Just another love gone by


Were you really so blind and unkind
I know you don’t mean to be, mean to me
But lately nothing I do, ever seems to please you
“What did you do, what did you say!”
So I spend all my time waiting for
Night1


With a hot sun beating down
As the playground school bell rings again
I am not a child now; I can take care of myself
All I want is your understanding2


I’m telling myself so I’ll know;
I don’t need you to love me
But when will my reflection show who I am inside?
I’m holding on your rope and you’ve got me ten feet off the ground3


Well, now he’s back in the atmosphere with drops of Jupiter in his ear
Two weeks after the day I turned eighteen
I remember you, do you remember me too
Hands touch eyes meet. Sudden silence, sudden heat
Every time we’re together4


Then all that fades
I am only nine years old
I’m sitting on my doorstep
You look at me, I fake a smile so you won’t see
I hear a voice in my mind
Whispering
All that’s known5

Author notes

I went for a sadder theme hear. I have actually a note book full of poems like this, not well organize but fitting to this category. Hope you liked it!

let us see this is the list of songs in order of their place in the poem: (song, Artist/Show)

Left Behind, Spring Awakening; You won't, Carrie Underwood; Just Can't Live a Lie, Carrie Underwood; Smile, Gnarles Barkley; In the Arms of the Angels, Sarah McLaughlin; He Lives in You, Lion King; I can't Dance, Genesis; Hello, Evenessence; I Try, Return to Neverland; Just A Thought, Gnarles Barkley; Blue Moon, Nicole Mullins; I'm Here (Reprise), Color Purple; Reflection, Mulan; Apologize, One Republic; Just a Dream, Carrie Underwood; Everything, Steroefuse; Not That Girl, Wicked; Just Another Day, Jon Seceda; Song of Purple Summer, Spring Awakening; Starts With Good-bye, Carrie Underwood; Teardrops on My Guitar, Taylor Swift; How Do You Talk to an Angel, The Heights; Whispering; Spring Awakening; All That's Known, Spring Awakening;

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Comments


  • VioletConcept
    March 29

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    Wowwy. Loved this Moxy! Better than I could've done, that fer sure.


  • Lachrymose.
    March 19

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    Hmm... I think that it's good but that it is a little... unfocused. I think that the message you're trying to say with it isn't as well conveyed as it could have been and that the lyrics don't all fit together to form one central idea. I think you should edit it and maybe take out some of the lyrics and add some others.


  • Someday Hero. gold member
    March 18
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    *bow* Don't know if that'll work. Either way..I loved this.