Feeling Depressed

I knew you since I was three1

We met under that fair willow tree2

Everything we talked about3

Would rid me of my doubts4

And turn my emotions around5

But since the day you left me6

With nothing for remembrance but your door key7

I go to your house every day8

Up to your bedroom in which you lay9

Weeping about the past10

I never knew11

What had actually happened to you12

A phone call was all that informed me of your ending13

The phone call was apparently a lie that needed mending14

Why did you leave me15

In sorrow and despair16

My heart has no more room for happiness and glee17

I miss the way you would daydream a lot and stare18

But today told me every detail19

Of how your lungs had to suddenly fail20

As I opened your apartment door21

It was appalling what I saw on the bathroom floor22

A silver object what only the insane say is bliss23

Had obviously stopped us from another kiss24

The puddle of blood was a message that needed sending25

Now I realize I too want an ending26

I run to your balcony that I love so much27

With the silver object in my hand28

My hand draws the object nearer in which I clutch29

As the object pierces my skin it feels like wet sand30

Seconds later, the only colours I see are black and red31

And then darkness as my eyes roll towards my head.

Author notes

Not sure that the title really matches, but it just seems a nicer fit than anything else really Hope you liked it!

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  • trekkergirl
    May 30

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    I dunno if sacrifice is truly correct either to sacrifice means to give up something important you have to help someone else out...

    This is not that... it is a person grieving and who cannot handle that someone else was selfish and took their own life...

    So mistakeningly it is thought that this person would do the same. Not romantic... not a fact... selfish. This is not romeo and Juliet (by the way I hated that story!)

    Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.

    I think I would have simply titled it... THE END.


    • Queen Lucy
      May 30
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      Well, thanks for the comment =3

      The ending is like Romeo and Juliet because when Juliet pretends to be dead because of the potion, Romeo kills himself thinking that she is actually dead, then when Juliet awakes, Romeo is dead so she kills herself.

      I agree about the title thing in my Author Notes, so I'll correct that =)


  • Intoxica
    May 2

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    Very sad...
    I like how subtle it was though. Not just "he slit his throat so i killed myself" kinda thing...


  • reilly500
    April 30

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    It was sad...in a distubing kinda of way. but i asked for sad and my eyes are leaky now...i love the ending. I have a few ideas what the object was but can you tell me?


  • Willowleaf-
    April 29

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    I liked it. It was really nice, you have a really nice way of words. Poetry is your strong point, I guess. I know I am repeating this but, really nice job! Keep writing poetry!

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