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 11, 2005
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    thank you hylian!
    Arielle Giselle

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 11, 2005
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    Thank you for your praise, Tony. Actually, my inspiration came from another allpoetry member's story, Queen Maab's Bloodlines. It doesn't FOCUS on homosexuality, but it touches on it a bit. I was really all in a tizzle over my idea! I'm not quite sure how to classify it but my next chapter should be out soon So check it out!
    Thank you again.
    Arielle Giselle


  • Beastial Wench
    July 11, 2005
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    I usually don't read longer stuff, but this one lured me in quickly and held my attention nicely! ^.^ Bravo! I'm an avid role player, and was filled with the urge to write a response from Jaytin's point of view! ^.^ The narration is excellent, and Dallas is an incredibly believable character. Bravo! The ending makes me want to read all the more, and I probably will ad dyou to my favorites just to keep an eye out for this story!

  • hylian90
    July 11, 2005
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    Hmm, that was a well-written story. The narration was solid, and your portrayal of Dallas' emotions was good. Excellent write!

  • Anthony-
    July 11, 2005
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    Interesting. Where did you get your inspiration from? Have you spoken to any adolescents who have had these feelings before? I think that this piece is very easy to read and has enough description to sink you in. It seemed almost needing of something else - depending on where you are aiming your market - is it a teen novel telling of acceptance and equality? Is it an early adult novel telling of true love and romance in a non-traditional context? I really cannot wait for the next section as it does intrigue me a lot. TOny.

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 10, 2005
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    Thanks Ohio. As a likewise sufferer, I am sorry that you live in this hole they christend OHIO. giggles
    Arielle Giselle

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 10, 2005
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    Be honest with me ryan. That's the point! I want a real critique of this! What you liked and didn't like. Thank you though!
    Arielle giselle

  • ArieLLeGiSeLLe
    July 10, 2005
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    thanks Srinivasan. I'm flattered. I'm working on the second chapter. It's hard though because my new kitten is sitting on my keyboard all of the time! Giggles! Thank you again!
    Arielle Giselle

  • PeachyKeenJellyBean
    July 10, 2005
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    wow... that was really good. I can't wait for the rest of it!

  • thesePoetictears
    July 10, 2005
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    excelent

    it was lovely and i can not wait to read more.

  • Srinivasan
    July 10, 2005
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    Nice starting

    "She was every guy’s wet dream; every guy, that is, besides the one she happened to be dating."
    I enjoyed reading this lengthy piece. It's so wonderfully narrated and the given line is one which I enjoyed along with several other lines. The narration is beautiful and I expect you to continue the story in the same pace.

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