Sunrise chapter one-Twilight Fanfiction


Sunrise
1.TROUBLE
I stared blankly across the room remembering how easily Edward had said it was to get distracted. I had forgotten what it was I was meant to do. It’s been a while since my transformation and I was enjoying it. For once in my life I wasn’t clumsy and I had Edward to myself for the rest of my life. For the rest of my life; that’s a bit of an understatement. To rephrase that, I had him forever. I scanned around for any sounds that might be interesting to listen to. Ever since my transformation, I have had heightened senses. I could hear all the way to the freeway. Downstairs I could hear the murmurs of Charlie and Billy and the baseball on the flat-screen. Edward was away on some ‘school camp’ so I agreed to stay at Charlie’s house while he was gone. It had been ages since I had been with Charlie. We talk over the phone but ever since he learned what Jacob was he seemed not to diverge in conversations that might spring more surprises on him. I wonder if he thought I was a werewolf too... I smell better than that. There was a pause downstairs and Charlie began to climb upstairs. I stirred a bit but decided it better if I was awake. After all he might want to tell me something. His heart was dully thumping. Even though it had been months since I had gotten used to the smell of blood, I was still intoxicated by Charlie’s slow flowing blood. The wet beating of his heart got louder which indicated that he was closer. The door opened bit by bit and a shaft of light from the bathroom light shone through.
“Hey...Bella...You awake?”
” Yeah Charlie, come in”, I answered him trying to sound as sleepily as possible considering the fact that I couldn’t sleep.
“I just wanted to tell you that it’s great to have you stay over for a while and that I missed you”. Poor Charlie, if only he knew. Maybe then he wouldn’t want me here so much. I guess I secretly miss him and maybe one day I’ll let him feel my hand and when he questions I can tell him. But I can’t bring myself to do it yet. There were too many complications, the volturi I mean.
“I love you too dad”.
“I’m glad to hear it Bella and I want you to know if you ever have anything that you need to talk to me about, I am here”. Could this be my chance to tell him the truth? Maybe I should try and break it to him easily.
“Dad?”
“Yes Bella”, Charlie leaned in waiting for me to reply.
“I missed you too”. I couldn’t do it. I couldn’t bring myself to tell him that I was a vampire. I shivered to think of his reaction and Charlie noticed my action.
“Are you cold Bella, honey? Do you want some more blankets?” He reached over to touch my forehead. Wrong move. I couldn’t stop him because he would notice my incredible speed if I knocked his hand away and I didn’t want to break his wrist. Immediately as he touched my forehead he retreated his hand and shivered.”Bella! You’re freezing cold!” His expression on his face was shocked and I realised that I would have to make up a cover story. Remembering my speed I ran and opened up the window so fast, to him it would have looked like I had shifted sitting positions.
” Sorry”, I murmured.” I must have forgotten to close the window”. Charlie looked bewildered for a moment, and then smiled.
” You were never good at remembering the small things in life”. he went over to the window and shut it tightly. My cover had been saved and I had saved myself from an explanation. Even if he decided to take me to the hospital, Carlisle would think up some story to help me out. “Well...see you in the morning Bells”.
“Bye dad”. Charlie closed the door and the shaft of light vanished. Charlie was never one for long conversations, at least that hadn’t changed over the past few years. Years...had it been that long. I could still remember James, Victoria, Laraunt and the volturi. I had been nineteen for about three years now. At least now I didn’t have to wear contact lenses anymore. My eyes had gone a soft amber colour and Carlisle had made up a story for Charlie to understand why they changed. He told Charlie that it was a rare pigment disorder where the colour of the eye changes to ever a brighter or darker colour. Charlie bought it and told my mom about it. For now everything had been explained and my friendship with Jacob still exists. It was probably time that I appeared to be asleep so I shut my eyes and waited for morning to come.1


The sun shone brightly through the window and I willed my eyes to open. I had gotten better at lying still and pretending to sleep. Charlie had come into my room countless times to check up on me. There was really no point checking up on me but he liked to do it anyway. Just to make sure I was safe. Edward should be home today so I wanted to wear my nicest clothes for him. Jeans and a chequered shirt, his favourite. We had agreed on going for a run to L.A and back for something to do at night. We had made a bet to who would win. Alice, Emmett, Esme and Rosalie were for me and Carlisle refused to choose between the two but judging by Edwards smile when Carlisle said this, he read Carlisles thoughts and got an answer he wanted. Carlisle has always been like that. Loving I mean...he doesn’t like to choose between his children. I went slowly through my daily, morning ritual. There was no rush today so I had a long shower and got dressed. Alice had bought me a makeup kit for my false birthday so I decided I might as well use it. I didn’t want to go overboard; just some foundation was all I wanted. I never thought I suited lipstick. Just as I was about to leave the bathroom I caught the scent of bacon and eggs. Charlie was cooking? Maybe Billy had taught him. I stumbled down the stairs trying as hard as I could to look human, the thought of having to choke down human food again. I wonder if I would be able to taste it. It smelled the same. I walked over to the kitchen to find Edward cooking breakfast, happily chatting away with Charlie.
“Edward your early!”
“Well it’s nice to know I have a welcoming present”. Edward was unable to say anymore as I grabbed him into a silent embrace. Kissing had become so much easier since I had been transformed. “I missed this”, Edward exclaimed during my furious kisses.
” Me too”. I was too caught up with Edward that I hadn’t noticed anyone else was here.
“Alright, alright. No need for a public display”. I turned around to notice that the whole Cullen family, my family, was standing in the corner of our tiny kitchen.
“That’s never stopped you before”, I targeted this statement towards Emmett who sneered and hid a smile.
“Ok...well you can break it up for a minute so we can have some food”. This time Charlie had spoken. We all sat down around the table and ate. Oblivious to Charlie, we all found it hard to swallow the food down but surprisingly it still tasted the same. I would have to regurgitate that out later. I shuddered. After breakfast I said my goodbyes to Charlie and we made our way home.
“I missed you Mrs Cullen”.
“You have no idea how good that sounds”, I replied.
“Actually, I know exactly how good it sounds. After all, I am married to the most beautiful wife in the history of vampire women”.
“I’m not sure about that”, we heard Jasper murmur from the other car.
“But I am”, Edward protested. He grabbed me in another embrace that I couldn’t resist.
”So...how was the ‘camp’”, I politely asked him.
“Well...it was supposed to be physically challenging so naturally I was the best at everything”. His tone was almost boastful as he announced his triumph.
“Even if you weren’t a vampire, I would still love you”, I told him.
“I would say the same but I already know for definite that that is true. After all, that is how we started”.”Have you figured out when you are going to tell Charlie that you are a vampire?” Edward had struck my biggest fear.
“I think maybe we should leave it for another year. Let him know I’m not going to suck his blood”; Edward laughed at my joke and agreed to leave it until the right time.”I mean, considering the fact that the volturi would come when he knows. I just don’t want him in that trouble yet”. Edward tried to hide a growl but had to let it loose. His grip had gotten tighter and I was afraid he would never get over the volturi. I opened up my mind to him and let him know what I was thinking so no one else would here. “You know that if the volturi do come for him that he would have only two choices”.
“I know I know”, Edward retreated from our embrace.
“Life as a vampire or death”. I wasn’t sure if Charlie would want any of those but when the time came I would give him lots of time to think about it. The car slowly winded down our long driveway and stopped outside the main house. Edward politely escorted me out of the car and we walked into the front door. The piano was still on the raised floor and I wondered how long ago I had sat up there with Edward for the first time.
“I’ve been told that you have been taking piano lessons at Dartmouth”, Edward had me seated at the piano and the top lifted up.”Why not show me what you can do”. I hadn’t been playing for that long and I wasn’t as good as Edward but I did write a song a while ago. I placed my hands on the keys and moved them about. The music started softly and got louder as it went. All the way through the piece Edward’s eyes were watching and he listened attentively to the music that I was playing. I finished with a long sustained cord and lifted my hands away from the piano.
“That was beautiful Bella”, Edward told me. ”do you have a name for it?” I did have a name for it but it kind of sounded corny.
“Um...well...Edwards Lullaby”, I looked attentively at his face for his reaction.
“all that trouble for me?” his eyes were filled with wonder and I had no idea if he was going to say it was a waste of time or not.”I think something special is in order for tonight”. Edward rose from the chair and went over to the phone to make some calls. He was talking for about a minute before he hung up and walked back over to me. “We’re going out for dinner tonight”, Edward said. I wondered where we could go that would be appetizing to vampires. I decided not to ask. “Can you go pick up Renesme from the day care?”
“Yeah sure”, I replied wondering what he had planned.
“You can take my Volvo”. He passed me keys and went back to the phone. I walked out of the house and went to the garage. All the cars were still there along with some new ones. I passed my ‘After Car’ and my truck. Surprisingly they had kept my motorbike which looked like a toy next to Edwards. We had kept my truck as a memorial to all the past years we were together. Stopping at Edwards Volvo, Alice walked into the garage.
“Hey Alice, what’s up?”Alice danced between the cars towards me, her grace still amazes me.
“Hey Bella, um...I need to talk to you, do you mind if I come with you?”She seemed upset, I wonder what was up.
” Yeah...sure. I needed some girl time anyway”. That was true at least; I haven’t talked to Alice for ages. We both got into the car and I drove up the winding driveway through the woods. Alice looked to me with apologetic eyes and opened her mouth to speak.
“I saw Charlie”, she said. This didn’t surprise me; Alice always had visions of my father. But the expression on her face told me that this time was different. “He...” Alice seemed to be struggling for words.” he...died”. This vision had me so frightened and shocked that I stood on the brake in the middle of the freeway. The cars behind us blared their horns and Alice begged me to keep moving. Once I started down the freeway again, Alice began to talk. “He was at his house, in the living room”, Alice hesitated, then went on.”There were two of them and...”
”What!” I interrupted nearly stepping on the brake again. I knew what she meant by them and it was my worse fear.
”Vampires”, Alice confirmed.
“When?” I interrupted her not leaving any time. I wanted to know when so I could stop them.
“I don’t know exactly when but all I can see is that he hangs up a painting called Windstorm a few hours before they come”. I had to swallow all this and figure out what to do.
“I’m going to save him”, I told Alice not looking at her.
“You will”, said Alice much to my surprise. “And we’ll all help you”. That was all we said on the way to the Day Care centre. Renesme was happily waiting out the front with a piece of paper in her hand.2

“Hi mommy”, Renesme said cheerfully as she got into the car.
“Hey Renesme”, I replied.”How was day care?”
”I made a painting mommy”, Renesme triumphantly held up her masterpiece. It was painted on a canvas with intricate swirls and dark colours.
” Have you named it yet Renesme?”.
“Well I can’t think of a name at the moment, but when I do I will write it down”. We said nothing else until we got home. Edward was waiting outside when we drove into the garage. He had a scared expression on his face which told me he seen Alice’s vision. I tried to act normal and locked up the garage quickly. I walked over to Edward and kissed him on the cheek. Edward turned towards me and his expression had changed back to one of happiness and he kissed me back.
“Look Daddy, I made a picture”, Renesme ran over to Edward with a swift movement that for one moment made our family look human.
“That’s wonderful Nesse”, Edward chimed in his lovely musical voice.” You know who would really like that painting?” Renesme shook her head and asked who would like it. “Grandpa Charlie would like that wouldn’t he?” Renesme jumped at the thought of seeing Charlie again. They seemed to get along so well, it makes me wonder if that’s how we had been when I was a child. We had planned another visit to Charlie’s place soon so she can give it to him then. Renesme ran into the house to show everyone else and I went off towards the woods with Edward. We must have ran at least twelve kilometres south and Edward wouldn’t tell me where we were going.
“Can’t you at least give me a hint?” I did the best puppy-eye expression I could but he refused to let me in on it. “Well if you won’t tell me than I guess that double bed of ours won’t get any use”. I hated to use that on him but it was the only way that he would tell me.
“Ok...we are going to a special place to have dinner that is just for vampires. Vegetarian ones I mean”. Edward smiled at me and didn’t answer anymore questions until we had gotten there. I’ve never been drunk in my life but I’m pretty sure I was drunk tonight. It surprised me that even Vampires can get drunk. The rest of the night went so fast that I couldn’t remember it.
I woke up in bed beside Edward. Wait...Hang on...I woke up. I turned to look at Edward and he just shrugged. “I don’t know why, but I think that when vampires have a big night out they tend to actually sleep”. I couldn’t speak. For the first time in three years, I slept. Edward kept on explaining.” I thought you were dead”, he stopped halfway to laugh then continued. “I got Carlisle and he told me that it happens now and then but is very rare. You even don’t have any black under eyes anymore”. I rushed over to the mirror and looked at myself. He was right, they were gone and I was still in the clothes I had on last night. “I would have changed you but you looked so peaceful. It reminded me of the old days when I used to watch you sleep”. Sometimes I still longed for the old days...months...years.
“Hey you mind if I go see Jacob for a bit before we go to Charlie’s?”
“Sure, go ahead”. Things have been so much easier since Edward and Jacob had become friends. I rushed out of bed and dressed quickly. I decided I might drive my After Car for a change. Once I was across the border I could see Jacob and Seth running on either side of the car in their wolf form. Jacob-wolf smiled at me and disappeared into the woods. I stopped the car outside Jacob’s house and waited until Jacob emerged from the forest.
“Hey Bella, it’s a wonder you’re hubby let you out”, Jacob sneered walking towards me.
“shut up Jacob”, I moaned.” You smell stronger than usual, did you gussy up just for little, old me”, I fluttered my eyelashes and pouted my lips.
“Ok I deserved that”, Jacob finally admitted. “So what brings you to the cave?” So is that what he calls his house now, what next, Batman?
” I thought I was being polite and came to say hi”.
“That’s unusual for you”, he said. “There must be something you want right?” I mustered up all my will power on a small joke and let it out.
“Right, I was hoping for dinner me and my hubbie could have wolf stew with extra musk”.
“Ha-Ha, very funny”. We raved on about this for at least an hour before I realised that I was meant to be at Charlie’s place.
“Hey Jacob I’ve got to go, see ya”.
“Ok, see ya”, Jacob dashed back into the woods and I heard the soft thump of paws on the grass. When I got to Charlie’s house Edward was already there and he had Renesme’s car seat in his Volvo. I walked through the door and was flooded with a bunch of people shouting surprise. After getting over the trauma of it all, I noticed that my mother was here.
“Bella honey I’ve missed you so much”, Renee flooded me with kisses and I gently pulled back.
“Mom, what are you doing all the way here?”
“Phil had some work to do so I thought I would come over here for a few days. You know, catch up on things”. That was Renee. Little miss princess. Charlie had Renesme’s painting in a frame and was holding it.
“I wanted to wait for you before we hung it up”. Charlie walked carefully over to the wall where a makeshift hook had been placed and slid the string on the back of the frame onto it. “That looks great don’t you think Bella?”
”Yeah it’s good. Renesme, have you named it yet?” It took a while for Renesme to answer and she asked if she could have a minute. Legally I was able to drink wine so I decided I would have a glass for a change. We were happily chatting away when Renesme pointed a finger at her painting.
“I know what I will call it”, she proclaimed. “Windstorm”. My glass smashed in my hand and I heard Edward curse. Renee had come to my side and asked what was wrong.
“Mom, take Renesme to the car now. Don’t question, just do it please”. Renee didn’t question and she took Renesme to her car.
“What’s wrong Bella?” it was Charlie this time. He was interrupted by two solid knocks on the door. Before anyone could think of responding, the door flew off its hinges and hit the back wall. Standing in its place were two adult Vampires. They walked towards us and I got a close-up look at them. They both looked allot the same and they wore the same type of outfit. The first one was blonde and slender. The second one was a red head and looked like he belonged on the runway. Charlie grabbed his gun and pulled the trigger. Nothing happened. The bullet smashed when it came in contact with the vampire’s hard skin.
“What do you want you...Devils?” my dad for once in his life seemed genuinely scared and I couldn’t blame him.
“Poor fragile human”, the first one chanted. With lightning speed he ran towards Charlie and pushed him into the back wall with a loud thump.
“Run Bella!” he was screaming but I wasn’t about to run.
“Get away from him”, I called to them. They immediately dropped him and turned towards me. When they did, Edward ran for Charlie and got him to the other side of the room in two seconds. Charlie’s eyes were full of questions but he kept his mouth shut for the time being.
“What was that little girl?” the second one chimed.
“Leave him alone”, I repeated and crouched down. I began to let instinct take over me. I pulled back my lips and showed my perfect white teeth. A deep growl erupted from my chest and they stepped backwards.
“Ooh”, they chanted. “A vampire girl, her husband and her father, how romantic”. I had had enough of them and lunged for their throats. It was a beastly brawl of fists, teeth and strength but in the end I had them disassembled.
“Edward! Bring me some fire wood”. Edward rushed out of the house and towards the woods.
“Dad...can you get me a match?” It took a while for Charlie to gather himself together and then he rose to his feet. He was shaking and looked at me with a fearful expression. “It’s ok. I won’t hurt you”, I told him nicely. He swallowed and got a match from the kitchen. Edward arrived with the firewood and we started the big fire up. All through our ritual, Charlie sat their traumatized. Not looking at the other vampires. Not looking at Edward, but at me. ; With fear in his eyes. I hated for him to have to find out this way. Once everything was burned we put out the fire and cleaned up. Afterwards we gently sat next to him but not too close as to scare him and we sat there silently for a while. Charlie opened up his mouth to speak and swallowed hardly again. His heart raced fast and I was worried he was going to have a heart attack after I had just saved him from death. His eyes were once again questioning as he looked towards me, then Edward, and then me again. He opened up his mouth once more to speak and began to breathe very unsteadily. He cleared his throat a couple of times with loud coughs and wiped his head with his hand.
“There is something that you two have not been telling me about”.
END OF CHAPTER ONE OF SUNRISE
STARTED THURSDAY 26.03.09
FINISHED SATURDAY 28.03.093


Author notes

hey, i wanted to write more on twilight because stephanie meyer is currently not writing anymore so i wanteed to keep it going. Obviously i do not have the talents of stephanie meyer(OMG i love stephanie meyer(and twilight)). i will post a short example first and then start doing chapters. please comment and tell me how you think it's going or just comment to tell me that u r a twilight fan too. (oh yeah, did i mention i am a guy) it's true. I also hope that stephanie meyer will continue to write midnight sun. ilove you stephanie meyer.

Edit:27.03.09-hey everyone, the full chapter one will be available soon, i'll give it a week at max. Thanx for waiting.

Edit:30.03.09 here is the full chapter, chapter two comming soon, i put in new lines for dialogue so it's easier to read

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  • maemoce
    September 2

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    ya, it's really nice. i like the vision, i think that's what most made me want to keep reading, to see if they would be able to save charlie... one thing tho, i think that things happened a bit fast, very inspired, but, i don't know... i think twilight tends to drag things on a bit before getting to the point. and i don't think the title quite fit it, it might be better for a book, and in the books, the title is used, or at least mentioned in the book.... but i guess that's just if it's a whole book...
    i found a few grammatical/spelling/doesn't make sense errors, but i decided it's not worth the trouble of making you locate them

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 4.

  • Angel07
    September 2
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    good.

  • Hey, i'm not into twilight that much, but I think this was pretty good. the title, though, trouble? Maybe you could find something different. pretty good, though


  • EmoGirl95
    August 31
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    Hey!!!!

    That's my story title!!!!

  • waaaaaaaay over the limit. READ THE FRIGGEN RULES


  • tsavo gold member
    August 6

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    I'm not into fanfiction or even read any of the twilight books but this was pretty good i have to say. It kinda got me interested in seeing what all the fuss is about it. Great job. I'll be looking for more.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Chapter 8!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • send me chapter 8!!!

  • hes great isnt he?1!! im glad hes my friend!

  • OH MY GOD! Simply amazing, I was rooted from start to finish! I really like how you kept to the story, but wrote in your own voice, the writing flowed freely and almost leapt off the page/computer screen. Keep it up, I'm now about to read the next one!

    beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 2, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 3.


  • JujuBella.
    July 28
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    UH, DEAN DOESNT BELLAS MOM NOTICE THE COLDNESS OF HER SKIN?


  • JujuBella.
    July 28
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    WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO\


  • JujuBella.
    July 28
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    dont b stupid, andiness! Dean, Its so cool, im glad im ur friend so h app y ur continuing it.


  • Andiness
    July 7
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    It was a good story but I cant see Renesmee at a day care, Edward at a camp, and Charlie beign that thickheaded. You did Alice alright though, I'll give you that. Bella, there was something...off about Bella. She talked a littletoo much I think btu it was a VERY good story, don't get me wrong. I enjoyed reading it.

    -Andi

  • this is cute
    i'm glad SOMEONE is deciding to continue with twilight.
    this is really good !!

    you should continue,
    obviously! haha.

  • Hi!

    I'm beginning to learn about Twilight through the Twilight fans. I don't get the opportunity to read much except when I'm online and I'm online a lot. What I mean is that I haven't read a book in more than a year. Twilight has a lot of fans.

    You have a few typos that I didn't try to point out because the blocks of writing were so large. It would be good to use a blank line between paragraphs and to separate each speaker's dialogue.

    This was interesting and entertaining, but would have been easier to read if formatted better.

    Thanks for entering the New Members contest. Welcome to Storywrite! Let us know if we may be of assistance.

    Andy, greeter


  • IrishYndina Greeters member
    April 3

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    I have not read Twilight, so I don't think I'm qualified to answer the question of whether or not it sounds like the series. I did think the plot was interesting, though, and your characters all seem to act in realistic ways. There were some typos and grammar mistakes, but that happens to the best of us on draft one. At some point you could take a read through and try to catch most of them, and I'll bet it will fix almost everything. Thanks for sharing this, and welcome to Storywrite!

  • Hello DecoDog, welcome to Storywrite and thanks for sharing this interesting tale of werewolves and vampires and what I believe to be ‘Heroes’ .

    My experience in reading never writing Fanfiction is limited. Still, I found your plot captivating and not difficult to follow .

    Great job on dialogue, and the action is visiable.

    A few things you might consider on the next draft . This is a rather long first chapter . Believe me I never judge on length and its just my humble suggestion, but you really could present this as several chapters because of the time and activity switches.

    Also when you get ready to market, you will need to make paragraph and line breaks more obvious. They have pretty much disappeared in this text.

    Best of luck in the contest.

    Geri (Greeter)


  • PixieDrug
    March 28

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    i like it alot, it's well done. but you neeeed some paragraphs in here! big time. for example when some one talks you need a new paragraph, unless it's the narrator. some typos too. you need to re read it slowly.

    Laurant needs a cap L

    yeah, you really really need to sort out the conversations, it looks like one person is saying it all.

    yes i would like to read more though. don't think i could though unless you put in paragraphs! you have no idea how vital they are to a peice of writing!!


  • Firestar-
    March 28

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    Well....I havn't read Twilight yet... it sounds COOL! I so want to read on. Updare the next chapter soon!
    -Firestar-

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