.....we wouldn't be friends

If i1

treated2

you3

the way4

you treat 5

me...6

We wouldn't be friends7

If i8

said to9

you10

the things11

you say12

to13

me...14

We wouldn't be friends15

If i16

used 17

you18

the way19

you use20

me...21

We wouldn't be friends22

If i23

played24

with25

you26

the way27

you play28

with29

me...30

We wouldn't be friends31

If i 32

wasnt so33

god damn34

fucking35

passive...36

We wouldn't be friends37

If i38

didn't39

have such40

a soft41

spot for42

you...43

We wouldn't be friends44

***45

But i 46

dont 47

treat 48

you49

the way50

you treat51

me...52

And i 53

dont say54

to55

you56

the things57

you say58

to59

me...60

And i61

dont62

use63

you64

the way65

you use66

me...67

And i68

dont play69

with70

you71

the way 72

you play73

with74

me...75

And i 76

am too77

god damn78

fucking79

passive...80

And i81

do have82

a soft83

spot84

for85

you...86

I just might not stay that way....87

Author notes

Hmmm...what i felt at the time....i have no doubt it'll go unnoticed..but whats not why i 'wrote' it.  Writing down what you feel has a way of taking all the anger out of a situation..well atleast it worked this time.

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  • Sin Heart Tom
    April 9, 2006
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    OOH HONEST

    totally know how you feel. i used to feel that way all the time and then i told everyone to fuck off. haha. ok. it's not the most constructive way to go about things but DAMN it feels so good sometimes.

    Writing is quite theraputic. I liked how the beginning directly contrasts with the end. thanks for sharing


    -SiN

  • teh shortass
    June 23, 2005
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    Thanks all - yeah venting on they keyboard is goooooood

    ShOrTaSs

  • Musical Anomaly
    June 23, 2005
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    I know the feeling. Very well. And I think I know who it's about. I agree- writing is a good way of letting it all out. This is a good poem, keep writing


  • Angelwithoutwings
    June 23, 2005
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    youch what gives?! cool poem speak soon xxx

  • exzimbo
    June 23, 2005
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    Really nice write, really liked it, it really does help just to write down your feelings, just to vent your frustraition, it really helps me. Keep them coming. xxx


  • sky black
    June 22, 2005
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    oouch babe, hope your ok guessing tis about a guy, im here ok? i know you've probably got loads of people saying to you right about now, but c'mon the man-eater (thats moi!) knows all about men! scary thought, huh? anyway, nice write babe, loved it! def your best one yet! l8az love ya sky xxxxxxx

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