Life Breathes

At the break of Dawn
He leans down
And gently kisses the cold lips
Of his precious Marionette,
And Life burst forth
As flowers bloomed,
And the Angels wept in joy
For such a beautiful doll.
And through her locks of obsidian,
He trailed pale, bruised fingers
As her stilled heart beat
And she took a breath,
And lived
Through Death
For her one and only Love.

Author notes

Something I wrote today in class. :] I think it's like, the least dark poem I've ever wrote.

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  • DeniseC
    July 12

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    As everyone said, its really beautiful. Its not very long but I can feel the emotion. Very well done. And I absolutely love the last line.
    "For her one and only love."
    You have such a talent to write good poetry.
    I love it!
    Denise

  • StiLL DreamiN
    June 30

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    Now thats what I call *Romantic*. That was really good and showed beautiful emotions. What I like most is that since I like it, I'm gonna check out some of your other work lol.

    Perfectly written


  • Play Pretend.
    May 6

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    Dear Mickeylove,
    you truly write wonderful things.
    I'm in love with the simple beauty of this poem,
    almost as much as I am, with you.
    It's really beautiful.
    <3


  • citcat
    April 16
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    thats a really good poem. well done


  • Artificial.Smiles. gold member
    April 14
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    This is simply beautiful. It had such strong emotion. It really did move, so congrats!!


  • Patchwork Comedy
    April 13
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    Awwwww! I love it baby! That's all I have time to write atm, but yeah... This is sweet ^^

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