Quiver at first sight

Wild is my heart
Flourished with red
Taste the hot sweetness
Leave my scent to thread
Drag your fresh over
I quiver at first sight
Let the darkness reveal me
Shedding all but few lights
Upon this submission
No threat to my sin
Passion is unyielding
Flickering and twitching
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I wanted to write something. I was not sure what. I had a burning. One that is sated and I am content...one that is like an inferno that makes my body hard and the tension swirl within in me... Love does this....

Blair

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  • InksterMoxy
    May 1

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    I normally would view love this way unless i was pised at my bf. BUt i can see where to burning came from. this was a cool piece, i imagined a wolf though. Idk, either way I liked it. I would suggest putting in some pucntuation just so a reader might beable to feel the pulse more and not have to reread

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Hinata-is-me silver member
    April 30
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    woah...


  • Mag the Chodja gold member
    April 30

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    This is pretty flowery - I like that, and no pun intended. xD
    Quite exciting, too, if I'm getting the meaning properly.

    The only question I have is, do you mean site or sight? Site is more of a location or webpage. o.O