Walking in the night

I’m walking alone1

It’s quiet2

And eerie3

Outside4

But5

It’s how I like it6

Only my 7

Footsteps8

In the cold9

With10

A11

Full moon12

Lighting up13

The sky14

I’m walking alone15

In the night16

No 17

Noises18

No19

People20

No21

Distractions22

Nothing23

It’s perfect24

In my own25

World26

In my own27

Life28

It’s beautiful29

Outside30

But31

Inside32

Is too crowded33

And full34

Of life35

I like36

Being alone37

In the night38

Walking39

To the sound40

Of41

The music42

In my head43

To the sound44

Of 45

What I like46

Of47

What I need48

Of49

What is there50

Author notes

i was in class when i wrote this, but i was feeling a bit alone, and depressed at the time so i made this

Good type of poetry?

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  • Rorshach gold member
    April 25

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    Contrasted the difference between indoors and out very nicely. Full of introspection and teen question. I think it was very interesting and it read very well


  • TheDarkRoom
    April 22
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    i like it

    nice, i liked it. well done


  • Blood Wolf
    April 14

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    This expresses emotion very well, but the rhythm is very jerky. But for this poem, jerky fits, because it feels like the footsteps of the person walking.


  • daniexD
    April 14
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    good

    its a great way of expressing how you feel.
    i got the mood in the first two lines.

    beginning: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4.


  • leeaseng
    April 5
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    good

    a very consuming piece to the reader

    beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 5.

  • xXMidnightSkyXx
    April 2

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    Liked It

    I liked it I thought it was written well and that it held lots of meaning in it. I love your style. It is very detailed


  • WhiteHorse17
    April 1
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    weyallll, i did like the poem
    it's dramatic and descriptive and captivating and all that other good stuff
    but the format was... iffy
    kinda short and abrupt
    you coulda done it like
    i'm walking alone
    it's quiet and eerie outside
    but that's how i like it
    only my footsteps in the cold
    and so on
    it's kinda weird with the format but nice poem


  • Owen Aero
    April 1

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    If you're looking for a knowledgable critic of poetic style, don't get your hopes up on this particular post. That being said, I liked the poem. Normally I like poetry that flows and has a certain... elegance, for lack of a better term. This one, though, stuttered, and it was actually very effective. You couldn't get away with it for just anything, but I thought it worked pretty well in this context. I wouldn't mind seeing what happened if you played with it a little more. Good work.


  • Jenni-Wren
    April 1

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    I really like the poem, but I'm not too sure about the style. The poem doesn't flow as well as it maybe could, but when I was reading it the short lines sounded almost like footsteps which was really cool concidering you were talking about listening to only your footsteps... (I may be sounding crazy here, in which case just ignore me!)
    Any way, I really liked the poem!! Keep up the good work. (:


  • Raydog
    March 31

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    What type of poetry is that? Is there a name for it? I've never really seen this style before. I don't know if I like it or not...one thing is for sure, it sure takes a short poem and makes it very, very long.


  • SAVAGEshark.
    March 28
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    its a good poem.Not dull,unique.I liked it,it has some true words in it.

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