Good Attentions

The day had been hard work for Kitty. Every day she did the chores and upkeep of the house that neither her husband nor the kids ever thanked her for. Even though she was a woman of high spirits and loved to keep herself active, she also sought recognition for her hard work in the form of thank-yous from the kids and attention from her husband.1

Lately, that wasn’t happening. It seemed that the family expected her to just to do it without any gratitude. The husband worked long hours and came home without even a kiss or thank you for keeping the house spotless, even after the kids had thoroughly destroyed it by their playing and roughhousing. 2

She also felt a need to be alone with her husband and with him working late nights and sometimes not coming home until the wee hours, she felt incredibly lonely and needed some TLC. 3

When the husband came home drunk one night, she grew disgusted and slept on the couch in the living room. Her husband knew that she disapproved of his drinking habits and when she confronted him about it, he denied it and said that she was imagining it. She tried telling him how he made her feel, but he blew her off saying that he had to go to work and that he couldn't be bothered with her problems.4

She grew more out of love with him when she found out that he lied about his working late when she called his work to let him know that a candlelight dinner would be waiting for him when he got home. However, it was the foreman that spoke to her instead and said that he left his shift at his normal time around 7pm. 5

He didn’t come home until 3am and mumbled that he was working. Unshed tears surfaced at the corners of her eyes when he passed right by the dinner table and ignored her appearance. The kids were at sleepovers with friends and she had dressed in a very provocative blue babydoll for him. She wiped away her tears and stomped into their room. She grabbed the comforter off their bed and a couple of pillows and told him that she wasn't sleeping in his bed anymore. She'd much prefer the couch than sleeping with him. He was so drunk that he didn’t register what she said. He dragged his himself down the hall, crashed onto the bed and started snoring within seconds. 6

That was a few weeks ago. Kitty was constantly on edge due to her lack of being wanted and seen as a maid more than a wife and mother. One day, while she was on the computer, she came across a website that catered toward women in need, especially overlooked women. It asked three simple questions:7

1) Do you crave sensual attention?8

2) Do you want to be loved?9

3) Do you feel unwanted?10

4) If you said yes to any of the previous questions, would you like to try us out?11

Tempted, Kitty hesitated. She never tried anything like this before, but she did say yes to the three questions. Taking a deep breath, she clicked on the “Enter” button.12

Purple smoke billowed out of the screen and enveloped her and when it all cleared, she knew that she wasn’t in her bedroom anymore.13

She looked around and saw that she was in a room that was surrounded by large white pillars, similar to those used in the Greek architecture. The room was open to the sweet wind coming from the outside and above her sat a large glass dome, showing a beautiful blue sky with a few wispy clouds. As she looked around the open room, she saw large circular couches built to cushion a person and pillows to provide the feeling of ultimate luxury. 14

They were all set round a circular pool at the center of the room and there were tables occupied by many women receiving sensual massages and moaning softly.15

She blushed at the men giving the massages. They were of various sizes, but none of them were below 5’5 and they ranged from skinny and wiry, to large and muscled. All of them were shirtless and their muscles gleamed in the daylight sun that reflected off of the mirrors set at various points in the room to softly illuminate it.16

She was about to leave and find her way home when one of the men resting by the pool came up to her. His face was sensuality itself. His eyes were soft and they were the color of wheat golden brown. His hair was black as midnight and long, resting in soft waves down to his shoulder. It looked so silky smooth that Kitty gave in and twirled a curl before she realized that she had made a move. 17

The man chuckled and drew her hand closer to him. “Many women do that to my hair,” he said, smiling sensually, emphasizing his full lips. His voice lowered to a whisper when he said “It’s one of my more favorite features.” His eyes smiled with sensual warmth that sent shivers down her spine.18

“What are you doing here, my lady?” He asked as he brought his lips to the back of her hand and kissed it, sucking on a knuckle briefly before raising his head.19

“I… I honestly don’t know,” Her voice quivered as the tongue on her knuckle felt as if it was sucking on something much deeper. It took a big deep breath for her body to stop quaking. 20

She continued and said “I was at my computer and I found a website and when I clicked “Enter”, purple smoke billowed out from it and next thing I knew, I was here.” She looked around, clearly befuddled. 21

The man’s eyebrows drew down and his lips became a grimace. He looked up and shouted to the air: 22

“Grok, what did I tell you about teleporting unknowing mortal women?”23

“To never do it again.” The voice was a meek male voice, but Kitty could tell he was from Brooklyn or the surrounding areas from the accent. “But, boss, she was really in need” he pleaded. “And besides, you let me do it in the past.”24

“To women who know of us!” he grimaced and held his head in his hand and then ran a hand through his silky hair. “No bother.” He smiled graciously. “You came for a service, and a service…,” he came closer and his breath tickled along her skin “is just what we provide.” He grinned and drew her close.25

As he brought an arm around her waist, an orchestra formed and waltz music billowed forth from the instruments. As he twirled her around the marble floor, he brought her into a dip and asked “So getting back to my earlier question, what brings you here, my lady?” He smiled sinfully before she responded, “Or should I taste for myself?”26

He dipped his head and licked a clean line from top of her cleavage in her blue blouse to her throat. Strange, she thought, I don’t remember unbuttoning the two top... 27

Her train of thought stopped as her mind and body writhed in the sensation of his wicked tongue. 28

His eyes closed and he sighed in what she could only describe to be bliss. “Ah, pent up frustration and a need for a man so strong, it’s heady. The taste of your repressed emotions is very recognizable.” He opened his eyes. “I will surely treat you to a time that you will never forget.”29

Kitty whispered back, “I hope so.”30

“Ma cherie, you have nothing to worry about here.” He brought an arm to encompass the place. “This place is all about pleasure and pleasure is all that you will ever receive. My name is Malaki and you never need to worry about anything while you are here with me.”31

The music faded away as he brought her closer to the pool. He scooped her up in his arms and she leaned against him, almost as in wonder. "What was this place?" she wondered to herself. “Am I dreaming?” she asked aloud, mostly to herself.32

However, Malaki answered. “No, love. You are not dreaming. This is very real, but we are here to provide you with tender love and care… which I believed that you wished for some time ago, no?” He grinned and he knew that he was right, but she questioned just how he knew that. 33

He brought her over to one of the luxury couches and laid her down upon the pillows. She sighed in delight as the pillows felt like clouds beneath her. Malaki reached above her head and produced a silk scarf. He rolled the ends of it as he spoke: 34

“Now, I would like you to close your eyes and let our masseuse wring all of your stress out of you. Would you do that for me, ma cherie?” He smiled softly. 35

She nodded and she felt him the silk fall over her eyes, tie around the back of her head and then Malaki's footsteps walking away in the distance. She laid there for awhile, almost falling asleep. Then, she felt a finger caress her cheek and then a single breath by her ear. 36

“Good evening, Kitty.” A male cultured voice came from the tickle of the breath on her right ear. “My name is Angel and I will be your masseuse tonight." He was whispering to her, but he was so close that she could hear him just fine. "My hope is that you leave from my touch without a single muscle in pain or discomfort. Do I have your permission to start?”37

Her voice was a whisper on the wind, more in anticipation than anything else. “Yes”38

He began by massaging her shoulder and then she felt her blouse being removed. Rather than feeling self conscious and cover herself, she wanted it removed so that his hands could massage every bit of skin that she had. He flipped her gently on her stomach and worked every muscle on her back until she was sure that she wouldn’t be able to lift herself from the couch, nor did she want to. Then, he went to work on her legs. 39

He removed more and more clothing until she was nude and writhing with his gentle touch. After she was feeling very languid, she heard footsteps approaching and soft whispering at her feet. She had no cares for what they were saying and was reveling in the feeling of her skin and what Angel did to her body. She had never felt so much peace before. 40

She fell asleep and woke a short time later to her thighs being parted. She opened her eyes and, with her silk blindfold off her eyes, she was able to see Malaki’s lips lightly kiss her right inner thigh. Kitty nearly jumped off of the couch from the contact, but Malaki held her in place. 41

“I wish to pleasure you, ma cherie.” His smile at her reaction was pleased, yet his eyes were sincere. “Will you let me?”42

She nodded and he dipped his mouth to her thighs again as he went up and down her legs in worship to her. He never missed a spot with his hands and his mouth until he kissed, nipped and purred into her upper thighs and then came a languid lick from his tongue on her outer nether lips. 43

Her hips shot straight up and she moaned as he explored slowly every nook inside of her and then he took one of his fingers and slowly pumped in and out while sucking on her clit. She grabbed his soft, silky hair and looked down as he looked back to her eyes and continued his ministrations on her. 44

The sight was enough for her to scream out his name while she was brought over the edge and her body shook in orgasm. She brought him up to her face and kissed him deeply, tasting her essence still on his tongue. 45

“Did you like, ma cherie?” Malaki asked. She responded by kissing him deeply and reaching a hand down towards his straining manhood in his shorts. He chuckled as she untied the strings and let them fall to the floor. She then quickly flipped him on his back as she kissed her way down his flawless skin. 46

“I’m guessing that you liked…ahhh.” He said as she took him in her mouth and circled her tongue around the head of his cock. His hips buckled into her mouth, but she held him as steadily as he held her, helpless in her grip.47

Malaki looked bemused as if this never happened to him before while Kitty gave just as much attention as he gave to her earlier. While Malaki was enjoying her devouring his manhood, he did say in protest: “Ma cherie, this is supposed to be for you and your pleasure.”48

She drew his cock out of her mouth and crawled up to his face. “This is pleasure for me. Now shut up and enjoy it.” She said as she kissed him deeply and went back to pleasuring him.49

He chuckled and smiled, but his face was soon slack with need as the beautiful redhead hungrily sucked and nibbled on his cock until he was ready to blow.50

“I’m close,” he said, groaning as she continued to suck harder and harder. He groaned deeply as he shot his seed onto her waiting tongue.51

As he came down from his orgasm, he bent down and kissed Kitty gently.52

“Merci, ma cherie. No woman has every given me that pleasure before and I have to say that I loved to watch you take pleasure from me.”53

She laughed and said “I believe in mutual pleasure, but I’m in need again… can you assist me?” She said, smiling devilishly as she stood.54

He smirked and said “I think that I can manage.” He tugged her hand and had her straddle his lap as she took him inside her and bent back her head, closing her eyes as the feeling of him going in inch by inch. 55

Not too long and she had him deep inside herself. As she was relishing the feel of him resting inside her, he drew out and plunged himself fiercely back into her. She screamed in pleasure as he pumped relentlessly into her body and she loved every thrust and pull from him. She bucked her hips and slammed herself against him as he pumped his hips into her and they both felt their orgasm coming at the same time.56

However, he came first, and the feeling inside him pushed her over the edge. They held each other while they both came down from their orgasmic bliss. She closed her eyes and said to him “That was the best time I’ve had in three months.” She groaned and said “Thank you, Malaki.”57

She opened her eyes and she found herself in her bedroom, resting against a body pillow. She bolted out of bed and found her clothes strewn around the room. She looked into the mirror behind her and saw that she glowed as if she had had really good sex. She was still feeling little tingles from the joining. She thought that she had a very good erotic dream, except for what she found when she picked up her bra and found a card resting in the cup.58

It said: “Thank you for your visit, Kitty. We look forward to seeing you again. 59

Sincerely,60

Good Attentions.”61

The End62

Author notes

I hope that all of the readers enjoy this. I'm sure hope that this dream comes true for one of you special readers.

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  • Angelshadow
    April 11
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    Ooh i liked this story! It was really entertaining!


  • Queenie-Chan
    April 11
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    i loved it

    this story was awsome i love how it was sexy but not over done like many erotic tales be good job


  • Kyndal Laran
    April 10
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    yayy!!! thsi was amazing!!

  • I love it!

    A delightful erotic tale. Your descriptions were wonderful, and the story had a nice flow to it. The world choice was great too .

    The concept was a bit cliche, but hey, I'm not complaining. What I am going to complain about it the ending...it was too abrupt! I wasn't ready to stop reading! The ending wasn't satisfying...I would have loved to see her get together with Malaki and ditch her ungrateful husband, although I guess she can't just leave her kids.

    Also, your dialogue set up was a little off, and it kinda got in the way of the flow of your story. Even though you might already know this, dialogue is usually set up like this:

    "Blah blah blah," said Neomaxizoondweebie.

    Mostly, all you really lack is the comma. It's a very common mistake and I still greatly enjoyed this story. There were a few other errors that I caught--nothing major.

    "She also feel (felt) a need to be alone with her husband3"

    "Her husband knew that she disapproved of her (his) drinking habits4"

    "she called to invite him to a candlelight dinner, (and) the foreman said that he left4"

    "She nodded and she felt him the silk fall over her eyes and then footsteps walking away.35" (I don't know what you're trying to say with the first half of the sentence.)

    Overall, I'm looking forward to reading more from you! Great job!

  • ...OMG!

    That was awesome! There were a few mis-spellings and grammatical errors, but they are minor and I tried to point them out as best as I could, but the story was enthralling...

    It was, uh, very... exciting! Most of the erotica I've read have been either very boring or horribly written, but the plot was very intringuing and the ending was at first like "Wha... Oooooh!"

    Very well done and look forward to more. (and this dream came true for me, but I married him so he can't get away!)

  • Nice visual! *rahr!

  • "Her husband knew that she disapproved of her" should be hi


  • Lady Eventide Greeters member
    April 10

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    I am not much for writing or reading erotica, but I must say that I could feel the passion coming off this one! Wow!

    I like that you didn't just throw the erotica at us, but built up to it. I'd like to go there. What's the website called? Good Attentions? Yep. I'm sure several women would like to go there, especially since number two applies to many of us.

    I don't agree with the cheating, but I like the idea of such a place. What can I say, this piece really brings out my naughty side, which is probably why I don't delve into this genre much.

    I do have a critique. If you want me to, I'll send it to you. Well done on this! Well done indeed!


  • Andiness
    April 9
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    Now I feel bad....I'm only supposed to be worked up over Stryker...


  • musickdiva
    April 9
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    lol...about your author's note...nice....really enjoyed it...good job...


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    April 9

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    This was good... sensual, romantic and entertaining. Not over the top like erotica can get at times. I enjoyed reading Intriguing storyline, too, and despite that I do condone cheating to a degree- I didn't find it terrible in this piece of writing. Good work!


  • MoonRoseWolf gold member
    April 8

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    Woah!

    That was so well written, and very sensual *fans face in an effort to cool down*

    You described the scenes perfectly, and didn't rush any of the story, as some people do when writing erotica. This was sweet in a way, and romantic, as well as being erotic, which always makes it better, and much more accessible by those who don't want to read full-blown erotica.

    Your characters were believeable and very good-looking, form their descriptions!

    The one thing I would ask, if why she didn't first try talking to her husband aobut it, or simply leave him. It seems a little unfair that she should cheat on him....but then maybe she just got pushed too far, and felt that this wasn't an option.

    Overall, a wonderful story, and a very sexy one at that!

    Mirry

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