What is this... recurring theme?
It sirs me up-- unsatisfied.
When now is not enough, where's more of me?
The adventure got stuck; locked inside.1
Do you understand what it means to live?
More than the forever cycle.
Trapped, tied down, no hope to give...
Why does stability demand such high tolls?2
Feet chained firmly to the ground
Flying is for dreamers
I'll always eat, my bills are paid...
But my heart screams; it's dying3
When one day I look back at now
Will I recognize me?
How long can I continue on
Without my heart to guide me?4
While I write recorded cries,
I wonder who will read them.
As everyday my passion dies,
Bled out the tip of my pen.5
Do you hear? Can you see? Does it even matter?6
A million roads before me lay
Still my way is clouded.
I gaze with longing every day
on paths beyond me, shrouded.
Author notes
Don't analyze the structure, I'm not a poet. Just had some emotions that needed processing-- this is as good a medium as any. Take what you can get, chalk the rest up to female psyche, and leave it at that.
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I like it. In it I saw something that I've taken remorse and frustration from: "the forever cycle." I've been caught in one of these for so long that haven't had any time to do what I've wanted to do--writing being one of the dominant desires, rest being the other. I hate waking up in the morning and knowing exactly what is to come that day, what I have to plan for and mentally prepare every minute to come. It's depressing.
Now, despite _not being a poet_, you've written a good poem--a better one than many I've seen. This is because you wrote it in a very thoughtful way, and I really like that. Instead of simplicity, you chose elevation to express your thoughts.
I hope you're doing okay.
-Andrew
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Thanks Andrew. As always, I appreciate your feedback.
I am doing well, no worries. In writing strong emotion, I am better able to recognize its source and deal with it.
I despise merely existing. It's a pit which can be so large you don't even realize you've fallen into it because you cannot see all four walls at once. There are ways to maintain adventure even whilst knowing you must keep to a certain schedule of events for the time being. For that, we must guard jealously our connection with the Ultimate Adventurer.
Thank you again.
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This is awesome, and I think a lot of people have the same internal struggle - what pays well or what makes you happy. I really like this, good job
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Hey, you.
I like the poem... it's good... it also worries me.
This is something that I would write...it's not your norm by any stretch of the imagination.
What's goin on?
Your loving sis.
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