A single tear streams down your face. you look at the picture of you and him. Why? why? you ask yourself. He told me that he loved me! You run to to the bathroom and grab the razor. you take it in your hand and cut a deep wide gash across your arm. that doesn't take the pain away, its still there you tell your self. you get up and walk to the kitchen, you find the biggest knife you own and cry out loud "if you don't want me, then no one will ever be able to want me" While taking the knife and stabbing it into your stomach many times. You hear a knock on the door and a voice say " Julie are you there?" you are in too much pain to get up. The door opens up and he walks in, the one who you loved, the one who betrayed you! You relive the moment of catching him with your best friend earlier that day. He calls out again " Julie, baby are you here?, I'm sorry" you just lay there in pain. You hear his footsteps coming towards the kitchen. At first all he notices is the blood on the floor. He curses aloud. Then he sees you. He runs to you and holds you in his arms. He looks into your eyes and says" Baby, I'm sorry and i love you and i always have loved you more than life its self. I don't know what i would do with out you! Just the thought of loosing you is breaking me inside. if you die i don't think i could go on. You mean the world to me! Baby please don't go" From there on you knew he loved you with all his heart and soul, with that you die in his arms. He's loosing it, the pain of loosing you his one true love is too overwhelming for him. He takes the bloody knife and places it above his heart, in the blackest part of night he calls out "together forever my love" he lowers the knife and with one quick stab he is gone, along with all the pain.1
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Overdramatic
I think the writing style is too pushed and too frantic for a story this dark. I'm looking at it and imagining it a whole lot better in a slower tone of voice. -
DAMN... another fucking amazing write!!!! You have such talent!!! wow... wow... that was so vivid... really truly brilliant. so much pain... *sigh*... really wicked write!
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Wow, very nice story, it was very well written. It pulled me in and made me want to read more. I liked the imagery that you used to tell the story and make the touchy subject manner less "touchy". Very well told, very relateable to life. Keep on writing.
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wow
hm...first thought? "wow!" not kidding I could see it envelop my mind and wanted me to continue reading, it just drew me in and I couldn't stop so sad...but very well scripted kettles!
*sigh* I can kinda relate...oh well we'll move on, won't we kettles? we'll be each other's pillar of strength 
ttyl xoxo 
Ruth
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wow
hm...first thought? "wow!" not kidding I could see it envelop my mind and wanted me to continue reading, it just drew me in and I couldn't stop so sad...but very well scripted kettles! *sigh* I can kinda relate...oh well we'll move on, won't we kettles? we'll be each other's pillar of strength ttyl xoxo Ruth
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