Sigil de Diabolical

A flock of insane vultures aimlessly circled awry1

Their darkened wings colliding in the midnight sky2

A black brick avenue sparkles in the brilliant moonlight3

Framed by grey cement walls with symbols on the right4

Winding in a rhythmic S pattern echoing an eerie fright5

Standing on top a charcoal colored gloom ridden mountain plateau6

Behind cloaking mysts of fiery clouds, lay an ancient chateau7

Wrapped in desolate energy of sorrow, like a worn manteau8

Like a phoenix rising from burnt ashes flew a moth-winged bateau9

In the blink of an eye, the heavens opened it’s vast door10

Briefly exposing other worlds through infinite corridors   11

Sliding on a pallid rainbow came a blazing red hand to explore12

Exiting the corridor, lightning flashed & acid rain began to pour13

And metamorphosis into a young woman, any man would adore 14

Blindly stumbling through life, stuck in misery’s routine15

Hypnotized with diabolical intent from pretend queen16

Reaching deep inside of me with tentacles of the unseen17

Hollow, empty eyes mesmerize with their dancing orbs of green18

Vacuumed into a spiraling illusion, now ravaged by internal wolverine19

Ghastly demons hauntingly taunt, and feast on my spirit cuisine20

Completely entranced by Sigil de Diabolical, my eyes turned to glass21

And motor skills slowed to the rhythm of unknown instrument of brass22

Waves of utter intoxicating insanity crash within me, from head to ass23

Disillusioned into perpetual loss of faith, mind becomes one big razor jawed morass24

A soft flutter resounds, every nerve ending malfunctions from Sigil’s harass25

The sky opens & blackened crackling arrows of energy savagely descend26

Followed by the living moth craft speeding at us, as I now comprehend27

Scooping us up, Sigil transforms into the fiery hand as we begin the ascend28

Decayed fingernails reek of morbid magical powers, truth I now apprehend29

Streaking through the maze of esoteric madness, arriving at my new confines30

Hypnotic state gone, panic surfs the tidal wave of sinister, toxic malign31

Imprisoned in a flaming gilded cage of engulfing discord, and unblemished design32

Time stands still in the unending, all consuming torture chamber of nether world33

The mysterious vast door springs open, as God’s fallen angels battle in Sigil’s whorl 34

~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~NOTES~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~35

Word definitions:36

1) manteau: A lose cloak, coat, or robe37

2) bateau: A flat-bottomed boat with raked bow and stern and flaring sides38

3) Sigil: a sign, word, or device held to have occult power in astrology or magic 39

4) morass: a situation that traps, confuses, or impedes40

I wanted to challenge myself with something new and different and thus the 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2 lined rhyming verses41

Author notes

used "Their darkened wings colliding in the midnight sky" and the words, moth, avenue, sparkle, rainbow and gods as required in the poem. I had fun doing this completely different format *shrugs*

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  • October 16
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    Whew!

    What a trip that read was....felt like I was there being witness to this battle. Hmm. Terrific. I miss your poems so badly. I even recall how I got started reading you. I hope all is better w/ you, Monica, & your other daughter. Things are healing w/ mine. Peace & light- Syah xoxo


  • July 12, 2005
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    This was fairly well done, a challenging form to say the least. I was very impressed with how well you pulled off the rhyming in the third stanza. One thing though, "Scooping us up, Sigil transforms into the fiery hand as we begin the ascend" i think that would sound better with "to ascend". Take care and God bless.


  • June 26, 2005
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    I like this.I love the style that you wrote this in. Its as if your bringing the person up and then gradually letting them down. I found it to make it a much more cpativating poem.I agree with Romantic Soul up there, this is surely a winner. Best of wishes.
    SweetNSassy


  • June 26, 2005
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    I luv dark poerty, very well written, "Blindly stumbling through life, stuck in misery’s routine
    Hypnotized with diabolical intent from pretend queen
    Reaching deep inside of me with tentacles of the unseen" This paragraph alone could win a contest in my opinion nice work!


  • June 26, 2005
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    good

    Nice imagery. Needs a little help with punctuation.

  • Lovely Luci
    June 26, 2005
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    Bravo

    Um, uh, holy fuck. This was one of those poems you can get lost in, and just read it over and over again. The background really fit in well with the poem. And, again, this poem was flat out awesome. I've never written anything like this that I know of, and I'm sure I could ever get as good as this. Well done and bravo.

    With a sword of hope and a pen of darkness,

    Sir Dakkon

  • Betty Rickard
    June 26, 2005
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    Excellent

    Excellent..Your talent, shines like the sun..

    Betty


  • June 26, 2005
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    That was dark, intense, interesting, and need I say Awesome? Keep up the good work.

  • Wandika
    June 26, 2005
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    Quite a challenge and very well done. I had not seen this before but saw what you were doing straight away. Jim


  • June 26, 2005
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    Now that one was awesome! Very dense and intense of course feeding my imagination generously. While the lighter aspects of my personality tried to hide in some corner, the darker ones jumped around in joy jeeringly...also loved the picture, reminds me of the black-red-grunge stuff I do when I'm in a bad mood. Excellent write, I honestly loved it.


  • June 26, 2005
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    WOW ! What an awesome write this is. You did a fantastic job on this and I was so happy to see the definitions listed because I wanted to know what the words meant. I am bowled over by this piece and I wish you luck in the contest you entered this in. You definetly have a winner here I would surely think.

  • slender spider
    June 26, 2005
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    Very scary! The imagery is excellent, captivating and spooky.

  • GyPsychic
    June 26, 2005
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    While I am usually not the dark and demented type. I must say that this poem kicks "Morass". Great imagery and the picture holds grand shock value. Thank You for freaking me out before I go to bed. Goodnight!


  • June 25, 2005
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    Very well written, but the subject matter not really my cup of tea. Soz.
    Robin.

  • Miss Faerie
    June 25, 2005
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    Congrats gorgeous. Told you this would win


  • June 25, 2005
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    ...stunning write...the title captured my gaze and the picture kept me going...all in all great write and keep up the good work


  • June 25, 2005
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    excelent display of emotions!

    Well written! I knew the words at the end-definitions-expecially because I speak french. It really was an intriguing and dark poem! I enjoyed the picture associated with it as well-wth the revers pentacle in the upper right corner. A good picture to accompany an excellent poem.

    Well done! And excellent display of emotions!

    With all due respect,
    Jeff.

  • Ktulu Blackwolfe
    June 25, 2005
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    Such an awesome write. Great flow and was written to perfection. I hope you win the contest, good luck, you deserve it.

  • Bint al Arab
    June 25, 2005
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    OMG, this was amazing, all the words were placed so creatively to where they made sense where they were, but you would never think to put them there, one suggestion though, you might want to change "Hollow, empty eyes mesmerize with its dancing orbs of green" to "Hollow, empty eyes mesmerize with their dancing orbs of green", awesome awesome poem.
    ~Laila~


  • Ilovewaffles
    June 25, 2005
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    i love this! the imagery kicks ass.
    Decayed fingernails reek of morbid magical powers, truth I now apprehend
    yay! keep up the nifty work.

  • antique
    June 25, 2005
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    One of the most rewarding things I've found while hosting these contests, is seeing people try out new ways of writing and succeeding with their endeavours .. this was a magical write .. I love it .. the imagery that you have created with your words is amazing and the flow was flawless .. thankyou so much for entering and I wish you the best of luck in the contest ....... keep the ink flowing hun

    ~Aimee

  • Miss Faerie
    June 25, 2005
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    I withdraw nods This is way too brilliant to compete against lol. Seriously darling this is absolutely amazing. Captivated me...
    Love Shari

  • Wolf Dreamer
    June 24, 2005
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    Oh I see! Okay I can do that! This one was a dark one alright but done so well. Reading this is like being on a rollercoaster and I mean it in a good way. Where the climb starts off slow and then there's the drop with that fast heart in your throat, thinking you're going to fly out into oblivion kind of a feeling. Very intense. Also a lot of great grab at you kinds of imagery that you can't help but look at over and over again. Amazing write!

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