Dear Mom,1
I'm sorry you have been so hurt in your life. I wish I could take it all away. If I could make one wish..... I would make it all better. 2
I am sorry your family hurt you.. disowned you more than once. I am sorry that everyone you around lets you down. I promise not to let you down. I'll be here for you when the whole world seems to fall down.3
When Hairy and Todd hurt you.. I was there.. I may not have undestood but I cared. I saw mommy hurt..and I hurt too. I wanted to come come up and hug you. I wanted to give you kisses and make you smile again. And when you finally did.. I felt the sun came out and decided to shine again.4
When Brian beat you.. I was there.. even when Kimmy lived with Vickey and Jesse lived with Carol and Michael and Lucas lived with Dad... I hurt too. I wanted to help you.. but I didn't know how. As I got older I told Brian to shut up or I'd call the police..but you wouldn't let me.. that hurt. I just wanted to protect you.. I just wanted to let you know how much I cared. I am glad that you got away.5
When Norm came.. I thought that it was a little too soon. But thats okay.. Norm seemed to make your problems go away. Hes nice to me and he loves so.. I can't sleep peacly you know.6
I wrote this letter to you..to show you how much I care.. and I wanted to let you know.. when you hurt..i hurt too.. 7
GOD LOVES YOU MOMMY8
Author notes
I wrote this for my mom.. I've seen her hurt so much... and I hurt too....I wanted to show her.. that no matter what she does or did.. i will be there.. MOM I'M ALWAYS THERE FOR YOU!
What did you think? Please comment!
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hey
thank you so much for this beautiful comment. I was feeling really sad when I wrote this. But I'm much better now. I'm glad that you liked it. And my mom means the world to me. I only love one person better and that's God.
God Bless
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This is a beautiful letter. i loved it so much. i could really relte to what you felt for your mom. i know how much it hurts to see someone you care about hurting and theres nothing you can do about it. espically if its your mom.
i wish you and your mom the best. may you be blessed in everythign that you do.
*waves and rides away on a black panther*
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beautiful
This is so beautiful, it almost brought me to tears! I'm sorry you've had to witness your mother get hurt, it must be terrible to love someone yet feel so helpless when it comes to saving them. Your mom should be very proud to have a child who writes such amazing letters for her. I really do think this is amazing, and the slight spelling and grammar mistakes show the purity and overwhelming love you have for her. Very well done!
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Thank you so much! You just put a big smile upon my face this morning!! I love helping my mom. And I try not to be bitter or upset about my past. Some days it's harder than others..but God helps me through.
God Bless
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Thank you so very much for that comment. I really appreciated it. He was being very mean to me. And I know it took me FOREVER to reply back to this comment..but with all the enteries to my contest and all the system messages I get each day piled on top of all the Im's .. I'm pretty busy.
God Bless
~Ashley~
but I would still love to chat
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JohnJohn,
Thank you for taking the time to read this. It means a lot to me. I am sorry to hear about you and your brother. And I do know that I need to tell my family I love them as much as possible. Cause they can go away. Why don't you write him in Jail? I know that when my brother was in jail he really appreciated letters. I bet your brother would too.
I am glad that you liked this. And I'm glad that it got you thinking. That means that it was at least sort of good. ..
I hope all goes well with you and your brother.
God Bless
~Ashley~
If you wanna chat sometime..I'm here
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Really really beautiful
Oh wow. I can relate to this for my mom has been hurt alot too. And shes the only left person left in the family that I can trust. My family is a mess. Its not even considered a family...i think. Its gotten to the point where we dont trust each other and its everyone for themselves. Except my mom has always been there for my brothers and me. Even if most of us still dont notice all the efforts she has made for us to be better persons. I wrote a letter to my brother but I never got to give it to him since he got sent to jail. It pretty much said that I was sorry for not talking to him for 2 years but I had my reasons and he had his. But its a little to late now since hes gonna be gone for a while and I didnt get to apologize for a grudge that I know he will keep for an even longer time. All I know is that you should tell your loved ones how much you love them before its too late. Really beautiful, you got me thinking. -
Jill,
Thank you for reading this and commmenting on it. I really appreciate you telling me that my Mom is lucky. But it is actually I that is the lucky one. I have such a great mom who has done what she could to care for us and provide food and shelter. And she's always succeeded. I'm glad that you like my poetry. I like yours.
God bless
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Very touching. Your mom is really lucky to have a daugther like you. I enjoy reading you poetry. Keep up the good work.
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oh yes....
any 'adult' who wants to pick a 15 year old apart for their writing and do so in such a mean hearted way is truly sad and unfortunate. you have treated the matter with more maturity than he has... good for you dear. -
you have a sweet heart and don't ever let anyone change that. obviously your problems have not made you mean or bitter and you sound like you have helped your mother through her hurts and pain. she is lucky to have a daughter who is so caring.
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Thank you very much. I really liked your comment. And yes.. I was writing type 1 writing..but I didn't know it. I wasn't trying to make all the right punctuation..I was just trying to get a point across.
God let my mom go through that to wake her up. Tell her that he was there. And that if she would just listen to him that he would make things better. And he has. > <
God Bless
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First off I suggest deleting horus8's comments. Your writing reminds me of type1 writing in english class. For those of you who dont know what type1 is, its a style where you just write down thoughts and emotions. Punctuation is not needed as long as the point gets across. Horus8 you must be very lonley to have posted 5 times. This shows that you checked back on the poem many times to see what effect your little speal would have on the author. Ashley, do not take what he says seriously. Alright I got that out of the way. Your story was just awesome except for one little thing. The little, "GOD LOVES YOU MOMMY," at the end. Throughout the entire story it was you who stood by your mothers side. It was you who loved your mother to the end. It was you who felt her pain. If god felt that pain, dont you think he would have stopped it? Do not give god any credit for what you have done. This story is wonderful and heartfelt. I liked every word except for the last part! Great job!
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Of course they do
They're sucking down so much Jesus
and tv trailer park dinners daily
that their writing is as laced
with improper grammar and shotty
backwood's english as your's.
I would really get some tutoring
If I were you because "I can't sleep peacly you know."
Anyone that told you "peacly" was a word should
be shot off to Uranus in a welded shut capsule.
Good LUCK! By the way, spell check is there for a reason
not to hang your asshat on, but to push, unlike God
that has no button, but a lever and a drop hatch.
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I would learn alot more from God than any one on this EARTH OR ENTIRE UNIVERSE WOULD WITH YOU! YOu should be grounded and sent to bed..not me. I am much wiser that you are. You may be better at gammer and stuff..but that is ok.. I've got God...
God Bless
~Ashley~
I would appreciate it if you wouldn't leave me any more comments on my poems.. I don't need your advice..I have God and my AP family and my real family.
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And no, actually, may God be with you, and while you're with him?
Learn how to write, that way when a teacher gives you good advice,
you can shut the hell up, respect your elders, and take the advice
without acting like a whiny evangelical trailer park brat.
Example (your style) Most people develop a style after learning
how to use BASIC grammar, in your letter you use two dot ellipses '..'
and four dots "...." What the F is that? There is no such thing, it's three dots and it's used to show an abrupt ending ( a unfinished sentence) or a clipped off beginning to a sentence. Then, to really kill the mule for no reason, you are using them like commas? But what is 'them' because they're not even ellipses'! It boggles the fricking mind. Oh and then! You use exclamation points as question marks, and vice versa. The entire letter is an unimaginative run on sentence. You begin it incorrectly, and end it incorrectly, and I'm just getting started... See that?
That's an ellipses. Now, I suggest you learn to respect your elders missy, and say thank you to me with a curtsy, savvy? Or I'll turn you in to the heaven police and have your ticket voided for asking me to read your letter, bugging me actually, and than having the catty nerve to tell me I'm wrong? For what? Helping you? Little brat.
Now, hold my hand, and let's pray. "Dear lord blah blah, blah blah blah blah blah?"
You should be grounded, and sent to bed.
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Well, you have the 'style' of a highschool dropout high on crack floating down the sewer of autrocious scribbling on a leaking inner-tube, and your school? Should consider an over haul, over self destruction, because if you're getting A's in English? America's future is DOOMED. I'm not being cold hearted, asw a teacher of writing I'm seriously telling you, you can't write, at least not yet, and because of that, because I can't get into your writing becuase your 'style' makes it unbearable?
I end up just not caring about what your saying, does that make sense, and if it doesn't? My advice would be, go live in church, be a nun, and good riddance.
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WHAT! EXCUSE ME! That was really wrong Jeremi!! I would rather spend all my time in Church than in English. And I do know how to do a correct sentence and use correct puncuation..but I didn't want to. That why it is called MY STYLE... and you may not like my style but that is ok... and if you don't like that..then I suggest you not read my poems! Not to be mean and all, but that was a little bit insulting. I am an A student in school. I get A's in english and I get A's on the poems I turn in! So there.. I did her style..this was my style.....
And a very educated person would understand this. But you don't seem to care about that.
I don't know why you decided to be so cold hearted when I put my heart down on paper. I guess that is because something must have happened to you in life. But just because your unhappy doesn't mean that you have to be mean to me Jeremi.
May God be with you Jeremi..he loves you and so do i!
God Bless
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THANK YOU!
You are right..I don care for my mom/moms!
I love her very much I do care about if she's happy or not.
I am proud to have you two as my MOm's...Im very blessed >
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First off, you need to learn what an ellipses is (those things with three dots "...") and how to properly use them. I suggest starting there. Secondly, your grammar needs to greatly improve, you don't know how to write a correct sentence, use a comma, punctuate, start a proper letter, or form a paragraph. Therefore, what happens is an educated reader cannot get through this because there are over 50 mistakes in the first half alone. If you turned this in, in say school? You'd get an F, regardless of how 'personal' the content is. Example, just because you write a story about a friend that died of suicide, and it's VERY personal to you does not mean anyone else will give a crap, especially if your grammar is this poor. I suggest spending less time in church, and more time in English class.
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Thank you so much. And you are right. It is happy..but it is also sad. It is happy because I am telling my Mom that I will be there for her no matter what..but its sad because she hurts. But thank you for taking the time to read this and comment on this
It means a lot to me
God Bless
~Ashley~
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww thats soooooooo .....happy, i dont find it sad at all, i think that this is a write that is telling ur mom that u love her and that u would be there through thick and thin, and most teens like us never say that to our mothers untill we have kids of our own. this was really good kkep it up.
Edited on Jun 24, 1:39 p.m. because 'our is not spelled like out
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WONDERFUL
Wow Ashley your mom 's life sounds like my first marriage. She is so lucky to have a daughter like you there for her. I could feel how much you hurt for her and how much you love her. I am sure she will cry if and when she read this amazing letter. May God keep blessing you and your family. Love Mom
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Don't call me Baby sis..call me sis..I'M NOT THAT MUCH YOUNGER THAN YOU ...FREAK.. thank you for taking the time to read this Dez..and I know that you and Airel will always be there for me.. I wasn't gonna call around 1 in the morning just to tell you I was sad.. I have God.. I can call him at 1 in the morning.. no offense.. He doesn't sleep .. I think..
Thanks sis for taking the time to read this...
love y a
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i have never ever seen you cry ash....i'm sorry....it's a really good letter...did u show ur mom? i bet she cried i love you soooooo much ash...me and ariel both and we will always be here for you...just call ....i love you baby sis
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thanks .. I dont' think I'm a caring person.. look at my comment to SeanJ! I was in a bad mood and he didn't help.. But I appologized..... I didn't mean to be mean..
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please forgive me for being so mean.. I was upset and hurt.. and I wasn't in a good mood..it is my turn to appologize... I didn't mean to be rude..
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This one's very sad you sound like a very careing person
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Ohhh, it was from storywrite! Man, am I an asshole!
As for as not being compassionate...I have the utmost compassion. But if it's going to be in some sort of literary form, then quality counts first.
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WHAT!! It isn't a poem.. its a story/letter! Duh even a baby can figure that out! I really didn't appreciate that. It came from the bottom of my heart..but you don't care.. I lived throught this..but you know what.. I am sorry that you are so mean.. because you never know.. I could have been your new best friend.. May God be with you SeanJ.. we all know you need it!.. ps.. Jesus loves you and so do I..
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Prose with....wait, there aren't even in linebreaks. Just a bunch of useless elipses....huh....
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I want to thank you for reading this.. .. I was crying while I wrote this. As you can tell I feel really strongly for my mom. She is the only one besides God who has been there all of my life. She means the world to me. I am sorry that you and your mom were molested by the same person... thanks I'm glad you liked it..
God Bless
~Ashley~
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wow-- that... gave me chills. i can relate completely to this one. i have seen her go through a lot and she made several efforts to help me. i hurt her, i regret it... but we also share a common memory that we didn't know until 9 years after the last time... we were molested by the same person. i know this is a little blunt to be putting as a comment everyone can see but my point in saying this is sometimes people really do know how you feel, sometimes all too well. give mom a chance. i love mine. awesome write.
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