Feelings

Pictures frozen in my mind,
Ive lose something I cannot find.1

Steal frames planted in my head,
My love is live and far from dead.2

Memories burried in my heart,
From your lvoe I can never part.3

Your name is embedded in my soul,
A feeling so strong I lose control.4

Your love is running through my veins,
It saves me from my aches and pains.5

A feeling that I cannot shake,
With you away my heart does break.6

The pain gets worse each time we chatter,
How much can I handle before I shatter?7

With more love than words can say,
It only grows with every day.

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  • J-Dus
    September 14

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    Memories burried in my heart,
    From your lvoe I can never part

    beautiful line, but I think you should fix "lvoe" to "love" lol. I enjoyed this entire piece, it is different for you, but you were able to achieve greatness in writing it


  • ChristieLove
    August 23

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    Wow...I absolutely loved this, it was amazing, the rhyme, the flow. With every phrase, the emotion was deep and true, and it sounded amazing. The word choice was wonderful, it really added to the over all effect, there were some typos, but that just means you typed it too quick :

  • Non Paix
    June 13
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    HAHAHA! That withinyoureyes bitch is fucking jealous of your skill. She needs to work on pulling the stick out of her abnormally up tight asshole, really.

    This piece was amazing, typoes and all, ahaha. She just wishes she wasnt such a crappy writer, that is all.


  • WithinYourEyes
    May 28
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    You need to work a lot on your spelling and vocabulary. Some of the lines don't make grammatical sense, like "Ive lose something I cannot find." Otherwise, the color scheme was nice.

  • poium poaupoiujj
    May 4

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    Wow..this was brilliant!! I loved it! you changed from your usual pattern, and still managed to make a great piece of writing...I am envious that you can write in so many varieties of style...This was wonderful

  • Non Paix
    April 10
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    This was a change for you...rather than your usual ABCB pattern of rhyming, you went to AA BB CC DD EE (ect.) This must have been a struggle for you....Though, by reading the poem, if I did not know you, i would never know it was not your style...this was perfect, as most of your writing is

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