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Oh, how I love my Sweet Insanity,2
It forever holds me in my peace.3
As the world spins, I am forever stagnant,4
I am lost in a sea of nothing and nowhere.5
Like a dream never ending,6
A plea unnoticed,7
A wish unheard,8
A solitude untouched.9
How I wish that I could understand,10
Yet I understand perfectly.11
I feel dead, but I know that I am alive.12
I am distant, and I wish I was nearer.13
This is Hell in all it's senses.14
And, yet, I love my Sweet Insanity.15
Author notes
I dont really are what you think of it, this was my first poem ever, and i decided to go ahead ond put it on here.
What did you think? Please comment!
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excellent
the polarity of life is well represented in your poem. -
This is interesting in that it comes across as very detached, a good thing in insanity. I like the way you point out the dead num,b feeling that goes with deep depression. Good writing.
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Interesting. I think putting it under Storywrite might have been a mistake, but that's okay. It's a good job. Keep turning out stuff like this and you'll be great in no time.
love
chris -
Certainly insane. It contains the classic, negative and postive lines...I am the sun but the moon, I am light but the dark etc
It certainly potrays a bit of the old madness which was the intention and for that it works
Is it a story? I'd say no. -
I really like your style of writing, good job!!!
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Well written..shows how one can feel two opposite ways at once..
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excellent
yea, its really good. you describe life so well. almost like "the story of life" u know? well anyway... .
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I only have three words for this one: " I LOVE THIS" I love the way that you describe everything.
I am lost in a sea of nothing and nowhere.
Like a dream never ending,
A plea unnoticed,
A wish unheard,
A solitude untouched.
How I wish that I could understand,
Yet I understand perfectly.
This is absolutely great. Keep up the good work -
the only criticism I'm going to say is that if you had posted it on allpoetry.com you may have alot more people commenting on it who understand poetry better than the writers on here.
However, I do love this poem, the contradictions you make just add to the insanity of the writer, it makes insanity seem more beautiful and compelling -
i understand it!i'm confused!and yet...i understand it very well!i'm the same way!
muito amor,
raven
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