While walking in the woods one day,1
I straied of the path and quite lost my way.2
I walked and I ran trying to get back on the road,3
then I sat down, to ease my shoulders of my heavy load.4
I drifted off for a moment or two,5
and when I woke up I didn't know what to do!6
Nothing looked familiar at all,7
so I sat and wept under the trees so tall.8
Then I heard a small sound like the song of a dove,9
so I looked right and left, then I looked above.10
There was a little person dressed in green and brown,11
and on his little face there was a slight frown.12
"why are you crying?" he asked with curiosity,13
than he showed me elvish generosity.14
He lead me to his home, it was really a tree,15
and there he fed me honeysuckle and tea.16
We talked and we sat and we sang a few tunes,17
about weather and sunsets and stars and the moon.18
As the sun was setting he lead me to the road through the trees,19
and then the little elf jumped into the breeze!20
He waved as he left caling out to me,21
"Don't tell about my folk or we will no longer be free!"22
Then he was gone and I found myself thinking,23
"was it all just a dream? Than what am I drinking?"24
For I still had some tea in my little folk cup,25
so as I drank it down I looked up.26
There was the elf happily waving at me,27
and he said, "Don't tell about my folk or we will no longer be free!"28
I gave him my promise and to my amazement I found,29
that elves are everywhere, I had to but look around!30
SO if you get lost in the woods and you meet a small person,31
be kind and help them be free!
A contest entry
- E is for Elf by tonialoise.
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Comments
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Sweet story... There were a few spot that felt a little ruff. But I liked it.
I can picture reading it to one of my kids when the were little

beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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This was good, but I agree with tonialoise about not really liking the end. Also, there were quite a bit of typos. But the imagry was cute.
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I liked it right up to the end! but I found some typos...
p2 "straied" should be "strayed"
p14/24 "than" s/b "then"
p21 "caling" s/b "calling"
Why didn't the last sentence rhyme?
This was cute and fun. It felt quite full of energy. Very good job!





