These walls are the palest of white, just like my skin. The room smells of musty death. I'm wondering where i am and why I'm here? You tell me I've been shot, I'm dying not much longer you say. I reach down and feel the warm liquid oozing out. I close my eyes and think is this rely the end? A flashback appears in my mind. Your cooking dinner for you and him, its your anniversary. He comes in and hugs you tight. You can smell the beer on his breath. You jerk away, you know there is something wrong. He grabs you and says " You stupid bitch, where do you think your going?" You grab a pan and raise it to hit him , but he grabs your hand and pulls out a gun. All of the sudden the creamy walls of the kitchen turns black. Now you know why your here. He shot you, your one and only, the love of your life. As you return to reality, you hear banging on the window of the door you are behind. You hear him screaming " Alexis honey, I'm sorry! I LOVE YOU, please don't die,i didn't mean it" You also hear yells from other men calling him a monster. Then all the world falls silent, Your gone. There is nothing else they can do. Yet another tragedy to occur on our fucked up world. Where nothing appears to be as it should. As we bury Alexis, Jason sits in a musty cold jail cell awaiting 25 to life for the death of his beautiful girlfriend, who would have given the world for him. All because he decide to go have so fun, get drunk. So heed this warning, sometimes we hurt the people we love the most and don't mean to. Just remember that death is not the key, it just leads to a life with more pain and misery.1
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I love this moralistic story. Very nice way of making the reader feel like they are there, with short stories that can be hard to do. So bravo
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nice... amazing words babe.... hmm i felt like I was reading those things in emails or on bulletins (myspace) where at the end it says something like "send this to 592 people or you will be shot."... but I always thought the stories were really well written... so rock on, babe!
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WHOA!!!! kel this is amazing, words can't descibe!!! i mean this is awesum! i loved the last line....pure beauty! keep it up babez!!!
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OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE UR STORY/POEM IT IS THE BEST THING I'V EVER READ:0!!!!!! OMG
IM CHANGING MY AUTHOR PAGE AND THIS IS GOING TO BE MY FAV POEM!
AND i havent talked to u n a while r u out of town or something ??idk but IM me when u get back K?
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wow!!!!!
Hey Kettles!!wow you did an aamzing job on this piece, it's wonderful!and that's so sad she died on their anniversary
, I love the imagery you put into this story, you crafted it well, I could see the kitchen and the fight the last line I absolutely loved it!!
Ruth
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