"One Last Breath"

She walked by the lovely meadow smelling the wonderful flowers. As she slowly lifts her head to look up at the sky, it suddenly turns dark and gloomy. She knows what comes and she shudders, under her breath she whispers,"Thier coming". As she runs back to the house,SHe runs into one thing, It was tall and dark, It had the most wanting eyes and the longest most darkest hands youve ever seen. As the hands come out reaching she screams and crawls away. She's never had this feeling before The lonliest feeling like no ones there. She walks into the house very cautiously and suspisiosly. She walks into the living room and stumbles apon her dead parents bodies,she screams and cries while slowly falling onto the floor. She stops knowing she has to pull herself together as she wipes her eyes, She see's the figure standing outside. She slowly gets up and climbs the stairs to her room. Opening the door as it creaks,she looks over at her bed, and there lies her dead dog, Chief, thier loving and playful German Shepard. And next to Chief is her youngest brother, Jake, tied to the bed posts. She clasps her hands over her mouth and starts to cry again. Then she hears footsteps so she runs into her closet, She looks thru the holes of the closet door and sees the figure again, She clasps her hands over her mouth again to silent her heavy breathing. She closes her eyes as the closet door opens and lets out one last breath!....1

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Just came to me...Kind of a vision i keep seeing in my dreams! hope you all enjoy.

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  • Tessa Cullen.
    July 27, 2005
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    Sad, but good. Keep it up. I love the story!


  • June 30, 2005
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    I like this, well written, I wanna see some more chapters.


  • June 22, 2005
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    whoa, this is really incredible... i usually don't enjoy the stories on here as much, but that was amazing. you used great descriptions and told a very haunting story. anywho, awesome write, so keep writing, and have a nice day

  • She Hides Her Pain
    June 22, 2005
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    Jessica,

    This was really good. I like it. It was well written.

  • may13056
    June 22, 2005
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    Wow, this is really good, i like how u write. good job keep it up! thanks for the compliment!

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