The Storm

This is the 3rd part of my series 'The Clock Ticks On', those who haven't read the first 2 parts are encouraged to do so, you can find the first one here
And the 4th piece right here 1

Thanks, and enjoy Wink2

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"Wild were the winds that came
In the thunder and the rain
Nothing ever could contain
The rising of the storm"
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Winds howled through the trees as time split apart and meshed back together again - an endless dance under the sheer force of her will. Darkness gave way to light, fire melded with ice and all sense of space was lost, as the storm exploded upon them. All across the land trees were ripped from the ground as the wind's fury battled her for control of nature; earth and water flew through the air. It was raining. The noise was unbearable.5

"In the wings of ebony
Darkened waves fill the trees
Wild winds of warning
Echo through the air"
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Jason held onto his last bit of sanity, the howling of the wind and the painful tearing of trees made him grit his teeth. Yet he knew he had to get to her, if only for a moment. He could see his mysterious lover standing in the middle of all the violence, seemingly untouched by the ferocious forces of the storm. Slowly he made his way closer...7

"Follow the storm I've got to get out of here
Follow the storm as you take to the sky
Follow the storm now it's all so crystal clear,
Follow the storm as the storm begins to rise"
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"You can not do this." a voice whispered in Stacey's ear, before fading into Time's howling. She turned towards the fire, hoping to see somebody there. The wind blasted the forest around her, yet she was blind to the chaos. Only her wish to see him again fuelled this insane spell.9

"I will do what I must!" she yelled at the storm.10

"So be it." another voice whispered. Suddenly she was yanked into the air, the full force of the storm finally unleashed on her. Branches and leaves hit her from all sides, drawing blood in their passage.11

"She seems to come from everywhere
Welcome to the dragons lair
Fingers running through your hair
She asks you out to play"
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"You are the cause." His heart skipped a beat at the voice that felt as if it spoke directly into his mind. Quickly he turned, scanning the wind-lashed trees for a sign of the owner of that ominous voice. But there was nobody - it was only him and the tortured trees.13

"Come." it said.14

Suddenly he was flying, the wind lifting him up into the eye of the storm.15

"In all of nature's sorcery
The most bewitching entity
Hell can have no fury
Like the rising of the storm"
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Silence.17

Perfect silence.18

Jason tried to open his eyes, but they were already open.19

Darkness.20

Perfect darkness.21

Stacey tried to stand, but found she was already standing.22

In the distance, a fire flared up, and the clock ticks on...23

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  • October 2, 2005
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    Be sure you are now on my favourite list, I will not leave that much of a comment because everyone has already said what I wanted but will stay say - Once again amazing work.


  • September 18, 2005
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    An interesting mix of poetry and story. I haven't read the other parts yet but I will very soon. Like the other commentors have said, I liked the way you gave the storm a personality. That added to the power and mystique of that awesome force of nature.

    Frightendove

  • Capital
    August 30, 2005
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    Well written!!! I have just been looking at some 'Weather poems' so it was quite wierd to stumble upon this, but I really enjoyed it, you captured something magical about the storm in your words!
    Keep writing,
    Cap.


  • Luthien Luinwe
    August 4, 2005
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    Awesome

    Wonderful description. I feel as if I'm actually in it. I love it! Great job!

  • Molly Densmore silver member
    August 4, 2005
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    This was so wonderful also, a little chilling with great emotion. I loved it, you are quite talented page!!! Your stories are wonderful and interesting. keeps the readers interest. Great job on this write and thank you for sharing it.

  • amaranth816
    July 6, 2005
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    You better hurry up and finish this, because I am impatient to know what happens!!! You have a really wonderful idea here, about love and hope combining to twist time. I never would have thought of a couple (one from the past, one from the future) trying to meet halfway... You are doing an amazing job with this! Keep writing, hun, it's entertaining and suspenseful!!!


  • Thayla
    July 2, 2005
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    Interesting format! I loved the way you personified the storm. As if it was a character with emotions. I clever storm! Scary thought indeed. Imagine it could choose who to destroy and who to protect. I really like the that thought. Very clever indeed You know of course that your ending needs to top that. mmmm get too it I want to know how this ends!!!!!


  • StevenHoward
    July 1, 2005
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    This was an interesting structure. I don't think I have ever seen another quite like it. I think it can be very effective to mix the verse with the narrative as you have done. It did make me pause and shift gears as I read.

    The one comment I would offer is on the first narrative paragraph. Your sentence "It was raining." is not really necessary. Actually, putting it there after the powerful description you have just given us makes it almost witty in a sense that I don't think you intended.

    All in all, this was a very good write. It was an interesting structure as I pointed out, but I enjoyed it.


  • Perilin
    July 1, 2005
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    you can count on it


  • Lacyte
    July 1, 2005
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    Another magical, compelling story... To my mind the best of the three so far. So you had better produce something spectacular for the next one. Well done, Friend!

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