Raw, satisfying dance.
It keeps me alive.
Nothing keeps me going
But dance.1
It starts
in the heart.
The steady beat
Boom, boom.
Boom, boom.2
Harsh, obliging dance.
Not a single person,
one single thing
Or even a group of people
who adore me
can make me forget
like dance does.3
Rumba’s in the lungs
Two three four, one.
Two three four, one.
Two three four, one.
Two three four, one.4
Acrid, gentle dance
I am my own being.
Worries flow away
with each step.5
Back though
the steady beat
of the Paso Doble
in my heart.
Boom, boom.
Boom, boom.6
Cynical, engaging dance.
The world left far behind
as I twirl and spin.
Nobody can touch me
when I dance.7
It quicksteps
Down and up
the left arm
Slow quick quick.
Slow, slow quick quick.
Slow, slow quick quick.8
Vicious, dulcet dance
is what I live for.
It keeps me sane.9
Viennese Waltz’s
through my chest.
One two three.
One two three.
One two three.10
But when I stop…11
Nasty, amiable dance
tugs and weighs
heavily on my heart.
Pulls me down
much, much farther
than everything else.12
Tango’s down my spine
Slow, slow, quick quick.
Slow, slow, quick quick.
Slow.13
Angry, pleasing dance
brings me
fathoms farther
than what anything else
sends me to;
or can send me to.14
Cha cha’s in my right leg
Two three four and one.
Two three four and one.
Two three four and one.15
Cutting, rewarding dance,
takes me
down to the deepest
depths of black.16
Jives in my left leg
One two, one a two
One a two, one two.
One two, one a two
One a two, one two.17
Acidic, lovable dance
leaves me
where I know
That I can never be
enough.
Never, live up to
expectations.
Never be
what “they” are.18
Samba’s though my left arm
One a two, one a two.
One a two, one a two.
One a two, one a two.19
Resentful, saccharine dance.
I am nothing with out it.
Alone when I do it,
despite my partner’s
ever daunting presence.20
Foxtrot’s around my neck
Slow, quick quick.
Slow, quick quick.
Slow, quick quck.
Slow.21
Pungent, melodic dance.
I can leave the world behind,
as I sway in time.
But, I am always let down
when I finish.22
Waltz’s in my brain.
One, two three.
One, two three.
One, two three.
One, two three.23
Bitter, sweet dance
is my lifeblood,
its taste is that of
freedom.
Author notes
tonialoise - this may not be what you are looking for but it does have technically someone in disguise and there is desire. So for me it fits but maybe its not what you are looking for. I thought I would give it a shot anyway. No harm in trying right? 
poetry is soul - I chose the song Closer by Ne Yo. Its a great dancing song. Course it doesn't work for any of the dances I mentioned in my work but still. 
p.s. NIKKO HAS SYPHILIS!!
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Comments
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Wow.
You actually made your words flow like dance. it had a steady, rythmic beat the entire way through-really well done. You clearly have an unrequitted love of dance and it's good to see some of that passion shown through your work. Thanx for the read.
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I loved it. You made lots of detail in it and you said it with feelings. It expresses out you you have a strong passion for dancing and stuff like that. great job.
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This was written very well. It was different than what most people write about (in a good way) I cannot stand all the "I hate my life...omg I hate everything" or "LOVE LOVE LOVE!" crap....This was a nice change
and a very enjoyable read
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this totally works for closer... you can dance a number of those danced to closer... you just gotta slow the dance bit. i really liked the imagery in this poem. it was really good. and you know... it felt like i was that person. this was really good.
Acrid, gentle dance
I am my own being.
Worries flow away
with each step.
this was my favorite verse... very well discribed. great job!
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Hehe!! *grin*
OMG!!! I REALLY LIKE THIS POEM YOU HAVE!!! ^^ lol it's sooooooooooooooo cute hehe and it's very good keep it up and keep on writing!!
Sky♥ -
...did you get a song prompt from me??
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I agree with tonialoise, I didn't see the disguise very much the first time around, but rather an intense love for the dance which I found contrasting to some of the adjectives you chose to use. As I look back, though, I can see it perhaps lightly hinted at.
A very interesting piece; you can almost feel the rhythm of the dance as you read.
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Interesting
I have danced pretty much all those dances! I didn't always understand the relationships between the words you used and then the following (or even the previous) dance steps mentioned and why there was for example, "Pungent" or "Resentful, saccharine dance" or "Harsh, obliging dance" or "Acidic, lovable dance." It all leaves me feeling kind of torn how you feel about dance in general, but maybe that was the hinting at the disguise and the conflict of emotions one has while involved in ballroom dance, loving the act of dancing but the misery it brings as well is something I am all too familiar with, though maybe not in the same way you are.
Another thing that confused me is why each dance step is "in" a different part of your body...? Like "Jives in my left leg"... Maybe I just ask too many questions and I'm too curious about things. LOL
Overall, I thought it was a great piece relating dance steps and rhythms and feelings and emotions all in one and tying all the different dances together into one piece like this. I think the Tango is a dance of love if I remember correctly--passionate between lovers, etc. It always pissed me off the boys I had to dance with were never inclined to feel that way towards me, even when we did dance the Tango together. Hahahah! Keep on writing, because if this piece holds value and meaning for YOU, despite all its mystery and subtle meanings that only you know the true meaning of. I believe writing is more for ones' self than anything else.
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Interesting poem, could almost feel the beat. Now I definitely see the desire, but disguise...? Hmmm... help me out here...
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I guess the disguise is more apparent to me. I didn't really write it in the poem. But hinted at it I guess you could say. Dance to me has always been a wonderful thing I never saw the downside to dance. Not untill I took a step back from it. It was always what made me happy. It never occured to me that it could be the same thing that brings me such bliss can bring along with it such misery. So the disguise comes in for dance in real life for me not really in the poem. I didn't exactly say all that, so it's not as apparent.
Thanks for the comment though. Great contest by the way!
Elli -
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Interesting way to look at it. Yeah, you didn't bring that out in the poem so much. When I read it the first time I saw only a great love for dance, nothing that would bring misery. As I reread it, I see a few words (angry, resentful, bitter) that do bring that out, but before I attributed those words to the dance themselves. You know like the tango; one puts a lot of emotion into it and usually harsh emotions. That's the thing about poems though, they can be interpreted in so many different ways.
I do like subtility though, so nice job.
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