Micheal and I: We were friends for a while, actually a pretty long time... Always making each other laugh and smile! It was just what we did! Our personalities matched perfectly together. We were great friends! but deep down though, I always wished that he would just ask me the question just to try it out...ya know? Everyone wants to try things with most of their friends of the "opposite gender." Okay, so I guess there always was something there, but it became so real the night he finally asked me... 1
I had made my status on yahoo so many hinting things it wasn't even funny! All I wanted was for him to finally ask me. I hoped that he would ask me that night, but then... maybe I hoped to much and cursed it. "Oh my god," I thought, "where is Randi? She would just tell him to ask me! WHERE IS SHE!" She was my best friend, at that time and knew how much I wanted to try things out with him! This whole situation seemed to go against who I am. I am the type of person who does what they want, when they want, and never has a problem approaching anyone! but this whole situation was different, only because it involved him and I was to shy to make the first move and we all knew that one!! So I just hinted and hinted for about well let's just say 45 minutes, that day! I figured if he doesn't ask me today, there was no way he was ever going to ask. 2
So there I was sitting there talking to him and only him. I was screaming at the screen, "ASK ME ALREADY!" and then he said it... HE ASKED ME! 6 simple words that I had been dying to here, "will you go out with me?" of course, I was freakin out when he asked and I kinda kept him waiting for a few minutes while I jumped around and screamed! Then, I left him there all alone while I went and called Randi! I was pumped! I had waited for this... even wrote poems about my feelings towards him. (http://allpoetry.com/Poem/838044 -one of them) and finally it was reality! we were together! Nothing was weird, it was like we were supposed to be together from the beginning! Still does today, almost 9 months later!3
Author notes
yeah... here ya go! my first short story attempt... i know there's a lot of work that needs to be done, just dunno what it is exactly... so help me find it
haha... Be very critical please! I CAN TAKE IT! HAHA
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This was great especially for a first attempt. Your words were great and you conveyed the emotions you were feeling very well. Your sentance structure needs some help, now I am not a english boffin so I can't really help. Maybe speek to amaranth816 she is great with things like grammer and sentance structure. She can tell you way more about it. Anyway great job.
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AWWW... This is such a sweet story!!! I really like this story!!!
... It makes me happy that it is so happy!!!
Beth -
I'm really happy for you two. Honestly.
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awesome
hey amanda i always wondered how you and michael got together...now i know
this was really good and sweet. i thought that the idea of this being a short story was good you dont gotta change anything about it so dont worry great job keep it up!
love always,
Jenn -
great virtue...
This is sweet it shows a great virtue
More of a story but all in 1 the same
You gave it your heart and i aplaud heart felt truths
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Hey amanda wow this was very great and touching to read this is awesome good job
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Hmmm...is it true? If so, CONGRATS!! I think for your first short story you did a very good job. -Raye
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lol, im guessing this is like a prologue? its a good start, and now i guess back intime to how you met, how you grew, how you became closer, how he asked you! etc, lol. i did the same with my story Death of My Angel. nice write hope to read more! l8az sky xxxxx
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