It was a Thursday morning when it all happened... The day my life turned upside down... The only things I heard that day were the screams of dieing people... The only only things I saw were died bodies... The only thing I smelt was blood... The only question I had was who or what would do this?
Author notes
There is no story that goes with this sentence, but I could probably write one.
A contest entry
- -A Contest- How well can you 'hook' me? by Reaver.
2050 points, ended April 21, 59 entries
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Eh...after ellipsis, you shouldn't start with a capital sentence. And ellipsis cannot be used to join two complete sentences together, maybe just fragments.
Careful about that.
Despite that, pretty interesting, but there are millions of stories that start off this way. ^_^ So you'll have to ensure your story stands out if you write one from this.
- HT
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This is more than one sentence...based on your grammar.
Thanks for entering despite. i hope you write the full story
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Wow. This had a lot of impact for one sentence. I, for one would like to read the rest of this story.
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