Is your heart too vital for seeing
Or your mind too nervous, and set for thinking
Is the world too big for grand surprises
Or is it too small for shrinking?1
Do you know
There's no one truth
There's no one separation
Nor a single soul to take
From miles of preparation2
Do you smile
If you've known all the while
Or do you pull your hair with grief
Or do you fly above the skies
Dreaming, or in your sleep?3
Is your life to beautiful for saving
Or is it not very grand at all --
Is it just a marvelous game worth playing
One that you always get up when you fall--4
Do you dream
If you know you have seen
The negatives of your nightmares
Do you feel
The need to kneel
Or do you grin, and fight them?
Author notes
Written for the contest. ^.^
A contest entry
- The poetry invasion QUALIFYING ROUND (reopened) by DemApples.
100 points, ended April 17, 21 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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ok i'll give you a shot at round two
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Pretty Poem
Lovely piece of work you have here
. It has a nice flow to it, and the descriptions give it an almost...delicate feel. I loved the line "Is your life (too) beautiful for saving". I think it's sooo pretty!
Anyway, there were a few errors that interrupted the poem, which were:
"Is the world to big for grand (surprises)"
"Do you know
There's no one truth
There's no one separation" (Hmmm, I don't understand what you're trying to say with this?)
That's it, really only minor things. Great job, and keep up the good work!
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Hmm, thank you for the thoughtful comment!
Oh my, I did spell that wrong, didn't I?
Thanks -- I probably wouldn't have noticed it.
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I forgot to say I really liked the ending
Because I do
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Ahhh
This is refreshing
Just gives you a clean feeling
I really like this
It has a good flow
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Thanks a lot! I appreciate it.
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