Sisters

It was a Thursday morning along time ago that it happened. 1

I woke up in a very good mood. Little did I know that my world was soon going to be turn upside down. I checked my alarm clock. It was 8:47. "Well I better call Bailey, she is probably already up," I mummbled to myself. I grabbed my cell phone, and dialed her number. She didn't pick up. "Mom, mom, Bailey didn't pick up," I yelled from across the house. She always picked up. Is something wrong? Did something happen to her? "Kali don't worry," my mom said. "She is my best friend, my unbiological sister, of course I'm going to worry," I screamed. "Honey, calm down," she said. "Mom, tell me what's going on, please," I said as calmly as possible. "Ok, honey, they moved, Bailey isn't allow to talk to you anymore," she said in her sorry tone. I started to cry. "Miss Leah took my sister from me, sis is gone," I said with tears in my eyes. "Yes, she is," my mom said while she held me. I pulled away from her. My sister was always the who was there when I cried. "You will find a new best friend, honey, it will all work out, you'll see," she said as comforting as possible. " There is no one who can take her place, you're wrong it won't ever be the same," I said angerly. I ran to my room, slammed the door, laid on my bed, and cried. I cried for what seemed like hours. I checked the clock again it was 6:32. I had been crying off and on for 10 hours. I cried myself to sleep that night.2

50 years later.3

I still remember what happened to this very day. I still haven't heard from my sister, but somehow I knew she never really left me.

Author notes

This is part fictional. My best friend did move, but she came back. I am NOT 50.

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  • This is a good rough cut.

    I would think about explaining the relationship before the best friend move. I think that would make the reaction a little more clear.

    I would also think about seperating the story into more paragraphs and making each line of dialogue from a different character a seperate paragraph. Then, it won't look like one huge block of writing.

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  • kalikat9616
    April 15
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    I don't know. I will start thinking of how to add on. If you have an ideo on how to add on please tell me.

  • wow. this is pretty good. Are you gonna add on