robbins and lost souls and robbins

And there he was standing, looking himself through a side mirror of a car1

Addressing to his face as he was a stranger, for he was a stranger indeed 2

                                 some of them are living the sky 3

                                       some of them the sea 4

                                      some of them are them 5

                                 and some of them are cameleons 6

He walked down the ugly road, which reflected exactly his personality7

With his ears down and his hart divided8

Searching for him9

                                    you can hide behind a tree   10

                                 you can hide behind a character11

                          you can  hide behind a personality stronger12

                             but, for God, you can't hide from him 13

He found a robbin14

The robbin took him to its nest15

There he met with poetry16

And with music17

But for all we know, well we don't 18

Because we couldn't understand his sayings19

But he was whispering with fear20

Trying to warn us, to save us21

                                  humanity is something fragile 22

                           was something fragile for it has broken 23

                      but from the recollected glasses there are some24

                            who understand the voice of the robbin 25

 In the nest he found him26

He was the man whose footsteps on the dirt made him come this far27

He was him28

And both of them were trying to warn us, to save us 29

Author notes

hope you got the cameleon...

A contest entry

after reading this take a bath and go to this nest.

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  • Rorshach gold member
    March 24

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    Good first effort

    I particularly admired lines 22 and 23.
    It's weird reading it as you've made it all wonky.
    Makes you feel like you are dizzy or had 1 too many pints.


  • Gothick Girl
    March 24
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    Whoo!

    I really like it. Really! You're srsly a good writer! Write more!


  • SAVAGEshark.
    March 23

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    nice poem stevenski,I really enjoyed the ending,'...trying to warn us,to save us.'I liked that part.

  • stevenaski
    March 22
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    why sould i make a comment to myself