Chapter I – III Carceres1
“...Well I…no.” she answered looking down to her plate, her eyes looked sad, something new to Ethan, hell everything was new to him! He had known this beauty less than two hours and had practically asked her out, what an arse.2
“Hey I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to upset you.” He reached over the table and took her hand, her skin was so soft, and stroked it as she looked back up at him. Her eyes were pleading and saddened, tears were welling up. ‘What a dick.’ She took her hand away and wiped her eyes.3
“I’m ok really,” she sniffed and composed herself, “do you need showing back to your dorm?” she asked pasting a believable yet fake smile on her soft, pink lips. She stood up and picked up her bag. Ethan felt like a real bastard, but how was he to know how she felt? Didn’t stop him hurting for her. ‘ Why doesn’t he love me?’4
“Excuse me?” He said confused at the question, ‘Why would she ask me that?’ A glint came to her eye, and she smiled genuinely.5
“I said would you like me to show you back to your dorm?” She giggled slightly.6
“Yes I would but I don’t mean that,” he said more confused, “Why doesn’t who love you?” Her eyes went wide and she looked at him, “I didn’t say anything…like that…” she trailed off. Ethan was confused and a little worried; strange how she could affect him so much he started hearing her voice everywhere.7
“Sorry I must be hearing things, that was weird.” He shook his head like he was dazed. Looking back up into Samantha’s eyes he got up.8
“Yeah I guess...” She said sceptically. They walked back down the many hallways and corridors to Ethan’s dorm, when they reached the door he turned to Samantha, he looked into her deep green eyes.9
“Sorry I freaked out before and…” he paused and continued speaking, “I’m sorry I upset you.” He looked deeper into her eyes, ‘Why doesn’t he love me?’ He recoiled and stood stunned for a moment.10
“It’s ok, I just was…remembering.” She said, “I’ll see you in class tomorrow.” With that and a smile Samantha departed to her own dormitory. Ethan stood stunned, rooted to the spot. ‘I got to take a shower or something I’m going’ crazy.’ He turned and tried to shake the weird feelings he was having about Samantha. He opened the door to the dorm and walked in scratching the back of his head, he walked over to his bag and grabbed a black towel. He was halfway to the door of the bathroom when he noticed another person in the dorm. An inkbottle-black haired teen around the same age as him sat on the bed next to his own, the drapes half closed explaining why he had not seen him, listening to an I-Pod he looked up as Ethan crossed. 11
He nodded and Ethan gave a salute and nodded back, he continued on to have his shower. ‘And the distance between us seems to grow...’ He looked back at the boy he was looking at the screen of his I-Pod. Silent. ‘Oh fuck me.’ He thought and hurried into the bathroom and locked the door.12
Ethan leant back against the door and held out his hand, it was shaking. Violently. He turned on the shower and let it heat up as he took off his cloths. He pulled his black T-Shirt over his head, revealing a toned chest and abdomen. It was still cold in the bathroom and goose pimples rippled across his toned flesh causing him to shiver. He had a tattoo on his left shoulder blade, one angelic wing. 13
Ethan stretched out and popped his back a few times, tensing and relax his muscles. Steam started to pour out of the top of the shower. He ran his hand through his straight, muddy-blond hair and undid the thick black belt holding up his baggy jeans, taking it off he dropped it on top of his T-Shirt. He bent down and undid his boots, his toned arms flexing, and kicked them off onto the mounting pile of clothing. He took down his jeans and boxers, he shivered even more the window was open. Walking over to the window he closed it and got into the shower. Ethan let the hot water de-tense his muscles and sooth his soul, just like the rain, he let all of the worries from his world escape him. No voices, no people, no nothing. Peace.14
Author notes
ok ok i know it took a while but here it is part 3 
enjoy it there will be more!!! and dont worry im scene setting things are gnna pick up soon i promis !!!
HNB
Rae V
PS!! edited part two f you go back its much better i did it befor one !!!
RYTE with some editing i think it reads better lol after readin it it was shodddy sooo many errors and misplaced words lol o well im not perfect
R&R PPL!!
Rae V
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Thought i would comment here but i have read all parts to your write. Great characters building up here...lots of questions hanging which is always a good thing for me. I like it a lot, and am looking forward to reading more. SHall be adding you to my favourites also if that is ok?
Is Ethan toned by the way...LOL
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Oooooh! Getting REALLY addictive now!! Can't wait to find out more!! write more write more write more!! *pouts*
One love,
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Damnit....what about this black haired guy with the Ipod - he's not by any chance, devilishly good-looking with an equally appealing bank balance is he?
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A lot. about as many as i did! he is toned what can i say??
Rae V
BTW Ethan has been promised to Platinum Stiches
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Sjeesh...how many times can you say "toned" in once paragraph! V good though - now i AM addicted to another story sigh.....i feel so weak. Dont make us wait so long for the next one
ShOrTaSs
P.S - more shower scenes would be most appreciated
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Thanx sis like i say its getting going now!!
Rae V
HNB -
R&R? someones been on fanfiction too much! lol, nice write this was really good i can tell i'm really going to enjoy this story, can't wait for the next bit! l8az love ur lil sis sky xxxxxx
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LOL sok my wingedlychallanged friend i had lodsa ppl tellin me spelling errors ect so dont stress im glad you liek it
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LOL im glad you like it but what did u mean with " it doesn't rya nd ge the plot over" the rya nd ?? lol thanx and there will be more, this chapter looked a lot longer on word lol
Rae V -
hey cool write me is too tired to see if there were any spelling errors but I'm guessing there wasn't as these lot ^^^^^ will have got 'em by now. speak soon xxx
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Excellent write am really into this story now, I don't know, this story is not cheesy liek some of the others I've read, and it doesn't rya nd ge the plot over too quickly, I love it! Can't wait for the next chapter.
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LOL np sis you can do what you will, the whole shower scene was basically written for the gals out ther (and guys ) who like sexy men and i tried to convey how he was but subtly i wen a bit overboard but hey wht can i say
HNB
Rae V -
Okay, you can have Laramie if I can Ethan. Boy sound fine! lol. And I always get Rik (from Kaz's story) and my real life husband, famous rock star Jay Gordon. Damn, I'm going to have tonight! haha.
Great story bro, I can't wait for more!
HNB
Always and Forever,
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Aww thanx hun im glad you like it so
and ill edit that asap lol silly me lol
Rae V -
Great part 3 hun,one thing I noticed
"He turned on the shower and let it heat up s he took off his cloths. "
That should be.. He turned on the shower and let it heat up AS he took off his cloths,,,,right?
Other then that, I founf it wonderful
sweet, cute, funny, through provoking, Yeah I want more, you may be my picture junkie, But I'm your story junkie. I loved this, Its only getting more intresting, You have kept me clinging for 3 whole chapters, and I read through it all no pauses, pretty impressive, Now why couldnt the docs grab my attention like that. This was great , cant wait for a part 4, Im all out of applaud.............................................ah hell I'll spare the points -
I love critisism thats constructive ill look into it, any particular blackspots i should know about? i did notice i was typing his name an awfull lot lol
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This was pretty good except you need to watch out how many times you use Ethans name At the beggining of your sentences, also there are some places were you should have put Ethan's name but instead put HE--Other than that this was nice. I told you this stuff but not to be a jerk I hope you use my critisizm.
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