I take a deep breath, knowing as I do that I have to choose wisely because this is the most important decision of my life.
A contest entry
- -A Contest- How well can you 'hook' me? by Reaver.
2050 points, ended April 21, 59 entries
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Eh...this is not something you'd regularly see starting off a story. But it can definitely work. However, maybe a dd in a bit more detail as some people's most important decisions are just choosing which university to go to. XD
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was kind of awkward 'knowing as i do' but i was curious to know more. Is there a link?
Thanks for entering,
Rian -
Wow, this is definitely hooking! I hope there's a story to it, or at least a story-to-be! The sentence sounds a little rushed though, but what might fix that is if you add a comma between "breath" and "knowing". It would just make the sentence look and sound better
. Good luck in the contest!
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