First Sentence (Contest)

The room froze as soon as I entered it, my power overwhelming the floorboards and rafters.

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This is original...lol I'm sitting in English Class right now xD

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  • Reaver Greeters member
    April 21

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    Good hook. I had questions about where it was going, making it work. Is there a story to the sentence? I would like the link if you have one...thanks for entering, you are a finalist.

    Rian,


  • MJs-Angel
    April 4

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    What powers? How did you get them? Floorboards? Did you freeze? Great sentence! I'd like to see the story connected!