Erronal - Wizard Apprentice1
( the journey part 1 )2
And down the rocky path he went3
across some barren land4
Through fire pits and bridge with trolls5
to seek a helping hand6
Through forest dense with undergrowth7
and creatures of all kinds8
Across the bogs and castle moats9
down the corridors of time10
In search of wizard of grand trade11
to seek to do his best12
For far too long he has just played13
small spells at their bequest14
But with new training he'll become15
a master of his craft16
And then be dragons on the run17
and he seeks them out with staff18
For Erronal has known since birth19
the fate that lies ahead20
And soon he will achieve his worth21
and one will then lay dead22
For gone the village where he lived23
destroyed by breathes of fire24
One day he shall return that gift25
Revenge now his desire26
-Eddy27
© 2005 Edward Cooke All rights reserved worldwide28
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So far / So Good
Looking forward to part II -
Yikes. I think I've been there.
Got the scars to prove it, but revenge is mine, saith the Pentagon, so let them take care of it.
Sequel, please. -
Oh, I hope there's a sequel to this very good piece, Eddy It looks like the beginning of an adventurous tale.
You did a very good job with this story/poem and it truly cries out for more to come.
Love and
Mum
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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i really love this
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What goes around comes around ey?
I love stories of dragons and dragon slayers. Great job Eddy. Good luck in the contest. 
~Lyrical
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This looks like the beginning of a good epic poem. Don't stop there...keep going!
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GOOD
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I thought it was self-evident since the poem was about him...ok
I will change...
Hugs...Eddy -
this is great.. love poetry about dragons.. the details that you have provided in the poem have created a very vivid picture
I too wondered if you left out the pronoun in the first line...
Hugs an Good Luck in the Contest
Lori
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Now I got this ond! I enjoyed the piece and makes me wonder what's next. In that very first line did you forget to put "he" in there or did you intentionally omit the pronoun? Who is going down the path?
~Dee
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