Reilly Potts had writers block. She had a college paper due in five-no, four hours on the study of anthropomorphism, and nothing was written on the fresh piece of paper before her. Evidence of her previous efforts lay strewn about on the old 1980’s shag carpeting of her apartment. She ran a hand through her knotty hair. She sighed. She needed a walk.1
Pulling on her gloves, she headed towards the old oak tree that stood out against Long Island’s usual environment.2
“Hello there,” A voice said from across the street. Liam, Reilly’s boyfriend stood with two cups of tea in his hands, smileing warmly. “I figured you’d be here.”3
“Thanks,” she said eagerly,” Lets sit under the tree.” As soon as they sat down, thunder rumbled in the distance.4
“Aw nuts,” she said, and stood up to leave.5
“Wait, Reilly” Liam said softly,” there’s something I want to ask you.”6
“Liam!” Rain started to pour, soaking her thoroughly.7
“Will you marry me,” He shouted over the din.8
“What?”9
“Will you ma-“With a deafening crack the large oak tree, split in half by the lightning, fell to the ground, crushing the innocent beneath it. And so the two lovers perished.10
Author notes
tea, glove, long island, tree, reilly,liam.
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AWSOME!
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Nice. i would suggest elongifying it.
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I liked it! Short but sweet
It was sad, too...
I definitely didn't see the ending coming. The writing style, there was good flow...but you should try to make it a little longer, I think. Still, I did like it 
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I liked this. Only suggestion I have is maybe make it a little longer. Other than that though,I liked it. Thank you for entering. Good luck. God Bless!
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hmmm i like this, especailly the twist at the end good job :3
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