Tell me, am I wrong about love
Or does love have no clue who I am?
On a cynical note, I've always known
I can have it, if I let it happen1
I turned and found that
I never needed a pill to see
What they meant by alternative reality2
In idealistic fashion I found that
Dull shades flash gold to strangers
And lonely bus stops hold love for
Those in search of ominous answers3
Lies have always meant more to me
At least they've always been honest
About the extent of their dishonesty
To me, that's a straightforward mentality4
In time I learned the folly
Of lean muscular grace
And of flashing brown eyes
From an imploringly attractive face
Trust comes in 4 forms
But for each comes 4 more ways to break it
Intimacy is an unstable, demanding lover
And sometimes, it's simpler to forsake it5
Then I felt the call
Of the forbidden fruit
Temptation makes a cozy fall
The reasons I couldn't
Meant nothing at all
Colored smoke was a smile
Decorating an unintentionally
Sultry expression on
The unobtainable's face6
Lastly, I saw the devastation
Of intrigue on a searching heart
As instant attraction took over
Accounting for only a little part
Is admiring from afar worth
The heartaches and stomach twists
When you finally realize that
The object of your affections
Never even knew that you exist?7
Is love a real concept
Something you can understand
And more importantly, get?
Does it lie in denial,
Is love a sculpted form
Attraction based on style,
Can you ever love that which
You know you could never have,
Or somebody who you've never
Really even known?8
How do you even know that you exist?
I'll wonder forever if I'm really here,
Writing this anthem of self-realization,
And I'll wonder how anyone could love another
When we can barely even love ourselves
If we're even here at all9
If we disbelieve the cliff,
We discredit the fall
And the fatal aftermath
That never really happens anyways.
Author notes
This is a prewrite of mine off of Allpoetry.com
A contest entry
- Broken Hearted Poetry by Hope4TheBest.
175 points, ended March 22, 8 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ah, crap
That was way better than I expected.
Please don't take that as an insult.
It was beautiful, haunting.
I actually do believe in love, but I thought the last stanza was devastatingly fantastic.
Great job!
--Sarah
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Whoah
This was absolutely amazing. The wording, the detail, everything was just so beautifully expressed and the flow was so captivating. This poem was very deep and was made me think. Well done. Keep it up. 
~*Princess*~
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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A very deep and meaningful write. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest~
~Sparrow ♥
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NIIIIIIIIIIICCCCCCCEEEEEEEE! Keep up the awesome writing works!
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Noooooiiiiice. Oh, I thoroughly enjoyed that.
Read like a rhyming speech spoken between chums for some reason. Came together really nicely.
I feel your pain, and your ideals are spot on. Sadly, no one really wants the answer until they've felt the edges of such shiney steel begin to cut into their torso. I see you went down that route as well.
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Well I think everyone's been down that route, but this particular 'piece' is really more of a compilation of bad love stories and disappointments lol.
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Tis very awesome and things many of us think and can relate to but you put it so bloody well. I am very impressed mate.
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Thank you! This was actually kind of a.. compilation about various people I really liked over a couple of years.
'In idealistic fashion I found that
Dull shades flash gold to strangers
And lonely bus stops hold love for
Those in search of ominous answers'
This part was actually about the same guy I wrote that sentence about for you . -
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Ahhhh no fooling? A really great piece.
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i really liked this
and the godly backround of it
its very well written
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Thanks for the comment, I think the background colors were chosen at complete random, but glad it all worked nicely haha
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