Time

What do i want for my birthday?1

only one thing2

time.3

More of it4

If possible, a infinite amount.5

But i'm not greedy enough to expect that.6

All i want is MORE of it...7

Its unfair that we are given only this preset amount8

that is never enough...9

Time 10

minutes seconds hours11

ticking by, forever lost12

unable to be retreived, stolen by the clock13

every second a moment gone.14

Think about it, you'll never get them back!15

every minute a heartbeat lost.16

The gift i will never recieve is time.17

Time to do everthing i could ever want to18

to think long and deep about anything that temps my mind.19

Time to laugh 20

and feel that sun begin to warm you from the inside out.21

to fall in love as many times as i can22

and cry with the abandon of a child.23

Time to cut my hair and grow it out again.24

to travel to all the places i will never get to go.25

Time to write out the rainbow of ideas in my head26

to lead different lives27

become different people28

and discover who i am.29

The years i've been given arent enough...30

the eternal robbery by Tiime31

this loss of seconds, slipping into the hourglass glued to the floor.32

I feel every piece of sand slip through my fingers33

Time.34

What do i want for my birthday?35

For my birthday to never come....

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I HATE THIS POEM D8 epic failure

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  • Carina.J.LR
    April 25
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    sorry, i liked this poem >smiles<


  • DrkNess silver member
    April 20

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    Not that good

    Most of it seemed just ranting but there was one part I liked. The lines 10-14 deserve a better place to be written. Try and build from them for they really are the best part of the entire item.

    beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 1, ending: 1, dialog: 1, characters: 1.

    • The-Exception
      April 25
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      yeah i KNOW its not that good... i already said i hated it. But thanks, those are the only lines i like in the poem too. i dont think i'll try to build around them though, because i kinda think this whole poem was just a waste of my time.